第三部分

寫作專題突破讀后續寫第二節

熱點突破第6講續寫熱點話題人與動物(2023·浙江1月卷)閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。Iwasinvitedtoacookoutonanoldfriend'sfarminwesternWashington．Iparkedmycaroutsidethefarmandwalkedpastamilkinghousewhichhadapparentlynotbeenusedinmanyyears．Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention，soIenteredit．Itwasahummingbird(蜂鳥)，desperatelytryingtoescape．Shewascoveredinspider-webs(蛛網)andwasbarelyabletomoveherwings．SheceasedherstruggletheinstantIpickedherup．Withthebirdinmycuppedhand，Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin．Thebrokenwindowglasswasthelikelyanswer．Istuffedapieceofclothintotheholeandtookheroutside，closingthedoorsecurelybehindme．WhenIopenedmyhand，thebirddidnotflyaway；shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes．Iremovedthestickyspider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings．Still，shemadenoattempttofly．Perhapsshehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired？Ortoothirsty?AsIcarriedheruptheblackberry-linedpathtowardmycarwhereIkeptawaterbottle，shebegantomove．Istopped，andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway．Hovering(懸停)，sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface．Foraverylongmoment，thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes，turningherheadfromsidetoside．Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight．Duringthecookout，Itoldmyhostsaboutthehummingbirdincident．Theypromisedtofixthewindow．AsIwasdeparting，myfriendswalkedmetomycar．Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering．Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome．Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes，thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone．Foramoment，allwerespeechless．Thensomeonesaid，“Shemusthavecometosaygood-bye．”注意：續寫詞數應為150個左右。Afewweekslater，Iwenttothefarmagain．____________________________________________________________________________Iwasjustabouttoleavewhenthehummingbirdappeared．_________________________________________________________________Ⅰ．梳理原文細節，厘清篇章結構。Ⅱ．依據首句提示，構思后續情節。第一段：由續寫第一段及續寫第二段的提示語可知，該段應該描述我途經那間擠奶房時回想起上一回拯救蜂鳥的經歷，以及享用燒烤的過程。第二段：由續寫第二段的提示語可知，該段應該描述兩方面的內容：一是蜂鳥與我之間的互動交流；二是關于人與動物關系的啟示。A

few

weeks

later，I

went

to

the

farm

again．Havingparkedthecar，Iwanderedontheblackberry-linedpathagain．Istillrememberedmyfriends'promisesoIwentpasttheabandonedmilkinghousetoseeiftheyhadfixedthebrokenwindow．Tomysatisfaction，noothertinycreatureswouldmeetthistroubleanymore．AsIapproachedthefarm，myfriendsinvitedmetothecookout．Withthesmellofroastingmeatfloatingintheair，wechattedandlaughedmerrilyaroundthepicnictabletillthesunset．Theeveningglowspreadingacrossthefarm，itwastimeforustosaygoodbye，sowewenttotheparkinglottogether．I

was

just

about

to

leave

when

the

hummingbird

appeared．Withasqueakingcall，shedivedtowardsme，hoveredbeforemyfacelookingatmewithherbrighteyes，andthenstoppedonmyleftshoulder．Ipattedheronthebackwhichwascoveredbycolorfulfeathers．AndItookoutmywaterbottle，tryingtogivehersomewater．Contentandjoyful，sheflewabout2metersabovetheground，turningherheadfromsidetosideasifexpressinghergratitudeforsavingherlifetomeagain．Atthatmoment，Ifeltamixtureofhappinessandexcitementwellingupinmyheart，tearsrollingdownmycheeks．Thesinkingsuncastawarmglowovermeandthebird，witnessingthewonderfulconnectionbetweenhumansandanimals．1．Thedogturnedaround，watchingus，withhistailswingingupanddown．這只狗轉過身來，上下擺動著尾巴，注視著我們。2．Atfirstthebirdstuckhisheadoutofhiscagejusttotakeasipofwaterandfillhismouthwithfood．起初，這只鳥把頭探出籠子，只是為了喝一口水，往嘴里塞滿食物。3．AfraidImighthurtthelovelysmallcreature，Iautomaticallyletoutacrytostopmyhorse．害怕會傷害這個可愛的小生物，我不假思索地發出一聲喊叫來阻止我的馬。4．Confusedandfrightenedatmyapproach，thewolfbackedoff，pullinghardthechain．狼被我的靠近弄得既困惑又害怕，向后退卻，使勁地拉著鏈子。5．Birdsweresinging，theairwasfi