讀后續(xù)寫最為重要的描寫有五類：環(huán)境、動作、心理、情緒、語言讀后續(xù)寫作為記敘文，其核心只有一個，那就是“人”。因此一切的筆墨，都是為了塑造人物形象，使人物更加飽滿。Howtomakeyourwritingvividandattractive?Show,don’ttell讀后續(xù)寫之“動作鏈”和動作“面”憨豆先生試圖在考試中作弊。Leadin

Mr.beanattemptedtocheatintheexam.Duringtheexam,Mr.bean

____________,_____

everyonewritingpapersseriously,

slowly

__________towardshisdeskmate,and____________________hisanswers.

在考試期間，憨豆先生環(huán)顧四周,發(fā)現(xiàn)每個人都在

認真寫試卷，然后他的身體慢慢地向他同桌移動,

試圖瞥一眼他的答案。動作分解：Mr.beanattemptedtocheatintheexam.

Howtodescribe‘cheat’

vividly？將結(jié)果性的動作，分解成更細致的連貫性的幾個微動作（通常2-3個）,形成動作鏈(Actionchain)，使動作結(jié)果過程化。lookedaroundfoundmovedattemptedtoglanceat

Pre-action（先前動作）Trans-action(過渡動作)Post-action(后續(xù)動作)Action結(jié)果性的動作

Pre-action

（先前動作）Trans-action(過渡動作)Post-action后續(xù)動作動作鏈時間軸動作鏈(Actionchain)Howtomakeyourcontinuationwritingvivid?使用一連串動作讓畫面動起來1構(gòu)建動作鏈Action-chain

Hejumpedintothewell.

Shelayontheground.構(gòu)建“動作鏈”尖叫奔跑跳入井中++screamedfled/ranawayjumpedintothewell

Themanscreamed/letoutascreamoffear,ran/fledawayandjumpedintothewell.

環(huán)顧四周躺倒在地用紙蓋住臉++glancedaroundlaydownonthegroundcoveredherfacewithapieceofpaperSheglancedaround,laydownonthegroundandcoveredherfacewithapieceofpaper.

tookofftheclothes

Theboysrushedtothelake,+Describe：男孩們跳入湖中嬉戲。

jump

=+Pre-action沖向湖邊Trans-action脫掉衣服Post-action跳入湖中

andjumpedintothewater.ABC①“動作鏈”結(jié)構(gòu)1:

主+謂1...,謂2...,and謂3....

形成動作鏈:沖向前蹲下來一把抱住①“動作鏈”結(jié)構(gòu)1:

主+謂1...,謂2...,and謂3....

看到失散多年的兒子，她將其一把抱住。

可以把“抱”這個動作按時間拆分為：Shedashedforward,+hug=+Pre-action沖向前Trans-action蹲下Post-action抱住孩子ABCkneltdownandgatheredhersonintoherarms.Thestepsweeathot/spicystrips(辣條)Pre-actionTrans-actionPost-action撕開包裝

tearupthepackage擠出一根

squeezeoutonestrip大咬一口

takeabigbiteItearupthepackage,squeezeout

onestrip,

and

takeabigbite.2017年浙江高考：被狼圍堵，身處險境Howtogetoutofthisdangeroussituation?throwthemeattothewolf掏出肉

pullout瞄準狼

aimat

扔向狼

throwitstraightHepulledoutthemeat,aimedatthewolfand

threwitstraighttothefierceanimal.Pre-actionTrans-actionPost-actionPullingoutthemeat,heaimedatthewolfandthrewitstraighttothefierceanimal.句式升級:現(xiàn)在分詞做狀語②“動作鏈”結(jié)構(gòu)2:

doing/done...(分詞作狀語),主+謂Pleasedescribethefollowingpicture.satonthesubwaystaredathisphoneknit(皺眉)hisbrows/frownedTheoldmansatonthesubway,staringathisphoneandknittinghisbrows.Sittingonthesubway,theoldmanstaredathisphone,knittinghisbrows.(非謂語動詞作狀語，可置于句首，句中或句尾.)①

同一對象同時發(fā)生

不同的動作，且表主動

—主+謂,doingsth./Doingsth.,主+謂②“動作鏈”結(jié)構(gòu)2:

doing/done...(分詞作狀語),主+謂孩子感動哭了。孩子被感動＋孩子哭了Thechildwasmovedbythestory.Thechildbegantoweep._______bythestory,thechildbegantoweep.②

動作與主語邏輯關(guān)系為被動時

——Donesth.,主+謂Moved②“動作鏈”結(jié)構(gòu)2:

doing/done...(分詞作狀語),主+謂有技術(shù)的支持，我們的活動成功了。withthehelpofwiththesupportofbeequippedwiththetechnologybearmedwiththetechnologyEquipped/Armedwiththetechnology,ourcontestmadeahit.成功或受歡迎②“動作鏈”結(jié)構(gòu)2:

Havingdonesth,主+謂＋排了三個小時的隊伍,他被告知票被賣完了。動作1動作2后發(fā)生的動作---用謂語動詞主動且先發(fā)生---用非謂語動詞表示（havingdone）Havingqueued

for3hours,he

wastold

thattheticketshadbeensoldout.③同一主語動作有先后關(guān)系時——

Havingdonesth(先),主+謂(后)

queue②“動作鏈”結(jié)構(gòu)2:

Havingdonesth,主+謂Havingwalkedforquitealongtime,hefoundhimselflost.走了很長一段時間，他發(fā)現(xiàn)自己迷路了。先后③“動作鏈”結(jié)構(gòu)3:

主1+非謂語，主語2+謂語Thebell

wasringing.Thestudents

enteredtheclassroom.Thebellringing,

allthestudentsenteredtheclassroom.④

動作的邏輯主語不一致時

—獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)（主語1+非謂語，主語2+謂語）

合并為一句（獨立主格)夜幕降臨，他們支起帳篷，唱歌聊天，臉上洋溢著幸福。③“動作鏈”結(jié)構(gòu)3:

主1+非謂語，主語2+謂語夜幕降臨，他們支起帳篷.Thenightfalling,theyputupatent.Thenightfalling,theyputupatent,singing

andchatting,withhappinessontheirface.心理描寫神態(tài)描寫環(huán)境描寫Howtomakeyourcontinuationwritingvivid?從

面部/肢體和語言心理

多個方面編織動作面

2構(gòu)建動作面（面部，肢體，語言心理）感受情緒:喜怒形于色----Heishappy.Hissmilebroadenedfromeartoear.Heclappedhishandstogetherandjumpedupanddownwithjoy.Hegiggledandsquealedwithexcitement.facebodyvoicev.咯咯地笑v.長聲尖叫感受情緒:喜怒形于色----Sheisangry.Hercheeks/eyesturnedredandhereyebrowsnarrowed.Sheraisedherclenchedfists.Sheclenchedherfistsandputthemonherhips.Shebegantogrowlatmethroughclenchedteeth.緊握雙拳雙手叉腰向…咆哮①Doing...,主+謂,doing...（三個主動動作同時進行，可以用此結(jié)構(gòu)）1.他們站在空曠的路邊，仰望著天空，感受著這份珍貴的平靜。Standingbesidetheemptyroad,theylookedupintothesky,feelingthepreciouspeace.2.圍在營火旁，他們吃著燒烤，享受這一令人難忘的時光。Gatheringaroundthecampfire,theyfeastedonBBQ,enjoyingtheunforgettablemoment.肢體面部心理肢體面部心理②Done...,主+謂,doing...1.被老師的話所鼓舞，Lucy舉起了手，小聲說，“我來。”Encouragedbytheteacher'swords,

Lucyraisedherhand,whispering,“I'lldoit.”2.被眼前的這一幕嚇壞了，他一動不動，不知道該說什么。Terrifiedbythesceneinfrontofhim,hewasrootedtothespot,beingatalosswhattosay.肢體面部心理心理肢體心理③主+謂,doing...anddoing...1.他欣喜若狂，在雨中又唱又跳。Hewasoverwhelmedwithjoy,singinganddancingintherain.2.他激動地鼓掌，一邊點頭，一邊微笑。Heclappedhishandswithexcitement,noddingandsmiling.心理肢體面部④(With)...doing/done...,主+謂,doing...貝貝坐在泳池邊，雙臂低垂，思考自己是白熊貓還是黑熊貓。(With)hisarmsdrooping,

BeiBeisatbesidethepool,wonderingwhetherhewaswhiteorblack.Strikewhiletheironishot：

1.他們享受著美好的時光，聊著天，吃著東西，開著玩笑。Theywerehavingawonderfultime,talking,eatingandjoking.2.失望、無言(speechless)，Tim站在那里，不知道該怎么辦。(Being)speechlessanddisappointed,Tim

stood

there,notknowingwhattodowithit.3.耷拉(droop)著腦袋，Lucy坐在河岸邊，若有所思。Withherheaddrooping,Lucysat

attheriverbank,thinkingaboutsomething.4.發(fā)現(xiàn)自己的雞又被偷了，老人攥緊(clench)雙拳，一臉憤怒。Findingthathischickenhadbeenstolenagain,theoldman

clenchedhisfists,withhisfaceburningwithanger.Summary1.

動作鏈

2.動作面Skill1:主語一致的主要動作≥2:主+謂1,謂2and

(then)謂3，Skill:從面部/肢體和語言心理多個方面編織動作面1.Doing...,主句,doing...2.Done...,主句,doing...3.主句,doing...anddoing...4.(With)...doing/done...,主句,doing...Skill2:當出現(xiàn)兩個動作，而前后兩個動作邏輯主語一致時，可用:非謂語,主+謂主+謂,非謂語非謂語:①主動且完成:Havingdonesth②主動:doing③被動done①表情感類的形容詞，

主+謂…情感類的形容詞在句中作狀語，說明主語的情感狀態(tài)，可以轉(zhuǎn)化為feeling+adj,主+謂。有時可以放在句后：主+謂…,+表情感類的形容詞。例如：1.我站在門口，完全震驚了。Istoodinthedoorway,absolutely______________.2.珍妮坐在那里，嚇得說不出話來，驚呆了。Jennysatthere,______________(speech)andnumbwithshock.3.她垂下頭，不知該如何回答。She______________________,not_____________(不知)howtoreply.shocked/astonishedspeechlessloweredherheadknowingAddothermodifiers（修飾語）②方式副詞（ly），主+謂方式副詞在句中作狀語，修飾謂語動詞，一般放在賓語后，但有時根據(jù)需要可以放在句首，有時放在實義動詞前，例如：1.

(輕輕地),shepickedupthefirstbaby,ranbackoutsideandlaiditonthesidewalk.2._______________(匆匆地),shefollowedthesoundtoastream.3._______________(專心地),welistenedtotheteacherinclass.4.________________(立刻),theforestwasimmersedintotaldarkness.5.Quite_____________(粗魯?shù)?,Aliceanswered,“HowshouldIknow?”Slightly/SoftlyHurriedlyCarefullySuddenlyrudelyAddothermodifiers（修飾語）PracticeNezha

______mom'swords,_______and_______

offthewall.

哪吒跳下來。Nezhajumpedoffthewall.

heardsmiledjumped動作鏈：非謂語動詞：

_______mom'swords,Nezhasmiledandjumpedoffthewall.

Hearing

Hearingmom'swords,Nezhasmiled___________andjumpedoffthewall_______________.

Hearingmom'swords,Nezhasmiledandjumpedoffthewall.

cheerfully添加副詞：quickly/brisklygladly,cheerfully,joyfully,delightedly,excitedly...angrily,fearfully,anxiously...sadly,heart-brokenly,tearfully...surprisedly,astonishedly...swiftly,briskly(敏捷地),hurriedly;gently,carefully,strongly,softly,bravely....EmotionMovement

Hearingmom'swords,Nezhasmiledcheerfullyandjumpedoffthewallbriskly.

添加介詞短語：

Hearing

mom'swords,Nezhasmiled

cheerfullyandjumped