第12講擴展句在寫作中應用第1頁一、魔法導航在寫作中我們通常把用以支持主題句句子稱為支持句或擴展句。段落擴

展句寫作是段落寫作“關鍵”,其質量高低將決定整段文章成敗。在

段落擴展句寫作中要注意以下幾個問題:1.抓住一個中心,對擴展句精挑細選。全部擴展句都必須與主題句保持一致,都要為主題句服務。全部與主題句

無關或關系不大句子都要從擴展句中去掉。如:——巧擴妙展,風韻無限Quiteafewthingsgiverisetothetrafficproblem.Inspiteofthelarge-scalecon-

structionofroadsandhighways,thereisstillmuchroomforimprovement,be-

causeoftheeverincreasingnumberofcarstheseyears.What'sworse,some

drivers,cyclistsandpedestriansdonotthinkitvitaltoobeytrafficrules.(江

蘇)第2頁【評析】本段主題句“Quiteafewthingsgiverisetothetrafficproblem.”

點明了本段中心思想是要介紹造成交通問題原因。下面擴展句緊緊圍

繞中心句說明了兩種詳細原因,有力地支持了主題句。2.選取合理寫作次序,保持擴展句之間連貫性。擴展句不能雜亂無章地堆砌到一塊兒,而是應該恰當利用合理寫作次序(如

時間、空間、邏輯等次序)把各個擴展句有機地組織起來,使其渾然一體。如:Whenthecraftsmancameintotheclassroom,wegavehimawarmwelcomeand

twoboyshelpedhimwiththetoolbox.First,heshowedusthebasicstepsand

skillsofmakingdoughfigurines.Westoodaroundhim,watchingattentively.

Thenwestartedtohaveatryourselves.Theoldmanwalkedaroundandhelped

uspatiently.Finally,wetookpictureswiththeoldcraftsmanandthedoughfig-

urineswemade.Lookingatthefigurines,wewereallveryexcited.(北京)第3頁3.恰當議論,錦上添花。在擴展句寫作中依據實際需要對一些擴展句進行恰當點評或做深入

闡釋不但能夠豐富段落內容,而且還能夠起到深化主題、畫龍點睛作用。

如:WhenIamfacedwithdifficulties,Iusuallychoosetorefertorelevantlearning

materialsorwebpages.Inthisway,Icannotonlyworkthemoutbutalsoimprove

myabilitytoovercomedifficultiesallbymyself.4.重視結構,段落層次分明。在段落擴展句寫作中能夠采取有形或無形“三節式”擴展模式,即“主

題句+擴展句+總結句”結構。如:【評析】本段利用時間次序組織寫作,向老藝人學習捏面人過程躍然紙

上,讀后令人印象深刻。第4頁Infact,trafficrulesarepartoftherulesandregulationscloselyrelatedtopublic

order.Withoutthem,peoplecouldnotenjoyharmonyorthecountrywouldbein

chaos.Butrulesalonedon'tsecureanorderlysociety.Itisthepeoplewhoobey

therulesthatmatter.Therefore,itiseverybody'sdutytoobservethemtokeep

oursocietyinorderandgoingontherighttrack.(江蘇)第5頁二、學以致用1.完美文章依據上下文在橫線上填上適當擴展句或過渡語。Weallwanttogrowuphappilyandhealthily,andforthisgoalwemustdoseveral

things.Firstly,weshoulddevelopagoodattitudetolife,because擴展句(1)

.過渡語①

,weshouldbebravewhenfacedwithdif-

ficulties.Secondly,wemuststudyhardbecause擴展句(2)

.Ifwe

havethepower,wecanhelptobuildourcountryandenjoylifebetter.過渡語②

,inordertostudywell,weneedtodosportssothat擴展句(3)

.Forexample,wecangorunning,playballgamesorsimplytakeawalkaf-

teraday'sstudy.Ifwedothosethingswell,擴展句(4)

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答案(1)lifeconsistsofnotonlysunshinebutalsohardtimes(2)knowledgeispower(3)wecankeepfit(4)wewillbeabletogrowuphappilyandhealthily①Thus/Therefore②Inaddition/Besides/What'smore2.話題寫作[本期話題]未來生活[寫作要求]寫出合理擴展句。請依據下面提醒,寫一篇90詞左右英語短文。第7頁1.未來生存環境愈加舒適漂亮;2.太陽能、風能等新能源應用愈加廣泛;3.機器人等高科技產品進入普通家庭。

第8頁Withthescienceandtechnologydeveloping,I'moptimisticaboutlifeinthefu-

ture.Bythattimethesurroundingswherewelivewillbemorecomfortableand

beautiful.Inaddition,newformsofenergysuchassolarenergy,windenergywill

bemadefulluseof,whichwillbeofgreatuseforprotectingtheenvironment.Al-

so,robotsaswellasotherhigh-techproductswillgointocommonfamilies.Not

onlycantheyhelppeopledohousework,butalsotheycanlookafterthebabies.

Suchisthelifeinfuturewhichisboundtobemorecomfortableandconvenient.?答案Onepossibleversion:第9頁三、美文賞讀(福建)怎樣了解“成功”,不一樣人有不一樣看法。請認真閱讀下面引語(quota-

tion),按要求用英語寫一篇短文?！癝uccessistheabilitytogofromonefailuretoanotherwithnolossofenthusi-

asm.”—SirWinstonChurchill內容要求:1.你對該引語了解;2.你相關經歷;3.恰當結尾。第10頁注意:1.短文開頭已給出,不計入總詞數;2.文中不能出現考生詳細信息;3.詞數120左右。[我來試寫]ThisquotationfromWinstonChurchilltellsusthat

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答案Onepossibleversion:ThisquotationfromWinstonChurchilltellsusthatweshouldn'tgetdiscouraged

rightafterfailures.Rather,weshouldkeeptryingwithenthusiasm.Successconsists

intheabilitytocontinueeffortsthroughfailures.Attheageoftwelve,Igotanicebikeasabirthdaygift.Soex