Unit8LiteratureWritingWorkshopAContinuationofaStory

高二英語組

張崇

該部分為讀后寫作課，以本單元的兩篇閱讀文本出發鍛煉學生讀后續寫能力，文章根據Lesson3

20,OO0LeaguesUndertheSea原始文本出發，構建讀后續寫。思維圖示以及情節發展脈絡，以第一人稱的口吻敘述了登上潛艇之后與船上海員之間的對話，尊重原文，在理解原文的故事情節基礎上行文，并拾當延續了原始文木的時態、語態，將主人公的感官、動作以及內心理動描寫淋離盡致。學生要在進行一定練習之后，對Lesson1TheLastLeaf進行讀后續寫，引導學生發散思維，提高學生閱讀語篇以及對文本進行深度加工的能力。單元設計目錄CONTENT01020304ToreadandtalkaboutAContinuationof20,000LeauesUndertheSeaToanalysethestructureandlanguageofcontinuationTonoticemymapofthecontinuationTowriteacontinuationofastoryWordsandPhrases1．continue

→________adj.繼續的，延續的；___________n.延續，

繼續部分2．painn.__________adj.痛苦的

；___________adv痛苦地

3．__________________________在監獄中4．narrate________n陳述者

5．__________________________把...視為理所當然6．________________默默地

7．__________________________非常認真地continuationcontinuouspainfulintheprisoninsilencewithgreatattentionpainfullynarratortakesthforgrantedWarming-upWhathappenedinthestory“TheLastLeaf”?2Whatmighthappennext?3Whatisimportantincontinuingastory?Youaregoingtowriteacontinuationofthestory“TheLastLeaf”.Discussthequestionswithyourpartner.ReadforWritingReadacontinuationof20,000LeaguesUndertheSea.Answerthequesions.Wheredidthispartofthestoryhappen?2Whatdidthenarratormeet?WhatdidNedthinkwouldhappentothem?Howisthecontinuationconcenctedwiththeoriginalstory?ReadforWriting1.Wheredidthispartofthestoryhappen?2.Whatdidthenarratormeet?3.WhatdidNedthinkwouldhappentothem?4.Howisthecontinuationconnectedwiththeoriginalstory?Ithappenedinsidethesubmarine.Thenarratormettwoseamenofthesubmarine.Theywoulddie.Itusesthesamecharactersastheoriginalstory,andittellswhathappensnext.ReadforWritingMyStoryMapCharacters:Setting:Theplot:Readagain.Identifythecharacters,thesettingandtheplotofthestory.Theywerenervousinthemachine.Thentwoseamencameandcheckedtheircondition,providedwateranddrybiscuitsandofferedtotakethemhome,buttheydidn’tbelievethat.inthemachine,rightafterNed,Conseiland“I”wererescuedI;Ned;Conseil;twoseamenReadforWritingWrite2-3sentencesasthecontinuationof“TheLastLeaf”.UsesimilarexpressionsintheSentenceBuilderthatmakethedescriptionvividandlively.Continuation(2-3sentences)ReadforWritingJohnsywaslostinguilt.

Johnsy

and

Sue

sat

behindthewindowgazingatthelastleafthatMr.Behrmanhadpaintedwithtearsinsilence.Thentheylookedateachothersadly.ComposeYourWritingDrawastorymapforyourcontinuationof“TheLastLeaf”.Makesureyourcontinuationiscoherentwiththeoriginalstory.ComposeYourWritingMyStoryMapTitleThespiritneverdiesSettingathree-storybuildinginGreenwichVillage,afterMr.BehrmanpassedawayCharactersJohnsyandSueNewplotJohnsyandSueworkedharderinartafterMr.Behrmandied.Theydecidedtogetoninlifeandsharethistouchingstorywithpeople.ThedevelopmentofthestoryWiththeircontinuoushardwork,theysuccessfullyheldanartexhibitionoftheirpaintingsandsomeremainingworksfromMr.Behrman.EndingThelocalnewspaperreportedaboutthis.Somerichmenboughttheirworks.JohnsyandSueraisedacharitytosupportpoorpeoplewithpneumonia.ComposeYourWritingUseyourstorymapandtheWritingHelptowritethefirstdraft.ComposeYourWritingComposeYourWritingDoesthewritercontinuethestorybasedonanunderstandingofthesetting,thecharactersandtheplotoftheoriginalstory?Doesthecontinuationstartwithareasonablenewplot?Doesthewriterincludeenoughsensorydetails,actionsandthoughts?Doesthewritercreatedialoguesthatsoundrealandnatural?AcontinuationofaStoryEdityourstorycontinuationinpairs.Drawamapforyourcontinuationof“20,000LeaguesUndertheSea”.讀后續寫的高考評分標準

評分標準：1.本題總分為25分，按5個檔次給分。2.評分時，先根據所續寫內容和語言（詞匯語法、篇章結構）等考慮。（1）與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接程度；（2）內容的合理性；（3）應用語法結構和詞匯的豐富性和準確性；（4）上下文的連貫性；3.先根據作答的整體情況確定其所屬檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來衡量、確定或調整檔次，最后給分。4.評分時還應注意：（1）拼寫與標點符號是寫作規范的重要方面，評分時應視其對交際的影響程度予以考慮，英美拼寫均可接受；5.書寫較差，以至影響交際，可將分數降低一個檔次；6.詞數少于130的，從總分中減去2分。

v使用多樣化的語法結構，使用高級詞匯表達，并在此基礎上保證準確性。力爭“升檔”，嚴防“掉檔”續寫內容與所給段首句和短文有合理的銜接。保證所寫情節的合理性有效地使用語句間的連接成分，短文結構緊湊。有最低字數要求，但無明確上限，建議不超過180詞拼寫、標點及試卷的整潔度會影響整體得分。第二課時LanguagePoints1.Icouldn'tsaywhereIwas,norcouldIimagine.本句為“nor十助動詞／系動詞／情態動詞＋主語“構成的部分倒裝結構。(l)“nor/neither十助動詞／系動詞／情態動詞＋主語”構成倒裝句型，意為“……也不這樣”,表示某人或某物也有前面說過的情況（否定情況）。(2)“so十助動詞／系動詞／情態動詞＋主語”構成倒裝句型，為＂……也是如此＂，表示某人或某物也有前面說過的情況（肯定情況）。(3)“so＋主語＋助動詞／系動詞／情態動詞”，意為＂……的確如此＂，表示說話人同意對方的觀點或對上文內容加以強調或肯定。(4)如果前面句子的謂語既有肯定又有否定，或者有兩個謂語時，就用句型Soitis/was

with..．或Itis/wasthesamewith...。1.Icouldn'tsaywhereIwas,norcouldIimagine.(1)

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Hisbossisnotsatisfiedwiththedisappointingresult.—他的老板對這個令人失望的結果不滿意。_______________________________________________.—湯姆也不滿意。(2)

MybrothersawthemovieTheWanderingEarthduringthespringfestival,and________________________________.我哥哥在春節期間看了電影《流浪地球》，我也是。(3)

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JackisverycrazyaboutChineseculture

andfolkmusic.—杰克對中國文化和民族音樂非常癡迷。

—____________and_______________.

—他的確如此，你也是。(4)

Heisverycleverbuthedoesn'tworkhard;_________________hissister

/________________hissister.他很聰明，但不努力，他姐姐也是這樣。Nor/NeitherisTomsodidISoheissoareyouitisthesamewithsoitiswith2.Thencamethesoundofaheavydooropening,andtwoseamenappeared.(1)

out、in、into、down、up、away、then、now、here、there等表示方位和時間的副詞以及表示地點的介詞短語置于句首，且主語是名詞時，句子用完全倒裝。(2)

當作表語的形容詞、分詞提到系動詞前時，句子也要全部倒裝，構成“形容詞／分詞＋系動詞＋主語”的結構。(l)

Wewereonourwayhome,butsuddenlydown_____________(pour)therain!(2)

Amongthecrisesthatfacehumans________(be)thelackofnaturalresources.(3)

Inalecturehallofauniversity

inEngland_________________.(坐著教授)(改寫成完全倒裝句)pouredissataprofessor3.Wehavesurvivedworsethanthis！(1)Afterall,noteveryonehasrealisedthatwildlifehasthoughts,feelings,andmostimportantly,equalrights_________(survive).(2)

BaptisteDubanchetisbikingacrossEurope,survivingentirely________discardedfood.(3)Themagementobjectivesofthebusinesscanbesummarizedas________(survive),developmentandprofitability.tosurviveonsurvivala5.Icameintoadultlifecluelessabouta

lotofthingsthatmostpeopletakeforgranted.(1)

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IfeelsonervousabouttheNationalEnglishSpeechCompetitiontomorrow.我對明天的全國英語演講比賽感到很緊張。__________________________.放松些。(2)

_________________.—it'sjusta

shortdistancefromheretotherestaurant.別著急，從這兒到餐館只有很短一段距離。(3)

Don't

jokewithLinda;

she__________everythingfartoo____________.不要和琳達開玩笑，她對待每件事都過于認真。TakeiteasyTakeyourtimetakesseriously6.EventhoughIforgiveyoupersonally,forthesake

ofthe

honourofmyfamilyIcannotacceptyourapology.(1)

Pleaseforgiveme__________interrupting,butIreallydon'tagreewiththat.(2)

Forgiveothers,andyou_________________(forgive).(3)Later,inthehospital,Hendersonsawhisfriend.Heapologizedandaskedfor_______________(forgive).forwillbeforgivenforgivenessforgive強調不懷有絲亳怨恨的原諒，強調內心的寬恕

excuse指原諒較輕微的過錯、失禮等，不涉及處理或懲罰?易混辨析I.

隨堂練習1.

TheMaynumberofthemagazinewillcontainanexciting___________

(繼續部分)ofthe

story.2.

Allofusgot_____________(上船),thoughthe

boatwascrowded.3.

Thenewchairswillenabletheaudiencetositin____________(舒適)whilewatchingthe

shows.4.

Hisworkemphasizedthe______________(情感的)as

well as

the physical

well-being

ofchildren.5.

Ifplasticandrubberareburnt,they'llgive

off____________(有毒的)gases.continuationaboardemotionalpoisonous6.

Ishallnever________（原諒）myselffor

failingtohelpyouwhenyou