高考專題復習:寫作(六)高考寫作之人物介紹1.性別與婚姻（Sex&Marriage）I’mamanoffortyandhavea9-year-olddaughter.Shegotmarriedin1980andnowshehasbeen

marriedformorethan20years.I’m35,maleandunmarried.IgotmarriedfiveyearsagobutnowI’msingle.Heisatallman,withblueeyesandblondhair.1.她是一個圓臉,大眼睛,皓齒長發的可愛的女孩.2.他又瘦又高戴著一副深度近視鏡.3.他是一個很好看的男人,留著濃密的小胡子但是卻沒有頭發.4.他是一個高個子男人,有著藍眼睛黃頭發.Sheisalovelygirl,witharoundface,bigeyes,

whiteteethandlongwavinghair.Heisthin,tallandwearingapairofthickglasses.Heisagood-looking/funny-lookingman,withathickmoustachebutnohairleft.3.外貌特征（Appearance）deep-seteyes,bigbrighteyes,longstraightnose,browncurlinghair,broadshoulders,4.身高（Height）Heis1.76meterstall.

Heis176centimeterstall.

Heis176centimetersinheight.

Theboyisnottallenoughtoreachtheappleoverhead.

Heisreallyatallman,about1.98metersinheight.

Myheightis1.76metres.(不合英語習慣)

I’m1.76metershigh.（身高不宜用high）5.健康狀況（Health）1)由于被照顧的很好,孩子們看上去很健康.2)我身體不強壯,但是很健康.3)住了六周的院,現在她看上去很虛弱.Welllookedafter,thechildrenlookhealthy.I’mnotsostrong,but(I’m)ingoodhealth.Havingbeeninhospitalforsixmonths,nowshe

looksveryweak.7.特長愛好（Specialty&Hobbies）我很擅長口語,計算機是我的強項.我在去年的英語演講競賽中獲得了第一名.他在網葉設計大賽中獲得了第一名.我最喜歡的運動是游泳和打乒乓.在我的業余時間里,我喜歡讀書和旅游.I’mgoodatspokenEnglishandevenbetteratusing

computers.IwonthefirstprizeintheEnglishspeechcontestatschoollastyear.Hegotthefirstplaceinthehomepagedesigning

contest.Myfavoritesportisswimmingandplayingtable-tennis.Inmysparetime,Ilikereadingandenjoyingtraveling.

.⑤Shegetsonwellwithalmostanyoneandis

alwayswelcomewherevershegoes.●寫人1.她是一個12歲的女孩.2.她又高又苗條大眼睛卷頭發.3.她善良而且樂于助人,隨時準備幫助別人.4.在他的業余時間里她大都聽音樂讀小說.5.她幾乎和每一個人都能很好的相處,無論去哪都受人歡迎.①Sheisagirloftwelveyearsold.②Sheistallandslimwithbigeyesandcurlyhair.③Beingkindandhelpfulshealwaysenjoyshelpingothersout.④Inhersparetimeshespendsmuchtime

listeningtomusicandreadingnovels.8.詳細特色（Somethingindetail）舉例法（Givingexamples）:–Hewasstrictwitheverybodyandineverythinghedid.Oneday,wewerehavingclasseswhen…–Hewasveryforgetful.Oncehecameacrossanoldfriendofhisinthestreetand...–Hehadastrangewayofmakinghisclasseslivelyandinteresting.Istillremembermyfirstdayasachemistrystudent.

Maryisaclevergirlwith

goodmanners.Sheisalwaysreadytohelpothersandthereforegetsalongverywellwithherclassmates.

HavingaspecialinterestinChinese,shespeaksitverywell.Maryisalsogoodatmathsanddoesalotofexerciseseveryday.Sheenjoysdoingexperimentsinchemistrylabs,butsometimessheneedstobemore

careful.Inallthesubjects,physicsisthemostfavoriteonetoherandsheisoneofthebestinthissubject.Shealwaystriesherbesttomakebetterprogressandthingsbetter.

Alltheteacherslikeherverymuch.Signature:WangMing寫作練習李濤是我校年輕的老教師。他被看作是老教師，是因為他教化學課已經有20年了。說他年輕，因為他今年還不過38歲。他長得較瘦。頭上頭發不多，灰白了。他戴著深度眼鏡，牙齒又缺了2顆。所以他看上去比他實際年齡要大。他說，在公共汽車上常常有人給他讓座。事實上。我曾看見他不止一次地給懷抱嬰兒的婦女讓過座。只要聽一聽他的化學課——那課又生動又有趣，你就會發現他真正的年齡。AteacherLiTaoisayoungteacherinourschool.He

isregardedas

beingoldforhehasbeenteachingherefor20years.Heisseen,atthesametime,asbeingyoungasheisnowbut38yearsold.Hedoesn’thavemuchhaironthehead.Anditisnearlyallwhite.Missingtwoteethandwearingthickglasses,helooksolderthanhereallyis.Hesayspeopleoftenoffertheirseats

to

himforhisoldlooks.Onthe

contrary,Imyselfsawhimgiveuphisseattoawomanwithababyinherarms.Atleasttwicehedidso.Whenyouattendhisinterestingandlivelyclasses,youwillbesureofhisrealagestillyoung.

MynameisLiHua.IwasborninDalian,LiaoningprovinceinFebruary1977.Istartedschoolin1984whenIwasseven.IstudiedinGuangmingPrimarySchoolfrom1984to1990.AfterthatIwenttoNo.62MiddleSchoolofDalianandgraduatedthissummer.ThemainsubjectsIstudiedatschoolincludedChinese,English,physics,chemistryandcomputer.IlikecomputerandEnglishbestandIamverygoodatthem.Lastyear,Iwonfirstprizeintheschoolcomputercompetition.InmysparetimeIenjoylisteningtopopularmusicandcollectingstamps.Myfavoritesportsareswimminginsummerandskatinginwinter.劉華是我市去年的高考狀元，被北京大學錄取。假若你是她的好朋友，請你介紹一下她的情況。要點如下：1.有目標（考取北大）有信心；2.有周密計劃，知道每天干什么；3.有良好的學習習慣，不拖拉，不開夜車；4.樂意助人，同學和老師都喜歡她；5.你從她身上學習了許多東西，對你有很大幫助。注意事項：1.要按要點進行寫作，根據行文需要，內容可不分先后。2.不要逐條翻譯，根據行文需要可適當增加細節。LiuHua,agoodfriendofmine,isnowquitewellknownbecauseshetookthefirstplaceintheentranceexaminationandwasenrolledbyBeijingUniversitylastyear.Iamproudofherandenjoyhersuccess.Whenshestudiedinthemiddleschoolweoftenexchangedlearningexperience,soIknowclearlywhyshewasabletoachievesuchasuccess.

Firstofall,shehadahighgoal---goingtoBeijingUniversityandwasfullofconfidence.Sheusuallyhadadetailedplanforherstudyandknewwhatsheshoulddoeveryday.Themostimportantisthatshehadagoodhabitofstudyandneverstayedtoolateintonightorlefttoday'sworkfortomorrow.Shenotonlystudiedhardbutalsowasreadytohelpothers.Bothteachersandherclassmateslikedherverymuch.Ialsolearnedalotfromher,whichhelpedmemuch,especiallywithmystudy.SoIbelievehergoalismygoal,hertodayismytomorrow.組句成文的各種關系的過度詞語；并列and;aswellas;also;選擇or;either—or;orelse;otherwise原因because;owingto;dueto;onaccountof;結果so;therefore;thus;asaresult時間when;soonafter;before;later;first;andthen;next;finally;afterwards.比較onthecountry;ontheotherhand;like轉折but;yet;however;although;inspiteof;instead;遞進besides;moreover;even;inaddition舉例forexample/instance;suchas;thatis;namely;總結afterall;inshort;ingeneral;generallyspeakingAdverbsAdverbsTherefore;otherwise;furthermore;Thus;finally;moreover;namely;besides;although;afterwards;however;personally;Letter–writing信頭信內地址、姓名稱呼事由正文結束語簽名附言、附件（Enc:/Encl:)書信正面發信人姓名收信人性名郵票信封背面發信人姓名Diary日記WednesdayMay5thCloudyItisnearlyamonthsinceIbegankeepingdiaries.IfinditaverygoodexerciseinEnglishcomposition.IgotbackmyessayonAVisittothePark.ItwasmarkedwithA.Therewereonlythreemistakesinit:oneingrammarandtwoinidiom.I’mhappytoseethatIcannowexpressmyselfinEnglishmoreusuallythaneverbefore.,作文的評價怎樣才算是一篇好的書面表達呢？兩個關鍵:1)用詞造句：盡可能運用比較熟悉的詞組、短語或成語；從句式上，力求變換各種句式。2)行文連貫，運用恰當的連接詞,使文章結構嚴密具有較強的邏輯性。Howtojudgethelevelsofthecomposition?15

評分原則1☆

本題總分為15分，按5個檔次給分2☆

評分時，先根據文章的內容和語言初步確定其所屬檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來衡量，確定或調整檔次，最后給分。3☆詞數少于50或多于100的，從總分中減去1分。4☆

評分時，應注意表達內容、所用詞匯和語法結構的表述是否準確、上下文是否連貫及語言表達是否得體。5☆單詞拼寫與標點符號是語言準確性的一個方面，評分時，應視其對表述的影響程度予以考慮。6☆如書寫較差，影響表述，將分數降低一個檔次。16第五檔（13~15分）●完全完成了試題所規定的任務。●應用了正確的語法結構和詞匯，沒有或有1~2處錯誤（為盡力使用較復雜結構或較高級詞匯所致）如：拼寫、標點、大小寫等；具備較強的語言能力。●有效使用了詞語間的連接成分，使全文結構緊湊，達到了預期的寫作目的。17第四檔（10~12分）●完成了試題所規定的任務。●應用的語法結構和詞匯能滿足任務的要求，有3~4處不影響全文意思的錯誤。●應用簡單的語句間連接成分，使全文內容結構緊湊，達到了預期的寫作目的。18第三檔（7~9分）◆基本完成了試題所規定的任務。◆應用的語法結構和詞匯基本能滿足任務的要求，有5~6處錯誤，但不影響理解。◆應用簡單的語句間連接成分，使全文內容連貫。整體而言，基本達到了預期的寫作目的。

19第二檔（4~6分）▲未恰當完成試題所規定的任務。▲語法結構單調，詞匯項目有限，錯誤較多，影響了對寫作內容的理解。▲較少使用語句間的連接成分，內容缺少連貫性，信息未能清楚地傳達給讀者。

20第一檔（0~3分）●未完成試題所規定的任務●有一些和內容要求相關的詞匯或短語，通篇語法結構錯誤●所寫內容與所要求內容無關或無法辨認●空白卷21Writeaconcisepassage

usefewwordsexpressclearmeaningTomisfouryearsoldandheisenergetic.Onedayabikewasgiventohim.Thebikeisnewanditisalightblueincolor.Tomreceivedthebikeforhisbirthday.Hestruggledtoridehisbike.Hestruggledfortwohours.However,hewasunsuccessfulinridingthebike.ComparethetwopassagesFour-year-oldTomisenergetic.Oneday,hegotalightbluebikeforhisbirthday.Hestruggledfortwohourstorideit,buthewasunsuccessful.Tomisfouryearsoldandheisenergetic.Onedayabike

wasgiventohim.Thebikeisnewanditisalightblueincolor.Tomreceivedthebikeforhisbirthday.Hestruggledtoridehisbike.Hestruggledfortwohours.However,hewasunsuccessfulinridingthebike.OutstandingConcise(best)wordybetterImprovethewordysentence(I)1.TherearemanyPeoplehuntinganimalsforlivinginthemountain2.AgirllikesChinesefoodbetter.3.Theemployeewithangerquarreledwithhisboss.4.Inthenottoofarfuture,ourdreamswillcometrue.5.Hegaveupschoolonconditionofthereasonthatitwasnecessaryforhimtosupporthisfamily.(angry)(prefer)(hunters)(near)(because)Summaryone:

changephrases

intosinglewords

improvethewordysentence(II)1.Hisfamilyliveinavillagewhichisnearariver2.Thehouse,whichwasnewlybuiltisverylarge.

3.PeoplewhoareinterestedinthejobmustsendyourresumetoourcompanybeforeFriday.4.Wewillhavethepartyinthegardenwhichisonthetopofthemainbuilding.5.Whileheiswaitingforthebus,healwaysrecitestexts.(Thenewly-builthouseisverylarge)(PeopleinterestedinthejobmustsendyourresumetoourcompanybeforeFriday.)(Wewillhavethepartyinthegardenonthetopofthemainbuilding.)(WhilewaitingforthebusorWaitingfor…)(Hisfamilyliveinavillagenearariver)Summarytwo:

Changeunnecessaryclausesintophrasesimprovethewordypart(III)1.AletterwassentbyMrs.Smith.

2.Yourluggagewillbecheckedbyacustomofficialandthenapasscardwillbegiventoyou.3.Thegiftsshouldbewrappedupandwrittenafewwordsofbestwishesonbyyou.(Mrs.Smithsentaletter)

(Acustomofficialwillcheckyourluggageandgiveyouapasscard)(Youshouldwrapupthegiftsandwriteafewwordsofbestwishesonthem.)SummaryThree:

Changeuselesspassiveintoactive

changephrasesintosinglewordsChangeunnecessaryclausesintophrasesChangeuselesspassiveintoactive

Summaries:

Improvethefollowingsentence(1)

1.AlthoughChineseisregularlyusedbystudents,acloseandcompletestudyofthesubjectisseldomtakenbythem.

(AlthoughstudentsregularlyuseChinese,theyseldomtakeacloseandcompletestudyofthesubject.)2.IamfamiliarwiththefarmerswhoareplanningtoattendthemeetingwhichisfixedfornextFriday.Improvethesentence(2)

(IamfamiliarwiththefarmersplanningtoattendthemeetingfixedfornextFriday)3.Thedecisionthatwasreachedbythecommitteewastoputoffthevote.(Thecommitteereachedthedecisiontoputoffthevote.)(Thecommitteedecidedtoputoffthevote)Improvethesentence(3)Makethepassageshortandclear

We’resogladyouwilljoininourpicnicwhichwillbeheldinthePeople’sPark.Hereishowwecanbefound:Afteryougointothepark,walkontillyouseeariver.Crossitandmakeaturntowardstheright.Thenahillwillbeseenbyyou.Walkaroundtotheothersideofthehill,andalakewillbefoundbyyou.Wewillhaveourpicnicinthesmallwoodwhichisbythelake.Iamsureyouwillhavenotroubleinfindingus.

We’resogladyouwilljoininourpicnic

whichwillbe

heldinthePeople’sPark.

Hereishow

wecanbefound:Afteryou

gointo

thepark,walkontillyouseeariver.Crossitand

makeaturntowardstheright,then

ahillwillbeseenbyyou.Walkaroundtotheothersideofthehill,and

alakewillbefoundbyyou.Wewillhaveourpicnicinthesmallwood

whichis

bythelake.Iamsureyouwillfindus

withoutanydifficulty.Haveyoufoundit?BuildupaconcisepassageRequirements:Writeastoryaboutdog.Usethefirstperson:e.g.myparents,mysister…3.Writeconciselyandclearly.4.100wordsorso.狀語Iusedtohavetoworkevenatweekends,doingendlesshomeworkandattendingclassesaswell.

2.Theyputinaboutthesameamountoftimelisteningtomusicandworkingonthecomputer.狀語3.However,otherstudentsareagainsttheidea,sayingthattheBeijingZoo,builtin1906,hasahistoryof100years.

4.Chattingonline,studentscanmorefreelyexpresstheirfeelingsandopinions.狀語5.Pointingtoapolicemannotfaraway,theyoungmanexplained.6.Howgladweweretoseethecropsandvegetablesgrowingwell!7.Havingheardthesewords,hisfacewentred.

8.I’mverysorrytohavemadesomuchnoise.

狀語9.Whentakingexaminations,theysometimescheatinordertogetbetterresultstopleasetheirparentsandteachers.

主語Chargingentrancefeeswillnodoubtkeepsomepeopleaway.

2.StudentshadadiscussionaboutwhetheritisnecessarytostartlearningEnglishfromchildhood.

3.ItwillbeveryeasyforthemtomixPinyinandEnglishup

.

補語ThenIsawayellowcardriveupThirdStreetandmakearightturnintoParkRoad.

2.Abotanicalgardenwillbebuiltforustovisitandpracticein.定語Oncetherewasafamilylivinginacabinunderahugetree.

2.Therewasanoldma