專(zhuān)題16讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)之九省聯(lián)考、2024浙江首考真題方法指導(dǎo)與詳解（2024年九省聯(lián)考）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Lastsummer,Hildaworkedasavolunteerwithdolphintrainersatasealifepark.Herjobwastomakesurethetankswerefreeofanyitemssothatthetrainerscouldtrainthedolphinstofetchspecificitems.However,onedayaftercleaning,oneofthedolphins,Maya,presentedHildawithacandywrapperfromthetank.WhenKatherine,thetrainer,sawthis,sheblamedHildaforhercarelessness.Upsetbutnotdiscouragedbythisevent,HildadecidedtodosomespyingonMaya.Thenextmorning,Hildaarrivedattheparkearly.Sheputonherscubagear(水下呼吸器)andjumpedintothetankforherusual,underwatersweep.Findingnothinginthetank,sheclimbedoutofthewaterjustintimetoseeKatherinejumpinginontheotherside.Afterwhathappenedyesterday,Hildaknewwhatshewasdoing.ShewatchedasKatherineperformedherunderwatersearch,butHildawasn'tsurprisedwhenshesurfacedemptyhanded.Duringthetanksweeps,Mayahadbeenswimmingplayfully,butnowthedolphinstoppedsuddenlyandswamtothebackpartofthetankwherethefilter(過(guò)濾)boxwaslocated.Shestuckhernosedownbehindtheboxandthenswamaway.WhatwasMayadoingbackthere?Hildawondered.Shejumpedbackintothewaterandswamovertotakealookbehindthebox,andherquestionwasanswered.HildathenswamacrossthetankfollowingMaya’spathandemergedfromthewatertofindKatherineremovingherscubagear.AsKatherineturnedaround,hermouthdroppedopen.TherewasMayaattheedgeofthetankwithab(梳子)inhermouthwaitingforhertreat.“Maya!Wheredidyougetthat?”demandedKatherine,takingthebandthrowingherafish.“Iknowwhereshegotit,”declaredHildaclimbingoutofthetankwithahandfulofitemsstillwetfromtheirwatery,restingplace.“What’sallthis?”Katherineasked,obviouslyconfused.注意:1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。“ThisisMaya’ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【文本解析】1.厘清人物及性格特點(diǎn)WhowhatcharacteristicsHilda:海洋公園志愿者負(fù)責(zé)清理海豚訓(xùn)練的水箱。聰明、觀察細(xì)致Katherine:海豚訓(xùn)練師起初因?yàn)檎`會(huì)責(zé)備Hilda，后來(lái)意識(shí)到Hilda的洞察力和瑪雅的特殊行為。嚴(yán)厲的Maya:海豚喜歡收集物品，并將其藏在過(guò)濾箱后面聰明2.運(yùn)用故事山來(lái)梳理文本情節(jié)發(fā)展：Opening:Hilda作為志愿者在海洋公園工作，負(fù)責(zé)清理海豚水箱。Buildup:因?yàn)镸aya呈現(xiàn)了一個(gè)糖果包裝紙，Katherine錯(cuò)誤地責(zé)備Hilda粗心沒(méi)打掃干凈。Hilda決定弄清真相，通過(guò)觀察，最終發(fā)現(xiàn)了海豚收集和隱藏物品的行為。Climax:Hilda向Katherine揭示了Maya的秘密并展示了海豚收集的物品。Resolution:Katherine意識(shí)到了Hilda的細(xì)致觀察和Maya的特殊行為，解開(kāi)了兩人之間的誤解。Ending:故事以Katherine對(duì)Hilda的贊賞和對(duì)Maya行為的新理解結(jié)束，突出了觀察、理解和團(tuán)隊(duì)合作的重要性。3.段落構(gòu)思由第一段段首句“海達(dá)微笑著說(shuō)那是瑪雅的秘密哦”和第二段段首句“現(xiàn)在凱瑟琳明白事實(shí)真相了”可知，第一段主要描寫(xiě)海達(dá)揭示秘密，凱瑟琳的反應(yīng)以及解釋秘密如何被發(fā)現(xiàn)的三部分。第二段主要描寫(xiě)凱瑟琳向海達(dá)道歉，并對(duì)瑪雅行為表示理解，并突出觀察、理解以及團(tuán)隊(duì)合作的重要性這三部分。【范文賞析】“ThisisMaya'ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.【真相大白】Inherhand,shedisplayedtheitemsshehadretrievedbehindthefilterbox.“She'sbeenkeepingthesefromthetank,notme.”【凱瑟琳反應(yīng)】Katherine'seyeswidenedassheexaminedthesmallpileofobjectsthatMayahadcollected.【秘密發(fā)現(xiàn)的過(guò)程】HildaexplainedhowshehadwatchedMayacleverlyhidetheitemsaway,turningthetankintoherownlittlecollectionspot.【冰釋前嫌】ThetensionintheairdissolvedasKatherinerealizedthatHilda'sdedicationhadrevealedMaya'splayfulhabit,notamistakeonherpart.NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.【凱瑟琳態(tài)度的轉(zhuǎn)變】ShelookedatMaya,thenatHilda,andhersternexpressionsoftenedintoasmile.“Ioweyouanapology,Hilda.You'veshowngreatinitiativeandcare,”shesaid,hertonefilledwithnewfoundrespect.【理解萬(wàn)歲】Together,theywatchedMayaperformhertricks,understandingnowthatthedolphin'sbehaviorwasnotatrainingissuebutasignofherintelligenceandcuriosity.【突出主題】Thedayendednotwithblame,butwithlaughterandasenseofteamwork,astheyallenjoyedMaya'scleverantics.【點(diǎn)睛】詞匯積累：eyeswidened瞪大眼睛herstern（嚴(yán)厲的）expressionsoftenedintoasmile嚴(yán)厲的表情化為微笑oweyouanapology欠你一聲道歉asenseofteamwork團(tuán)隊(duì)合作意識(shí)Blamesb.for因...責(zé)備某人mouthdroppedopen（由于吃驚）張大嘴巴[高分句型1]Katherine'seyeswidenedassheexaminedthesmallpileofobjectsthatMayahadcollected.【無(wú)靈主語(yǔ)、定語(yǔ)從句】[高分句型2]ThetensionintheairdissolvedasKatherinerealizedthatHilda'sdedicationhadrevealedMaya'splayfulhabit,notamistakeonherpart.【無(wú)靈主語(yǔ)、賓語(yǔ)從句】[高分句型3]ShelookedatMaya,thenatHilda,andhersternexpressionsoftenedintoasmile.【無(wú)靈主語(yǔ)，且創(chuàng)新使用了soften】[高分句型4]Thedayendednotwithblame,butwithlaughterandasenseofteamwork,astheyallenjoyedMaya'scleverantics（滑稽）.【無(wú)靈主語(yǔ)，not...but,endwith】（2024年浙江首考）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Evaspentthefirstweekofhighschooltryingtokeepherheadabovewater.Oneofthemajorheadachesforherwasfindingherwayinthehugeschoolbuilding.Itwasasixstorybuilding.Oneachfloor,hallwaysstretchedinfourdirections,leadingtoclassrooms,laboratories,andteachers'offices.Somewhereinthebuilding,therewasalsoalibrary,acafeteria,andagym.Havingapoorsenseofdirection,Evafounditimpossibletogetaroundinsuchahugebuilding.Allthedifferenthallwaysandroomsweretoomuchtothinkabout,letalonemittomemory.Shedecidedthatshewouldmemorizewhereherclasseswereandthenpretendthattherestoftheplacedidn’texist.InherfastP.E.class,EvawasshockedwhenCoachPittannouncedthateveryonehadtorunonemilearoundthetrackoutside.Shesearchedthefacesofherclassmatesforsignsofpanic.Therewasnothingshefearedmorethanhavingtorunawholemile.ToEva,"amile"wasusedtodescribelongdistances.Itwastenmilesfromherhometohergrandfather's,andthatalwaysseemedlikealongway,eveninacar!WhenCoachPittblewhiswhistle（哨子）,Evafiguredshewouldbeleftinthedust.However,whilesomeofherclassmatesedgedahead,othersactuallyfellbehind."It'sjustthebeginning,"shethought."I'lleinlastforsure."SoonEvabegantobreathehard,withherheartpoundingandlegsshaking.Feelingdesperate,Evastartedusingamindtrickonherself.Shestoppedthinkingabouttheword"mile."Instead,shefocusedonreachingtheshadoweastonthetrackbyanoaktreeupahead.Thensheconcentratedonjoggingtothespotwherethetrackcurved(彎）.Afterthat,shetriedtoseeifshecouldpleteherfirstlap.Onelapturnedintotwo,thenthree,thenfour.注意:1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150個(gè)左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph1:WhenCoachPittsaid"Nicework!"toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【文本解析】1.主題語(yǔ)境：人與自我；面對(duì)恐懼、適應(yīng)新環(huán)境、自我成長(zhǎng)和克服困難文本大意：Eva在高中的第一周艱難適應(yīng)。對(duì)于沒(méi)有方向感的她來(lái)說(shuō)，一個(gè)重大難題是在一所樓高六層，每層有四個(gè)方向走廊的學(xué)校建筑中找到自己的路，同時(shí)體育課上跑步也是一個(gè)巨大挑戰(zhàn)。2.故事山梳理故事情節(jié)Beginning:Eva開(kāi)始了她的高中生活，在這個(gè)新環(huán)境中她艱難適應(yīng)。最大的挑戰(zhàn)之一是在巨大的學(xué)校建筑中找到自己的路。建筑物龐大，使她感到迷茫。Buildup:Eva在巨大的學(xué)校建筑中迷路的問(wèn)題逐漸升級(jí)，她決定只記住自己上課的地方。此時(shí)，體育課上的一個(gè)新挑戰(zhàn)出現(xiàn)了：教練要求每個(gè)人跑一英里。Eva對(duì)跑步感到極度恐懼，認(rèn)為自己無(wú)法完成。Climax：跑步的時(shí)候，Eva開(kāi)始感到絕望。然而，她使用了一個(gè)心理技巧：不再想象一英里到底有多長(zhǎng)，而是專(zhuān)注于逐漸實(shí)現(xiàn)小目標(biāo)。她的心情由恐懼慢慢轉(zhuǎn)變?yōu)樽孕牛蝗τ忠蝗Φ貓?jiān)持。Resolution:Eva最終成功地完成了跑步，并意外地獲得了教練的表?yè)P(yáng)。她意識(shí)到，她所害怕的距離實(shí)際上更多是心理層面的挑戰(zhàn)。她決定將這種分解任務(wù)的方法應(yīng)用到學(xué)校的探索上，逐步熟悉整個(gè)建筑。Ending:Eva通過(guò)逐步攻克學(xué)校建筑的復(fù)雜性，成功地適應(yīng)了新環(huán)境。故事以她的成長(zhǎng)和自信的提升結(jié)束，她從一開(kāi)始的迷茫和恐懼變得更加自信和適應(yīng)。這個(gè)故事不僅是關(guān)于學(xué)習(xí)和適應(yīng)的，還強(qiáng)調(diào)了面對(duì)挑戰(zhàn)時(shí)心理策略的重要性。【范文賞析】WhenCoachPittsaid"Nicework"toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.Despiteherinitialdoubts,shehadnotonlypletedthemilebuthadalsokeptpacewithmanyofherclassmates.Herheartstillpoundedfromtheexertion(n．費(fèi)力；盡力）,andherlegsfeltlikejelly（緊張得發(fā)軟）,butasenseofacplishmentsurgedthroughher.Breakingthedauntingdistanceintosmallerachievabletargetshadmadetheimpossiblepossible.Sherealizedthatfocusingonimmediate,reachablegoals,likethenextbendinthetrackortheshadowofatree,haddistractedherfromtheoverwhelmingideaofthemile.Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.Insteadofbeingdauntedbyitsenormity,shebrokeitdownintomanageablesections.First,shefocusedonmemorizingtheroutefromtheentrancetoherfirstclass.Gradually,sheaddedotherlandmarksthelibrary,thecafeteria,thegymtohermentalmap.Dayby