外研社杯全國(guó)英語寫作大賽范文第1篇外研社杯全國(guó)英語寫作大賽范文第1篇ALetterfromanUnknownChild

DearMom,

IhaveencounteredthepoemATraveler'sSongagaininmyclassinthestrangelandwhereIfeellonely,andIcannothelpwritingsomethingforyou,Mom,eventhoughwehavebeenseparatedsincelongandIhavetotravelsomuchthatIneveractuallyspeaktoyou.NowI'mwritingtoyoutotellmystoryaboutyourabsence.

True,lifewashardwithoutyou.WhenItravelledinthisworldattheageoften,Iwasalwaysbulliedbyotherswhoenjoyedthejocundcompanyoftheirmothers.Theylaughedatme,teasingmeasa^v^patheticpity^v^,assomeprimitivecreaturewithnofamilyteaching.Itriedtofightback,wrestlingwiththeboysandpullingothergirls'hair,whichaugmentedthehatredbetweenus.Otherlessmaliciouschildrenwouldshunfrommypresence.ThingsbecamemoretrickywhenIenteredpuberty,asagrowinggirllackingcommonsense.IwastootimidtoaskDadaboutthechangesinmybody,towhoseanswerIhadtosecretlysearchontheInternetfor.Howunfair!I'mnothinglessthantheothers.ThepointisjustthatItravelawayfromyouwhileothersstaywithyourcounterparts.

Ididhateyou,sometimes,butalwaysIdidnot.IaskedDadwhereyoustayed,andheanswered,withahushedsobthatyouweretravellingallaroundtheworld.ThatwaswhenIburntyourphotosfuriouslyandthenburiedtheashesintheground,forIthoughtyouweresuchanirresponsiblemothertotravelallthewaywithnocaringforyourownchild.YetIcametounderstand,gradually,thatitwasmydadandIwhotravelledconstantlyandevenwillingly,thatyouwerealwaysthere,waitingtoholdmeandcaressmyfaceinreunion.

IunderstandthisbecauseIfoundthegiftsthatyouhadmadeforme:ahillofhandmadesweaterswhicharemeticulouslydesignedandcraftedateverycorner,dazzlingandrejoicinglikeagardenofunfurlingflowersinspring;amountainoftoysforbothgirlsandboys(whichIunderstandfullybecauseyouknewnotmygender);aboxoflettersthatyoucomposedforme,fullofwordslike^v^dear^v^and^v^baby^v^and^v^myangel^v^.ThenIfinallylearnedtoloveyou.Ilearnedtowrite,andtheveryfirstwritingwasaboutyou;Itriedtopaint,andIwithouthesitationdrewdownmyimageofyou.IreturnedtowhereIhadburiedyourphotosanddugouttheashesandturnedthepitchblackclayintoashimmeringstatueofyou.Fatherlovesyouaswell,bytheway,keepingyourslippersbesidehisbedandrenewingyourtransportationpasseverymonth.Onlyifwecouldceasetotravelandgobacktoyou!

However,IknowImustkeeptraveling,becausethisisyourwishforme,butyourwishwillneverstopmefromblamingmyself.Ihavediscoveredthesecret,totellyouthetruth.Don'ttellDad,forI'mawareofhowhardhehasbeentryingtosealthis.IoverheardthereasonwhyyouwereleftaloneandunabletotravelwithuswhenDadwastalkingtomygrandmotherwitheverylineonhisfacesuffusedwithseveresorrow,thatyouhadtoleavebecauseofme,thatyouleftwhenIcametothisworldandembarkedonmyjourney.But...but...howcouldyoubesohardlikeastone!Tomakemeloveyouandletmeblamemyself!Howcouldyouletmekillyou!IwasparalyzedwithanunnamedfitatthattimeandIrushedbacktomyownroom,feelingsomethingcoldandsadstreakingdownmyface.

Irememberthatnightwhenleavesfellwithoutwind,andIwishedtobartermylifeforyoursinvain.Irememberinthedreamthatyoutappedonmyheadlikeaghostandsighed,withwhichIsoonrecoveredandbravedmylonelyjourney.

NowIhavedecidedtolive,notonlyforme,butforyou.Istillwearthesweatersyoumade,andIanswerthelettersyouwrote,feelingyourbeingperchingontheboughofmysoul.Ishedtears,really,whenIreadthepoemagain.IknowImustreturnlatefrommytravelwhichisalife-longone,butIassureyouthatIwillneverforgetyouandneverstopfeelinggrateful.

Whatapitythatyoumaynotknowmyname,butIwillalwaysloveyou.

Yours.

（為真實(shí)展示選手賽場(chǎng)上的寫作風(fēng)貌，文章為從iTEST大學(xué)外語測(cè)試與訓(xùn)練系統(tǒng)中摘出的原生作品，僅供學(xué)習(xí)分享使用。）

外研社杯全國(guó)英語寫作大賽范文第2篇WriteastorybasedonthepoemATraveller'sSongbyMengJiao,aChinesepoetoftheTangDynasty.Youcanchoosetowriteatruestoryoranimaginaryone.Youshouldprovideyourowntitleandwritebetween600and800words.

游子吟

慈母手中線，

游子身上衣。

臨行密密縫，

意恐遲遲歸。

誰言寸草心，

報(bào)得三春暉。

ATraveller'sSong

ByMengJiao

TranslatedbyLiuJianxun

Thethreadinthehandsofafond-heartedmother

Makesclothesforthebodyofherwaywardboy;

Carefullyshesewsandthoroughlyshemends,

Dreadingthedelaysthatwillkeephimlatefromhome.

Buthowmuchlovehastheinch-longgrass

Forthreespringmonthsofthelightofthesun?

外研社杯全國(guó)英語寫作大賽范文第3篇Feelingofyouth

Noyoungmanbelievesheshalleverdie.itwasasayingofmybrother's,andafineone.thereisafeelingofeternityinyouth,whichmakesusamendforeverything.tobeyoungistobeasoneoftheimmortalgods.onehalfoftimeindeedisflown-theotherhalfremainsinstoreforuswithallitscountletreasures;forthereisnolinedrawn,andweseenolimittoourhopesandwishes.wemakethecomingageourown-

Thevast,theunboundedprospectliesbeforeus.

Death.oldage.arewordswithoutameaning.thatpabyusliketheideaairwhichweregardnot.othersmayhaveundergone,ormaystillbeliabletothem-we^v^bearacharmedlife“,whichlaughstoscornallsuchsicklyfancies.asinsettingoutondelightfuljourney,westrainoureagergazeforward-

Biddingthelovelyscenesatdistancehail!

Andseenoendtothelandscape,newobjectspresentingthemselvesasweadvance;so,inthecommencementoflife,wesetnoboundstoourinclinations.nortotheunrestrictedopportunitiesofgratifyingthem.wehaveasyetfoundnoobstacle,nodispositiontoflag;anditseemsthatwecangoonsoforever.welookroundinanewworld,fulloflife,andmotion,andceaseleprogress;andfeelinourselvesallthevigorandspirittokeeppacewithit,anddonotforeseefromanypresentsymptomshowweshallbeleftbehindinthenaturalcourseofthings,declineintooldage,anddropintothegrave.itisthesimplicity,andasitwereabstractedneofourfeelingsinyouth,that(sotospeak)identifiesuswithnature,and(ourexperiencebeingslightandourpassionsstrong)deludesusintoabeliefofbeingimmortallikeit.ourshort-livesconnectionwithexistencewefondlyflatterourselves,isanindissolubleandlastingunion-ahoneymoonthatknowsneithercoldness,jar,norseparation.asinfantssmileandsleep,wearerockedinthecradleofourwaywardfancies,andlulledintosecuritybytheroaroftheuniversearoundus0wequaffthecupoflifewitheagerhastewithoutdrainingit,insteadofwhichitonlyoverflowsthemore-objectsprearoundus,fillingthemindwiththeirmagnitudeandwiththestrongofdesiresthatwaituponthem,sothatwehavenoroomforthethoughtsofdeath.

外研社杯全國(guó)英語寫作大賽范文第4篇許泓一四川大學(xué)（指導(dǎo)教師：方云軍）

2019“外研社·國(guó)才杯”全國(guó)英語寫作大賽冠軍

通過審題，我認(rèn)為這次記敘文的創(chuàng)作主題明確指向親情。這種主題的故事寫起來格外容易流于俗套和矯作，因而，如何把一個(gè)司空見慣的主題寫得兼具新意和真情便成為了我構(gòu)思的重點(diǎn)。出于描寫深摯情感的需要，我決定采用書信體進(jìn)行寫作，并通過化用茨威格的LetterfromanUnknownWoman確定了我的標(biāo)題。我同樣用生死的問題來解釋“unknown”一詞，但比起茨威格小說中絕望的感情，我認(rèn)為《游子吟》傳遞的恰恰相反，是充滿希望的感激，由此明確了故事的整體走向。

在行文過程中，我特別注意保持記敘文的故事性，避免其成為純粹的抒情文段。圍繞著“我”對(duì)母親在我成長(zhǎng)過程中缺席這一認(rèn)識(shí)的加深展開故事，并將母親為“我”而死留作懸念，在對(duì)這一懸念的揭示中把故事推向高潮。

在寫作中，我又反復(fù)閱讀《游子吟》：游子為什么要離開？為什么可能“遲遲歸”？基于這些疑問，嘗試把整首詩(shī)理解為一個(gè)隱喻，并將這種暗示融進(jìn)文中，希望通過“失去母親的游子”這一意象引發(fā)讀者的聯(lián)想——關(guān)于成長(zhǎng)中的漂泊、兩代間的矛盾、向死而活的生命。

重讀全文，我發(fā)現(xiàn)自己的語言還有不少缺陷，觀點(diǎn)也不夠成熟，但我仍然希望這個(gè)故事能帶給讀者一些感動(dòng)與思考。

外研社杯全國(guó)英語寫作大賽范文第5篇First,mymathteacherispatientwithme.Shehelpsmetostudymathbetter.Second,myclassmateshelpmealot.I'mnotgoodatfriendLiYunhelpedmewithrunningandIran,IcareaboutmyteachersanddaymyEnglishteacherhadacoldandItoldhertodrinkmorehotwater.Shefeltwarmandthankedme.

Ibelieveifweunderstandandhelpeachother,ourschoolwillbeabetterplace.

外研社杯全國(guó)英語寫作大賽范文第6篇田朝霞教授南京師范大學(xué)

2019“外研社·國(guó)才杯”全國(guó)英語寫作大賽評(píng)委

文學(xué)博士，劍橋大學(xué)、倫敦大學(xué)學(xué)院、墨爾本文法學(xué)校訪問學(xué)者。南京師范大學(xué)“教學(xué)十佳”及“教書育人”獎(jiǎng)獲得者。

2019“外研社.國(guó)才杯”全國(guó)英語寫作大賽的記敘文要求選手基于唐代詩(shī)人孟郊的《游子吟》，寫一篇真實(shí)的或虛構(gòu)的故事。

這是一篇觸人心弦，使人久久不能忘懷的故事。其可圈可點(diǎn)不可勝數(shù)。

其一，標(biāo)題引人入勝。

標(biāo)題乃是文眼，“ALetterfromanUnknownChild”立刻映入讀者眼簾，使人忍不往下讀。“unknownchild”是誰？給誰的信？為什么要寫信？發(fā)生了什么事兒？懸念迭起。

其二，書信形式新穎別致。

用書信的形式來呈現(xiàn)一篇故事出人意表，著實(shí)很妙！書信，是最古樸、最真摯的情感表達(dá)方式，也可以說是最隱私、最信任的一種情感交流，必然給人帶來強(qiáng)烈的情感期待：是心跳、是驚駭、是悲痛、是喜悅？讀者不由自主地進(jìn)入一段體驗(yàn)的旅程。

其三，故事完整，跌宕起伏。

故事開始，在他鄉(xiāng)讀起《游子吟》，“我”不由想起“你”，于是向“你”傾訴沒有“你”的日子。沒有“你”的童年是沒有愛和歡樂的童年，于是“我”心中生“恨”。“我”開始埋怨“你”的不負(fù)責(zé)任，憤而燒毀“你”的照片。而當(dāng)“我”看到堆放得滿屋子的“你”親手編織的sweaters，當(dāng)“我”看到堆成山的“你”為“我”準(zhǔn)備的各式玩具，當(dāng)“我”品味滿盒子里“你”的親筆信，“我”了解了“你”的愛。

一波未平，一波又起。“我”偶然獲知，原來“你”的死皆因“我”起，原來“你”知道“我”的來臨便是“你”的死期。“我”不禁感嘆：“Tomakemeloveyouandletmeblamemyself!Howcouldyouletmekillyou!”“我”曾對(duì)“你”何等殘忍、何等不公！“我”愿以“我”的命換“你”的，如果可以。“你”永遠(yuǎn)待在原地，“你”愛光芒照射我四周，從未遠(yuǎn)離；而“我”必須前行，這亦是“你”的希望。無風(fēng)葉落的秋夜，你再入夢(mèng)來，輕彈我的額頭，于是我孤獨(dú)的旅程再無恐懼。

今日再吟《游子吟》，“你”的手中線，“我”的身上衣（sweater），淚已濕滿襟。在“我”的故事里，還巧妙地穿插著父親、祖母。他們的出現(xiàn)自然地推動(dòng)著故事的發(fā)展和轉(zhuǎn)折，更加襯托母親的愛，使主題更加深刻。

其四，語言表達(dá)可圈點(diǎn)。

應(yīng)該說，在關(guān)鍵處，特別是感情飽滿處，行文語言流暢自然，感人至深。例如“ThepointisjustthatItravelawayfromyouwhileothersstaywithyourcounterparts”“YetIcametounderstand,gradually,thatitwasmydadandIwhotravelledconstantlyandevenwillingly,thatyouwerealwaysthere,waitingtoholdmeandcaressmyfaceinreunion”“ThenIfinallylearnedtoloveyou.Ilearnedto…;Itriedto….Ireturnedto…andturnedthepitchblackclayintoashimmeringstatueofyou”“Irememberthatnight….Irememberindreamthatyoutappedmyhead….”等。

其五，與所給材料相呼應(yīng)，并巧用比喻發(fā)人深思。

題目要求基于《游子吟》寫一篇故事，選手干脆就寫了一篇“慈母手中線，游子身上衣”的故事。這是第一個(gè)照應(yīng)。故事開頭因讀詩(shī)開始，最后以讀詩(shī)結(jié)尾，這是與材料的第二個(gè)照應(yīng)。第三個(gè)照應(yīng)，無論是有意無意，可說是“妙”——是“travel”的隱喻使用。“我”是他鄉(xiāng)的游子；“我”和父親無時(shí)無刻不在路途中；“Onlyifwecouldceasetotravelandgobacktoyou”；“我”必須“keeptraveling”以完成“你”的遺愿——“你”死“我”生那一刻，已注定“我”的不歸路；“你”夢(mèng)中的安撫，掃去“我”途中的孤寂與恐懼。“我”生來是游子，一路上都是故事，故事里充滿對(duì)“你”的情思。

貫穿全篇的“travel”和“journey”讓人想起“Lifeisajourney,andwearealltravelers”的比喻——只要有時(shí)空和人的存在，又有什么時(shí)間軸上的延展不是journey呢？這個(gè)比喻并不是故事的焦點(diǎn)，卻讓人回味深長(zhǎng)。

這篇作品有瑕疵嗎？有，應(yīng)該還不少。這里僅提兩點(diǎn)。第一，語言表達(dá)及規(guī)范問題頻現(xiàn)。這里不多舉例。提醒注意信函開始的格式以及第一段的多處錯(cuò)誤。第二，根據(jù)不同讀者的閱讀體驗(yàn)，可能有些讀者感覺這個(gè)故事不夠“新”。

在有限的時(shí)間里能夠完成這樣一篇故事，真的不該太苛刻。應(yīng)該說，這是一篇主題突出，情節(jié)豐滿，故事曲折，感人至深的故事。

外研社杯全國(guó)英語寫作大賽范文第7篇JohnOlbrich

任教于清華大學(xué)

2019“外研社·國(guó)才杯”全國(guó)英語寫作大賽評(píng)委

Thejudgeswereaskedtoevaluatetheessaysinthewritingcompetitionaccordingtothreecriteria:content/ideas,organisation/development,andlanguage.Ishallfollowthisformat.

Contentwasexcellent,verywell-arguedandthought-through.Thewriter’srangeofknowledgeofcurrentsocialissueswasimpressive,coveringgenetics,cloning,AI,disease,MOOCsandtheNewYorkstockmarket.She/hearguedpersuasivelyforthecontinuingevolutionofhumanitythroughadvancesinmedicine,AIandtechnologyratherthanalongSirDavidAttenborough’smoresimplisticviewofevolutionasaDarwiniansurvivalofthefittest.

Organisationanddevelopmentwerealsooutstanding.Thewriterfollowedalogicalprogression,numberingher/hispointsandwithclearandorderedwriting.Sentencestructurewasgood,andher/hisideaswerepresentedwithclarityandintelligence.Theargumenthadanintroduction,definiteparagraphswithseparatepointsandaclearconclusion,andtheargumentwaseasytofollowyetwithintricateknowledge.

Languagewaswherethewriterfelldown.Althoughcomplexvocabularywasusedwidelyandforthepartcorrectly,thispieceisnotimmunefromsimplegrammaticalmistakes–inparticular

Ingeneral,thiswasanoutstandingpieceofargument,clearandlogicalandusingawiderangeofideasandconcepts.

上周讀過寫作大賽高分議論文之后，是否感到意猶未盡，余韻悠長(zhǎng)。

本次將為大家?guī)?019“外研社·國(guó)才杯”全國(guó)英語寫作大賽決賽冠軍的記敘文佳作，一起感受選手筆下的動(dòng)人故事，聆聽專家的細(xì)致點(diǎn)評(píng)！

外研社杯全國(guó)英語寫作大賽范文第8篇HumanCivilizationOutshinesHumanIntervention

Recentyearshavewitnessedtheheateddiscussionconcerningthepotentiallydireconsequencesentailedbytheunprecedentedlyfastdevelopmentofhumansociety.Somepeoplefearthattheuncontrolledadvancementofscienceandtechnologywillbringaboutadverseramificationswhichwouldeventuallytakeadeadlytollonhumanbeingsitself.Accordingtothem,^v^thedoomsdayclockisonthevergeofstriking^v^ifwedonotendeavortostophumaninterventionbeforeitistoolate.However,myviewonthisissueisdifferent.Theso-called^v^humanintervention^v^is,ifweviewitfromanotherperspective,actually^v^humancivilization^v^,whichisnotsupposedtobetoblameforitsgrandeurandsophistication.

Inthefirstplace,thefast-growingmedicaltechnologyhavebeenmakinggreatcontributionstohumanevolving.Thankstotheprogressmadeinmedicalcaresandhospitalfacilities,humanbeingsareabletolivelongerandsurviveharshcircumstancesunderwhichourpredecessorsarevulnerabletodiseaseanddeath,suchasthedessertzonesoricyAntarcticareas.Also,humanbeingshavebeendevelopingspecialtreatmentstocombatwhatwasformerlyseenasincurablecancers,suchasmalaria,^v^,andEbola,managingtosavelivesandincreasepeople'ssenseofsecurityandhappiness.Alltheupliftingresultsisevidencedinthegloballifeexpectancysurgingfromabout40yearsoldinthe20thcentury-thenumberofwhichwasmuchdismalinunder-developedcountries-toover65nowadays.Therefore,insteadofclaimingsuchhumaninterventionspreventusfromadaptingtoinfectiousdiseasethroughnaturalselection,weoughttocometotherealizationthathumansareevolvinginamoreeffectiveandefficientway,thatis,throughtechnologicaladvancement.

Secondly,thehighlydevelopedgeneticknowledgeisincreasingbiodiversityinsteadofdestroyingit.Sincehumanbeingsbecamecuriousabouthowlifeformsandhowmyriadsoforgansandsystemsfunctioninhumanbodies,theworldhasseentheburgeoningofbiotechnologyandgeneticresearch.Throughalltheamazingfindingsbyscientistsandresearchers,humanbeingsnotonlyhaveabettergraspofthesecretsoflife,butalsoproposenewwaystoenrichlifeforms.Becauseofcloning,weareableto^v^duplicate^v^endangeredanimalswhichwouldhavebeenextinctotherwise.Becauseofgeneticadvancement,weareabletoproducehybridcornsandvegetables,whichhavebeenpullingmillionsofpeopleoutoftheriskofstarvingtodeath.Becauseofgenestransplanting,weareabletocreatecreaturesweneverseeandalsomanyotherintriguingpossibilities.Evolutionarychangeisnotnecessarilyachievedbylongitudenaturalselection,butalsocanbeacceleratedbymoderngeneticengineering.

Thirdly,thewidercurrencyofartificialintelligenceaddsratherthandistracts.Increasingautomationanddiminishedhumancontactistherealityoftoday:aworldwheredexterousrobotsreplaceendlessrowsofChineseworkersandthetradingfloorspecialistsonNewYorkStockExchangearereadytohandoverthekeystoWallStreet'sversionofSkyNET.ThattraditionalteachersinclassroomsgivewaytotheircounterpartsonYouTube,undertheauspicesoftheleadersofdigitaleconomy,isinevitable.Maybethatisnecessary.Butthatisnotthereasonweshouldstopit-atleastit'scheapandconvenient.AcaseinpointistheMOOCs,orMassiveOnlineOpencourses.Itisessentiallyonlineclassrooms,andareeasilyaccessibletocoursesdesignedbyprofessorsfromprestigiousuniversities,suchasYale,CaltechandDuke.EventhoughMOOCsmayinalargeextentreplacetr