ContinuationWriting—Focusontheforeshadowingandecho高考讀后續(xù)寫的評分原則1、與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接。2、內(nèi)容的合理性。3、應(yīng)用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的豐富性和準(zhǔn)確性。4、上下文的連貫性。第五檔

創(chuàng)造了新穎、豐富、合理的內(nèi)容，富有邏輯性，續(xù)寫完整，與原文情景融洽度高。（內(nèi)容合理性）

使用了多樣且恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)，表達(dá)流暢，語言錯誤很少，且完全不影響理解。（語言準(zhǔn)確性）

自然有效的使用了段落間、句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰、前后呼應(yīng)、意義連貫。（語篇連貫性）

reasonableandcoherentLearningobjectivesBytheendoftheclass,Iwillbeableto1.telltheadvantageofwritingechoforforeshadowing;2.locatetheforeshadowingthroughthreeprinciples;3.writetheechoforforeshadowingbyraisingandansweringquestions;4.doacontinuationwritingreasonablyandcoherently.2021年1月八省聯(lián)考Duringthispastyear,I’vehadthreeinstancesofcartrouble.Eachtimethesethingshappened,Iwassickofthewaymostpeoplehadn’tbotheredtohelp.Oneofthosetimes,IwasonthesideoftheroadforclosetothreehourswithmybigJeep.Iputsignsinthewindows,bigsignsthatsaidNEEDAJACK(千斤頂),andofferedmoney.Nothing.RightasIwasabouttogiveup,aMexicanfamilyinasmalltruckpulledover,andthefatherboundedout.Hesizedupthesituationandcalledforhisdaughter,whospokeEnglish.HeconveyedthroughherthathehadajackbutthatitwastoosmallfortheJeep,sowewouldneedsomethingtosupportit.Thenhegotasaw(鋸子)fromthetruckandcutasectionoutofabiglogonthesideoftheroad.Werolleditoverandputhisjackontop,andwewereinbusiness.Istartedtakingthewheeloff,andthen,ifyoucanbelieveit,Ibrokehistireiron.Noworries:Hehandedittohiswife,andshewasgoneinaflashdowntheroadtobuyanewtireiron.Shewasbackin15minutes.Wefinishedthejob,andIwasaveryhappyman.Thetwoofusweredirtyandsweaty.Hiswifepreparedapotofwaterforustowashourhands.Itriedtoputa$20billintheman’shand,buthewouldn’ttakeit,soinsteadIwentuptothetruckandgaveittohiswifeasquietlyasIcould.Iaskedthelittlegirlwheretheylived.Mexico,shesaid.TheywereinOregonsoMommyandDaddycouldworkonafruitfarmforthenextfewweeks.Thentheywouldgohome.

WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI’dhadlunch.OnlyatthatverymomentdidIcometorealize1.mystarvation,mybellyrumbling.Irepliedawkwardlywithashrug,“Notyet”.Thenthemotherhandedsomethingtothegirl,whohoppedoutoftheirtruckandslippeditintomyhands,saying,“Sir,thisisforyou!”It’s2.abulgingpaperbag.Ithankedthemagainandthefatherjustsmiledand,withwhatlookedlikegreatconcentration,3.saidinEnglish:“Todayyou,tomorrowus.”Thenherolleduphiswindowandpulledaway,withhisdaughterwavingtomefromtheback.Aftertheyleft,IgotintomyJeepandopenedthepaperbag.Insightcame4.aninvitingtamale（墨西哥玉米粉蒸肉）,thearomaofwhichpermeatedthenarrowspaceinaflash.IwhippeditoutandwolfedthebesttamaleI’veeverhad.Then,Iglimpsedsomethingatthebottomofthebag.5.My$20bill!Myeyesblurred.Ithadbeenaroughyear;6.Ihadlostbeliefinselflesshelpbetweenstrangers.ButthankstotheMexicanfamily,I

renewedmyfaithinthegoodnessofhumannatureanddeterminedtopassitdown.

OnePossibleVersionLearnbyappreciatingLearnbypracticingLearnbysharingHomeworkSelf-assessmentLearnbyappreciatingLearnbypracticingLearnbysharingHomeworkActivity1Appreciatethepossibleversion.ReadpassageAandmarkthecluesorhintsfortheunderlinedpartinthepossibleversion.Underlinedpart1.mystarvation,mybellyrumbling2.abulgingpaperbag3.inEnglish“Todayyou,tomorrowus.”4.aninvitingtamale(墨西哥玉米粉蒸肉)5.My$20bill!6.hadlostbeliefinselflesshelpbetweenstrangers.Self-assessmentClues&hints?2021年1月八省聯(lián)考Duringthispastyear,I’vehadthreeinstancesofcartrouble.Eachtimethesethingshappened,

Iwassickofthewaymostpeoplehadn’tbotheredtohelp.Oneofthosetimes,IwasonthesideoftheroadforclosetothreehourswithmybigJeep.Iputsignsinthewindows,bigsignsthatsaidNEEDAJACK(千斤頂),andofferedmoney.Nothing.RightasIwasabouttogiveup,aMexicanfamilyinasmalltruckpulledover,andthefatherboundedout.Hesizedupthesituationandcalledforhisdaughter,whospokeEnglish.HeconveyedthroughherthathehadajackbutthatitwastoosmallfortheJeep,sowewouldneedsomethingtosupportit.Thenhegotasaw(鋸子)fromthetruckandcutasectionoutofabiglogonthesideoftheroad.Werolleditoverandputhisjackontop,andwewereinbusiness.Istartedtakingthewheeloff,andthen,ifyoucanbelieveit,Ibrokehistireiron.Noworries:Hehandedittohiswife,andshewasgoneinaflashdowntheroadtobuyanewtireiron.Shewasbackin15minutes.Wefinishedthejob,andIwasaveryhappyman.Thetwoofusweredirtyandsweaty.Hiswifepreparedapotofwaterforustowashourhands.Itriedtoputa$20billintheman’shand,buthewouldn’ttakeit,soinsteadIwentuptothetruckandgaveittohiswifeasquietlyasIcould.Iaskedthelittlegirlwheretheylived.Mexico,shesaid.TheywereinOregonsoMommyandDaddycouldworkonafruitfarmforthenextfewweeks.Thentheywouldgohome.

WhenIwasabouttosaygoodbye,thegirlaskedifI’dhadlunch.OnlyatthatverymomentdidIcometorealize

1.mystarvation,mybellyrumbling.Irepliedawkwardlywithashrug,“Notyet”.Thenthemotherhandedsomethingtothegirl,whohoppedoutoftheirtruckandslippeditintomyhands,saying,“Sir,thisisforyou!”It’s2.abulgingpaperbag.Ithankedthemagainandthefatherjustsmiledand,withwhatlookedlikegreatconcentration,3.saidinEnglish:“Todayyou,tomorrowus.”Thenherolleduphiswindowandpulledaway,withhisdaughterwavingtomefromtheback.Aftertheyleft,IgotintomyJeepandopenedthepaperbag.Insightcame4.aninvitingtamale（墨西哥玉米粉蒸肉）,thearomaofwhichpermeatedthenarrowspaceinaflash.IwhippeditoutandwolfedthebesttamaleI’veeverhad.Then,Iglimpsedsomethingatthebottomofthebag.5.My$20bill!

Myeyesblurred.Ithadbeenaroughyear;I6.hadlostbeliefinselflesshelpbetweenstrangers.ButthankstotheMexicanfamily,I

renewedmyfaithinthegoodnessofhumannatureanddeterminedtopassitdown.

OnePossibleVersionLearnbyappreciatingLearnbypracticingLearnbysharingHomeworkTip1:Foreshadowingandechomakeyourwriting

reasonableandcoherent.Self-assessment

foreshadowing(伏筆)(hintsorcluespointingtofutureevents)

echo（呼應(yīng)）Activity2AnalyzethethemeWhenWhereWhoWhat

ReadpassageBandfinishthechartandthediagram.LearnbyappreciatingLearnbypracticingLearnbysharingSelf-assessmentHomeworkMother’sDayHouse(kitchen)Thetwins;Mother;FatherThetwinsmadebreakfasttogivetheirmotherasurprise.IndividualworkThetwopiecesofbreadturned________.Thestovewasa_______.Jeffgetburnedandgavea_______ofpain.________________Para.1 Para.2&3 Para.4 Para.5 PlotlineEmotionlineMother:_________Twins:_________Twins:________pleasedandproudexcitedFamilylovedisappointedThetwinsplanedtomakebreakfasttogiveMomasurprise.blackmesscryThefatherappeared.Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.LearnbyappreciatingLearnbypracticingLearnbysharingHomeworkSelf-assessmentTheme？IndividualworkActivity3LocatetheforeshadowingWritendassesslocationForeshadowing

Theirmotherwouldbepleasedandproud.

GraspthethemesurpriseStoveisamess;giveacryofpainindisappointment;fatherbreakfast;motherGroupworkReadpassageBagainandfindthetheproperforeshadowing.Tip2:Foreshadowingmaylieinthetitle,givensentences

and

becloselyrelatedto

thetheme.LearnbyappreciatingLearnbypracticingLearnbysharingHomeworkSelf-assessmenttitletheme-relatedgivensentencesRaisequestionsandanswertheminpairs.WriteandassessForeshadowing(whatweknow)Echoes(whatwewanttoknow)

Whathappenedtothemessystoveintheend?Didthecrywakesomeoneup?Whatwoulddrivetheirdisappointmentaway?Wouldthesurprisebeasuccess?Whatwouldtheydotomakeitasuccess?Howdidthechickenporridgesmell?WhatdidtheFrenchtoastlooklike?HowwouldtheMomshowherjoyandpride?surpriseTheirmotherwouldbepleasedandproud.Stoveisamess;giveacryofpainindisappointment;fatherbreakfast;motherLearnbyappreciatingLearnbypracticingLearnbysharingHomeworkSelf-assessmentHomeworkPairworkActivity4WritetheechoIndividualworkActivity5DoPeer-editingChecklistThedraftiscloselyrelatedtothetheme.

Thedraftisbasedontheforeshadowing.

Theechoisreasonable.LearnbyappreciatingLearnbypracticingLearnbysharingHomeworkHomeworkSelf-assessmentShareyoudraftwithyourclassmatesandgradehisorherworkbythefollowingchecklist.Foreshadowing(whatweknow)Echo(whatwewanttoknow)

surpriseTheirmotherwouldbepleasedandproud.Stoveisamess;giveacryofpainindisappointment;fatherbreakfast;motherLearnbyappreciatingLearnbypracticingLearnbysharingHomeworkSelf-assessmentHomeworkIndividualworkActivity5Writetheecho.Writetheechoforeachforeshadowingaccordingtoyourdiscussion.

Seeing

themessystove

andspilledporridge,theirfather,awakened

byJeff’scry,frownedandfrozewithshock.TheirfrustrationwassweptawaythemomentFatherpromisedtohelp.With

everythingsettled,Father

slippedbacktothebedroom,promisingtokeeptheirsecret.Fatherpretendedto

besurprisedtoseesuchdeliciousfood,wi