1、學習資料收集于網絡,僅供參考 PEP學校英語六年級上冊各單元作文范例及點評2022-05-15 00:11:03 轉載 標簽：分類： 英文學習雜談Li Ying S HobbyLi Ying likes English very much. She works hard at it. She reads English every morning. She likes speaking English. She often listens to the radio. She watches TV only on Saturday evening. Does she like dancing.

2、No, she doesnt. But she likes drawing and singing. Her parents love her. And all the teachers and her friends like her, too. She says her hobbies make her happy. 【要領點評】這一篇寫愛好的文章 ,小作者的寫作思路很值得我們學習,他沒有詳細寫到劉瑩的某一種愛好 學習資料,而是從學習到課余學習資料收集于網絡,僅供參考 的多種愛好入手 ,對劉瑩的各種愛好進行了粗線條地勾畫 .從“愛好 ”這個角度來看劉瑩的話,我們會覺得這個形象很 飽滿；小伴

3、侶們寫這種 “敘事寫人 ”作文時,可以從兩個角度下 手：一是詳細地描畫；二是和上面小伴侶一樣,粗線條地 勾畫,二者各有所長,另處在行文中使用一些問句,使用 一些轉述的話,可以使作文更有靈氣,防止了平鋪直敘的缺點；比如上文的 “ Does she likedancing. No, she doesnt. ”和“ she says her hobbies make her happy. 就是特別不錯的句子,使讀者眼前為之一亮；Dont be against the traffic rulesI go to school from Monday to Friday .I go to school b

4、y bike at 7:30 in the morning .I must cross two busy roads .If the traffic light is red or yellow,I know I cant cross the road ,so I wait. If the light turns green, I know it means “ Go” , and walk across the road .I always ride on the right side of the road .I am never against the traffic rules. 學習

5、資料學習資料收集于網絡,僅供參考【要領點評】這篇作文的題目是 “不要違反交通規章 ”,小作者沒有說一些空話,而是從自己的經受寫起,表達自己以什么方式去上學,在上學的路上是怎么做的,很形象；小伴侶們在作文時留意不要圖大,那樣很簡單使文章顯得空洞,而要寫自己身邊熟識的事情；要留意行文中字母的大小寫、句子的標點符號等；I Love My FamilyHere is a photo lf my family. These are four people in my family. They are my father, my mother, my brother and I. My father is

6、 a doctor. He works in a hospital far away. He goes to work by subway. My mother is a teacher. She works in a school near my home. She goes to work by bike. After work, they like reading books. Who is the tall boy. He is my brother. He is five years older than me. He is a singer. Henow in Beijing. H

7、e goes there by plane. 學習資料學習資料收集于網絡,僅供參考I love my family. 【要領點評】一個平凡的題材,一篇生動的作文；這樣的命題,我們 可能面對幾次,甚至幾十次了；但這位小伴侶的筆端很是 靈活,了了數言,讓一個幸福的家庭躍然紙上,很值得我 們去摸索,我們能做到嗎？小伴侶的這篇作文除了語言美麗之外,在結構上也有閃 光之處；先總說,將自己的家人逐個介紹一遍,后分說,把家人的工作、上班方式,愛好一一細說；最終以一句話 進行概括,起到點題的作用；我們在寫類似的作文的時候 是不是也可以借鑒呢？How to get to the science museumWe

8、 are going to the science museum tomorrow. There is an old thing show in the Museum. Do you know how we can get to the science museum. 學習資料學習資料收集于網絡,僅供參考The science museum is next to the Peoples Park. Itfar from our school. So we can go there on foot .Walk straight to the west from our school, next

9、turn left at the post office and walk for about 5 minutes, then turn right at traffic lights. You can find the Peoples Park on the right . Walk straight, and you ll see the science museum.【要領點評】這篇作文的題目是 “怎樣去科學博物館 ”；怎樣才算是一 篇好作文呢？通過你的表達, 能讓別人很簡單找到博物館,這應是最基本的要求；小作者在文中告知我們什么呢？首先他寫了去博物館的位置,最終濃墨重彩,指明從學校去博

10、物館的詳細路線,這條路線夠清晰吧！小伴侶們在寫這類作文的時候,總有些無從下手的感 覺,不知從何說起；其實介紹路線,無非就是告知他人某 學習資料學習資料收集于網絡,僅供參考 段路的起點和終點,仍有就是如何從起點走到終點；要給 他人說清晰, 你自己第一得清晰, 然后再通過自己的表達,將路線清清晰楚得出現出來；肯定要留意行文中一些關鍵 的地方,如在哪兒轉彎,向哪兒轉,經過哪些重要的交通 標志或惹眼的標志建筑等；這樣,你就能說清,別人也能 弄明白；Planting TreesIt s spring. Its time to plant trees.I want to plant a tree in o

11、ur garden. Dad and Mum are very happy. They like green. Dad helps me plant the tree. First, we dig the soil. Then I put a little tree into the soil. Next I water it. I am so excited and I wait for the tree to grow. Two weeks later, my tree has some little leaves. I water it every day. Now it has lot

12、s of leaves. It grows fast. We should plant more trees. They make our world beautiful. 學習資料學習資料收集于網絡,僅供參考【要領點評】小作者寫了一次植樹的經受, 但他并沒有單純拘泥于植 樹的過程；既有過程,也有感覺,能使文章打動讀者,給 人以啟示；作文的最終一段就特別好,兩句話勝似千言萬 語；我們可以學習一下這種寫法；既描述過程,又適時提自己的看法或想法的寫法,在作文 中叫做 “夾敘夾議 ” ,描述過程為了提出一種思想服務,提出 看法或想法使原本平實的描述有了意義；我們在以后的寫 作中也可以試一試；Let

13、s have a nice day學習資料學習資料收集于網絡,僅供參考It s Sunday tomorrow .Im going to the bookstore with my friends tomorrow morning .We are going to look for some good books .We all like reading books .We are going to eat our lunch at the restaurant. I like chicken, beef and vegetables .After lunch, we are going to the Summer Palace by bus. We are going to play near the Kunming Lake. Maybe we are going to row a boat on the lake .Wow, that will be relaxing. We are coming back at 5pm. 【要領點評】怎樣才稱得上是 “美好的一天 ”？有兩點不能遺忘, 一是 支配得充實,二是支配得有意義；這兩點小作者無疑都想到了,上午去書店看書買書,中午在飯店吃飯,下午去頤和園玩耍、劃船,豐富多彩！文章以時