續寫題目Manyyearsearlier,mymotherknewthatshecouldnotsendmetocollegeandpayforit.Sheworkedinaretailstoreandmadejustenoughtopaythebillsandtakecareoftheotherchildrenathome.IfIwantedtogotocollege,itwasuptometofindouthowtogetthere.

IfoundthatIqualifiedforsomegrantsbecauseofthesizeofourfamily,mymom’sincomeandmySATscores.Therewasenoughtocoverschoolandbooks,butnotenoughforroomandboard.Iacceptedajobaspartofawork-studyprogram.Whilenotattractive,itwasoneIcoulddo.Iwasheddishesintheschoolcafeteria.JustwhenIthoughtIwasgoingtodropoutofmycollegecareer,anangelappeared.Well,oneofthosethatareonearth,withoutwings.“Iheardthatyouneedsomehelp,”hesaid.“Whatdoyoumean?”Iasked,tryingtofigureoutwhichareaofmylifehemeant."Financially,tostayinschool.”“Well,Imakeitokay.Ijusthavetroubleworkingallthesehoursandfindingtimetostudy.”“Well,IthinkIhaveawaytohelpyouout.”Hewentontoexplainthathisgrandparentsneededhelpontheweekends.Allthatwasrequiredofmewascookingmealsandhelpingthemgetinandoutofbedinthemorningandevening.Thejobpaidfourhundreddollarsamonth,twicethemoneyIwasmakingwashingdishes.NowIwouldhavetimetostudy.Iwenttomeethisgrandparentsandacceptedthejob.Myfirstdiscoverywashisgrandmother’sgreatloveofmusic.Shespenthoursplayingherold,off-keypiano.Oneday,shetoldmeIdidn’thaveenoughfuninmylifeandtookituponherselftoteachmetheart.Grandmawasimpressedwithmyabilityandencouragedmetocontinue.Weekendsintheirhousebecamemorethanjustbooksandcooking,theywerefilledwiththewonderfulsoundsoftheout-of-tunepianoandtwoveryout-of-tunesingers.Paragraph1WhenChristmasbreakcame,Grandmagotachestcold,andIwasafraidtoleaveher.Paragraph2Theenvelopewasfromgrandmawhohadjustpassedaway.

續寫嘗試Paragraph1WhenChristmasbreakcame,Grandmagotachestcold,andIwasafraidtoleaveher.So,Idecidedtopayheravisit.The“angel”answeredthedoorandledmetoherbedroomwhereasmallgauntfigurewithfurrowedbrowslayquietlyonthebed.Myhearttwitched.Hearingus,Grandmaopenedhereyes.“Honey,happyholidays!Haveyoupacked?”,shesmiledweakly.Icamecloserandheldherhand,“Iwanttobewithyou,Grandma.”Shepattedmyhandgently,“Don’tworrydear.Yourfamilymustmissyou.Go.IpromiseI’llseeyousoon.”

Shelied.WhenIreceivedthatsoul-crushingphonecall,suddenly,theworldseemedtohavelostitscoloruntilaletterfoundourdoor.

Paragraph2Theenvelopewasfromgrandmawhohadjustpassedaway.Init,shetoldmehowproudshewasofmeandhowmuchshelovedme.Herwordswerelikeawarmembracethatenvelopedmeinloveandcomfort.AsIreadtheletter,Icouldhearthesoundoftheoldpianointhebackground.Itwasoutoftune,butitdidn’tmatterforitwasareminderofallthewonderfultimeswehadspenttogether.Inasplitsecond,I

thoughtIsaw,throughmyblurryeyes,Grandmasittingatthepiano,herfingersmovinggracefullyoverthekeys.Then,shelookedupatmeandsmiled.AtthatmomentIknew,inherownway,Grandma

hadkeptherpromise.續寫精析“The“angel”answeredthedoorandledmetoherbedroomwhereasmallgauntfigurewithfurrowedbrowslayquietlyonthebed.”Angel應門，呼應原文稱呼，銜接上句邏輯，然后緊接著把主角引到grandma的房間中。關系副詞where引導的定語從句說明房間內的情況。asmallgauntfigurewithfurrowedbrowslayquietlyonthebed.

這句話用了4處細節體現出grandma此刻的狀態。small&gaunt，病痛折磨下的祖母顯得，身材弱小而面容瘦削。gaunt：牛津verythin,usuallybecauseofillness.Withfurrowedbrows眉頭緊鎖，暗示grandma胸痛的嚴重，無時不刻都在疼著，所以眉關難以撫平。Layquietly祖母很喜歡彈鋼琴，但此刻她卻安靜地躺在床上，進一步讓讀者感知grandma的狀態。Myhearttwitched.twitch：牛津ifapartofyourbodytwitches,orifyoutwitchit,itmakesasuddenquickmovement,sometimesonethatyoucannotcontrol痙攣；抽搐；抽動進入房間，看到病臥的祖母，身形消瘦，眉頭緊鎖，主角的心不由自主地抽動，“祖孫”感情之深，一詞足矣。Hearingus,Grandmaopenedhereyes.“Honey,happyholidays!Haveyoupacked?”,shesmiledweakly.Grandma這個人物我是偏愛的。正如原文中所塑造，我希望續寫中能體現出她堅毅、善良、理解和睿智。盡管續寫第二段提示，grandma已然離主角遠去，但我希望她生前身后，都能像一束溫暖的光一樣。所以，我的第一段，grandma聽到動靜醒過來，看到主角，虛弱的微笑著。雖然自己已經病重，但言語中則是對后輩的關切，“節日快樂孩子，東西收拾好了嗎？”Icamecloserandheldherhand,“Iwanttobewithyou,Grandma.”人物互動，視角流轉自然。我看到grandma的情況，聽到她的關心，上前握住了她的手。這個握手的動作，手的溫度，溫暖的是彼此的心。Shepattedmyhandgently,“Don’tworrydear.Yourfamilymustmissyou.Go.IpromiseI’llseeyousoon.”先握手，才能后拍手。邏輯完美，且動作進一步豐滿人物形象。“別擔心孩子，你的家人肯定很想你。回吧，我保證我們很快就能見面。”Grandma知道孩子心理糾結，故而溫和地解開心結。grandma知道自己時日無多，但依然承諾與孩子他日相逢，給孩子希望。這是何等的愛，何等的情。Shelied.一句話，兩個詞，讀者已心領神會。至深的情感，至誠的觸動，至簡的表達。“她說謊了。”當一個人離開，很多時候，我們不會去思考這整件事的影響，不會聽別人說，“節哀順變”，而是緊緊揪住他沒有說完的那句話，沒有看成的那場電影，沒能成行的那個旅程。自然也包括她沒有信守的那個承諾。這一刻