1、2020高中英語新高考書面表達讀后續寫"布丁和自尊”指導與解讀麗In a certain store where they sell puddings, a number of these delicious things are laid out in a row during the Christinas season. Here you may select the one which is most to your taste, and you are even allowed to sample them before coming to a decision.I have

2、 often wondered whether some people, who had no intention of making a purchase, would take advantage of this privilege. One day I asked this question to the shop girL and I learned it was indeed the case.“Now there's one old gentleman, for instance/1 she told me, “he conies here almost every wee

3、k and samples each one of the puddings, though he never buys anything, and I suspect he never will. I remember him from last year before that, too. WelL let him come if he wants it, and welcome to it.”She was still speaking when an elderly gentleman limped （跛行）up to the counter and began looking clo

4、sely at the row of puddings with great interest.“Why, thafs the very gentleman Pve been telling you about J whispered the shop girl. uJust watch him now.” And then turning to him: "Would you like to sample them, sir? Here's spoon fbr you to use.”The elderly gentleman, who was poorly but nea

5、tly dressed, accepted the spoon and began eagerly to sample one after another of the puddings, only braking off occasionally to wipe his red eyes with a large torn handkerchief.“This is quite good71“This is not bad either, but a little too heavy.”All the time it was quite evident that he sincerely b

6、elieved that he might eventually buy one of these puddings, and I am positive that he did not for a moment feel that he was in any way cheating the store. Poor old chap! Probably he had come down in the world and this sampling was all that was left him from the time when he could afford to come and

7、select his favorite pudding.注意：1 .所續寫短文的詞數應為150左右；2 .至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；3 .續寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4 .續寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。Paragraph 1:In a burst of benevolence （善舉）I went up to him and said:"Pardon me, sir, would you mind me purchasing you one of these puddings?”Paragraph 2:The girl started to

8、 make a parcel of it, while he pulled out a worn little black pocketbook.一.文章的人物分析I, the gentleman, the shop girl搞清楚每個人的性格特點：I: kindThe gentleman: lovely, kindThe shop girl: kind二、立意立意的分析是要結合兩段的開頭，第二段續寫開頭說老人自己掏出錢包，說 明他拒絕了我的好意，同時結合每次他都是免費品嘗布丁，可以推測老人意識到 別人可能看不起他的這種行為了，這就是文章的主題：自尊的傷害。三、如何行文任何記敘文的續寫千萬不要

9、把情節搞得太復雜，3-5句把續寫主要情節構思說 清楚。這是因為：高考的讀后續寫的一個重要評分指標就是看細節描寫。細節描The girl started to make a parcel of it. while he pulled out a worn little black pocketbook.（接下來的動作描寫要伴隨心理活動:怎么拿出錢：怎么放錢）The gentleman began to fumble about in the pocketbook for coins, an expression of seriousness on his face. He placed the

10、coins on the counter so gracefully and carefully one by one. His chin rose in a proud gesture after doing it.（我的心理活動） I was so overwhelmed by my guilt and shame. How I wished I could unsay the foolish words!（目送）Then all of us watched him stagger to the door and leave silently. Never have I seen him

11、go there to sample the puddings any more.對教學的啟發：積累各種細節描寫的好詞好句，然后進行微技能寫作。上面的細節描寫句子 全都是我們給學生準備的背誦講義的內容。這次寫作有個突出問題就是：如何批改。筆者明顯看到不少學生的寫得很出 色，如下面，特別是對環境等細節描寫非常細致入微。（可惜的是批改老師統統 對所給作文只給了 14-16分，這種作文的批改真是對批改老師有一定的要求的，否 則會扼殺掉大量好作文）范文：In a burst of benevolence. I went up lo him and said:"Pardon sir, woul

12、d you mind me purchasing you one of ihcsc puddings?” He jumped back as if he had been stung, and the blood rushed into his wrinkled face. HExcuse me," he said, with more dignity than I would have thought possible, HUndoubtedly you have mistaken me for someone else." And with a quick decisi

13、on he turned to the shop girl and said in a loud voice, “Kindly pack me up this one here.” He pointed at one of the largest and most expensive of the puddings.The girl started to make a parcel of it. while he pulled out a wom little black pocketbook. He began counting out shillings and pennies on to the counter. How I longed for the power to unsay my tactless words! It was too late though, and I felt that the kindest thing I could do now would be walk away. HYou pay at the desk,” the sho