TipsforcontinuationwritingSomegeneralconceptsWhatmakesagoodstory?Writingagoodarticleisjustliketobeagoodman:Youshouldhaveanoblesoul,astrongbodyandsuitableclothes.Threeprinciplestoevaluateacontinuationwriting

評(píng)估1.Fromtheplots2.Fromthedetails合情合理（真善美、積極向上）生動(dòng)具體/跌宕起伏+合乎邏輯+文風(fēng)一致3.Fromtheexpressions豐富準(zhǔn)確的表達(dá)三原則：正能量，一致性，曲折性

Step1Step2Step3Step4Step5研讀文本，尋找沖突確定主題，圍繞核心揣測(cè)首句，預(yù)測(cè)情節(jié)關(guān)注伏筆，高度融合解決沖突，升華主題Stepsforcontinuingyourstory讀后續(xù)寫高分要素1.眼前一亮的書寫卷面2.情節(jié)合理，銜接過渡自然，3.內(nèi)容可讀性強(qiáng)，創(chuàng)造性、邏輯性、豐富性、合理性4.生動(dòng)的動(dòng)作和貼切的心理描寫+環(huán)境襯托+少許對(duì)話5.豐富具體生動(dòng)高級(jí)的語言表達(dá)6.積極和有意義的結(jié)尾（解決沖突）Howtomakeyourcontinuationwritingvivid?題材題材Skill1：Show,don’ttell1.動(dòng)作描寫動(dòng)作鏈：使用一連串動(dòng)作讓畫面動(dòng)起來Hedied/isdead/passedaway.Helaystillonthegroundwithoutabreath,hisheartnotbeatinganymore.動(dòng)作描寫–動(dòng)作鏈題材題材例1:①Fortunately,hethrewmeabranchandpulledmeout.②Helayonhisstomach,pushedthebranchbeforehimandwoundhiswaytowardsme.Igrabbledthebranchwithcareandwasultimatelydraggedoutoftheicewater.Action1Action2Skill1:并列動(dòng)作-并列謂語動(dòng)詞表示（動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)要一致）Action3Action4Action5媽媽抱著孩子.形成動(dòng)作鏈:沖向前蹲下來一把抱住Mumdashedforward,kneltdownandgatheredthekidintoherarms.

CreateanactionchainSub.+V1,V2and(then)V3Mumhuggedthekidtightly.Mumgavethekida(tight)hug.

她擁抱了Betty.(失散多年的老朋友）Shedashedforward，gatheredBettyintoherarmsand

burstintotears.沖上去--抱住她--流下眼淚--dashforwardhug/gatherherintoherarmsburstintotears上車？getintothecargetonthebusShestoppedacar,gotintoitand

toldthedriverherdestination.Skill1:Createanactionchain:Sub.+V1,V2and

V3“我去救公主”我要帶上最好的劍翻過最高的山穿過最深的樹林把公主帶回來動(dòng)作少怎么辦？我?guī)献詈玫膭Ψ^最高的山闖入最深的森林把公主帶回

Iclimbedoverthehighestmountain,foundmywayintothedeepforestandbroughtbacktheprincess.

Carryingthebestsword,Iwentintothedeepforestandbroughttheprincessback.Iclimbedoverthehighestmountainandfoundmywayintothedenseforest,bringingbacktheprincess.Afterclimbingoverthehighestmountain,Ifoundmywayintothedenseforesttobringbacktheprincess.流暢三連動(dòng)同時(shí)發(fā)生有先有后，有因有果Shestoodonthetopofthemountain,lookingintotheskyandfeelingthepreciouspeaceinherinnermind.Shestoodonthetopofthemountain,lookedintotheskyand

feltthepreciouspeaceininherinnermind.Standingonthetopofthemountain,shelookedintothesky,feelingthepreciouspeaceinherinnermind.Practicemakesperfect心理描寫:喜怒形于色----Heishappy.Hissmilebroadenedfromeartoear.Heclappedhishandstogetherandjumpedupanddownwithjoy.Hegiggledandsquealedwithexcitement.facebodyvoiceSkill2:從面部/肢體和聲音三個(gè)方面體現(xiàn)人物的喜怒哀樂.v.咯咯地笑v.長聲尖叫brimover充滿/overflow/bubblewith(feelings)Herheart_______________________________________happiness.Awaveofhappiness_________________________________________.wasbrimmingover/overflowing/bubblingwithflooded/rippledover/overwhelmedme.welledup/surgedup/boiledup/cameinwaves.sbHewasveryhappy.他喜上眉梢。無靈主語Differentemotionsseize,grasp,grip(holdtightly),takeholdof,tear...intopiecesjealousy,fear,curiositypanic,anxiety,anger,bitternessdoubts,joy,

...Anxiety_________________________________

seized/grasped/gripped/tookholdofher.

toreherintopieces.Awildjoy

（negativeemotion）tookholdofher.（positiveemotion）Shewasveryhappy.Shewasverynervous.

TheInterplaybetweenInnerthoughts

andOutwardExpressionsSkill3:續(xù)寫中的內(nèi)外穿插法外在表象：陳述、動(dòng)作、對(duì)話、表情、環(huán)境、五感、外貌等內(nèi)心世界：心理活動(dòng)、感受描寫等相互作用交替運(yùn)用他默默地站在那里，感激的淚水在眼眶打轉(zhuǎn)。Hestoodtheredumbly,tearsofgratitude

wellingupinhiseyes.Withtearsofgratitude

wellingupinhiseyes,hestoodtheredumbly.動(dòng)作描寫心理+表情描寫情境：JohnjustbrokeupwithSarahduringadinnerdateinarestaurant.請(qǐng)描寫Sarah走出餐館的一幕。(寫出她的傷心）內(nèi)外描寫的交織陳述動(dòng)作描寫心理活動(dòng)感受描寫對(duì)話/獨(dú)白描寫表情描寫思考：紫句插在紅綠之間會(huì)更好嗎？Thewordsechoedinhermind,refusingtosinkin."We'regettingadivorce."Herparentshaddroppedthebombshelljustmomentsago,andtheteenagegirlwasstrugglingtoprocessthenews.Shesatonherbed,______________________________________________.Shefeltlost,helpless,andalone.Astheminutestickedby,thegirl'smindracedwithquestions,doubts,andfears.Wouldtheystillloveherthesameway?Whowouldshelivewith?Wouldanythingeverbethesameagain?Withaheavyheart,sheburiedherfaceinherpillow,wishingshecouldescapethepainandconfusionthathadtakenoverherlife.staringblanklyatthewall,astearssliddownherface(表情描寫）

Decodehowtheauthorconstructedthegirl’semotion.心理活動(dòng)+對(duì)話陳述感受描寫環(huán)境描寫心理活動(dòng)感受描寫動(dòng)作描寫心理活動(dòng)動(dòng)作描寫尋找單句中內(nèi)外描寫的交叉手段（內(nèi)）心理活動(dòng)、感受描寫(外)陳述、環(huán)境、五感、表情、動(dòng)作、外貌描寫astheyrealizedtheymightnotmakeitoutalive(動(dòng)作描寫+表情描寫）

技巧識(shí)別和訓(xùn)練：環(huán)境+動(dòng)作描寫五感描寫陳述心理描寫動(dòng)作描寫心理活動(dòng)陳述動(dòng)作描寫心理活動(dòng)環(huán)境/陳述感受描寫動(dòng)作描寫表情描寫心理活動(dòng)感受描寫感受描寫動(dòng)作描寫尋找單句中內(nèi)外描寫的交叉手段（內(nèi)）心理活動(dòng)、感受描寫(外)陳述、環(huán)境、五感、表情、動(dòng)作、外貌描寫請(qǐng)用內(nèi)外穿插法描寫我上臺(tái)彈鋼琴時(shí)的緊張及戰(zhàn)勝緊張的過程。Everynerveinmybodystretchingtoabreakingpoint,Ifinallymadefirmstepstothepianobench.Withadeepbreath,Iarrangedmyfingersonthekeyscautiouslyandbegantoplay.Tomygreatrelief,thefirstnotewaslikeadropofwaterdrippingintoabarrenland(切換描寫對(duì)象）,instantlydrivingawaymyawkwardnessandnervousness.Followingthefirstnote,thebeautifulmelodyflewoutnaturallywiththedanceofmyfingers.（擬人）

Igrewmoreandmoreconfident,smilingwitheyesclosed,andentirelyimmersedmyselfintheshow.感受描寫動(dòng)作描寫動(dòng)作描寫感受描寫感受描寫動(dòng)作描寫感受描寫Tip：注意兩個(gè)切換：描寫對(duì)象的切換&內(nèi)外描寫的切換WritingtimeAsplanned,BilltriedtopushCharliewhilejumpingonthetrackduringthesackrace.Buthelosthisbalanceandfelldown!Hislegwasbadlyinjuredandhecouldnotevenstandupbyhimself.Butashewasunpopularamonghisfriends,nooneturneduptohelphim!注意：1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2．請(qǐng)按如下格式在相應(yīng)位置作答。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Charlienoticedwhathadhappened.HesawBillfalldownonthetrack,clutchinghisinjuredleg.However,insteadofrushingovertohelp,Charliehesitatedforamoment.HerememberedallthetroubleBillhadcausedhimandwonderedifitwasworthhelpingsomeonewhohadbeensomeantohim.Butdeepdown,Charlieknewthatkindnesswasalwaystherightchoice.Pushingasidehisnegativethoughts,hewentovertoBillandofferedhimahelpinghand.