1、 欣賞下列兩個語段，并指出它們的技巧欣賞下列兩個語段，并指出它們的技巧 1. Brief as the passage is, it still arouses my endless imagination to the past time. Were I in the past, I would like that I stayed in Britain in the 19th century, where and when the Revolution of Industry was flourishing. With the inspiring atmosphere of the cre

2、ative times, I would try my utmost to do my favorite scientific experiment, since I have great interest in science. Whats more, the scientific lovers would be invited to join my little club to invent some brand-new inventions and create new designs of our daily lifes products, cooperating to put the

3、 theory we learned from books to our practical life. In this way I could get inspiration of wisdom and resourcefulness to bring convenience and improvements to our life. 2. Should I be given the opportunities to travel to the past, I would like to go back to Qing Dynasty of early 20th century when C

4、hina was in a disaster. Were I back in the late Qing Dynasty, I would make every endeavor to rescue China from the foreign invaders and prevent it from being bullied without resistance. Firstly, I would teach my modern theory and knowledge to the governors, instructing them to fight against the enem

5、ies and construct powerful armies. Secondly, all the citizens would be called on to unite together and resist other countries invasion bravely. Whats more, joining some anti-invaders parties would also be my choice. 亮點句型寫作指導亮點句型寫作指導除了虛擬語氣外，有許多亮點句型可以應用到寫除了虛擬語氣外，有許多亮點句型可以應用到寫作中，增分添彩。作中，增分添彩。比喻比喻 A is

6、to B what C is to D. Like the sunshine , kindness can help those in trouble. Kindness is like the lighthouse, which can direct the way for those who are in dim situation.排比排比If I could go back to the past and do the above mentioned things, the last thing my grandpa remembered would not be the indiff

7、erence and the back of his beloved grandson. If I could travel back through time, the last memory between him and me would not be his closed eyes and the dead look of half-unconscious suffering. Then now, I would not have to live with this unbearable regret and pain for the rest of my life. If only

8、I could! 倒裝（贏在寫作倒裝（贏在寫作 P37-38） Simple as the story is , Here goes the saying that _. Only when _ can we _. Only in this way, can we Only by doing -, can we_. Only after doing sth, can we On the west of the school lies a pond, where many fish are swimming. Under no circumstance should we - 類似的用法：類似的

9、用法： Never/ By no means / on no account / in no way / at no time should I . Hardly/scarcely had I got into the room when it began to rain.( no sooner， than) Had it not been for her sticking to being on time, she wouldnt have earned herself a well-paid job and more importantly built up an image of rel

10、iability and integrity. 倒裝倒裝 Should I be given the opportunities to travel to the past, I would like to go back to Qing Dynasty of early 20th century when China was in a disaster. Were I back in the late Qing Dynasty, I would make every endeavor to rescue China from the foreign invaders and prevent

11、it from being bullied without resistance. 亮點寫作的注意事項亮點寫作的注意事項 1. 過多的亮點，顯得堆砌過多的亮點，顯得堆砌 對策：亮點分布，盡量首句對策：亮點分布，盡量首句 2.亮點單一，例如全段排比或比喻亮點單一，例如全段排比或比喻 對策：最好總對策：最好總排比排比-總的結構。照顧段總的結構。照顧段落的完整性。落的完整性。 3.華而不實，不重視內容，徒有框架沒有內華而不實，不重視內容，徒有框架沒有內容容 對策：先想內容，再想修辭手法對策：先想內容，再想修辭手法 4. 過多注重運用亮點，沒有注意謀篇，顧過多注重運用亮點，沒有注意謀篇，顧此失彼此失彼

12、 對策：謀好篇，定好每點行數，才能下筆對策：謀好篇，定好每點行數，才能下筆亮點句型寫作訓練亮點句型寫作訓練 練習：練習： 1.說明挫折的意義說明挫折的意義 2.你怎樣看待老師對學生的影響。你怎樣看待老師對學生的影響。 3.說說你對母愛的理解說說你對母愛的理解 4.談談決心對人的影響談談決心對人的影響使用虛擬語氣寫作的注意事項：使用虛擬語氣寫作的注意事項：1.確定到底要不要確定到底要不要“虛虛”？2.確定到底使用哪個時態的確定到底使用哪個時態的“虛虛”？3.所謂所謂“一虛到底一虛到底”，其實是指在該假設情境，其實是指在該假設情境中的虛擬的時態的一致性。而非一定是通段都中的虛擬的時態的一致性。而非

13、一定是通段都使用虛擬！一切要看情況進行選用。使用虛擬！一切要看情況進行選用。說說挫折的意義說說挫折的意義 1. Hard and painful as frustration is, it is of significance in our life. As the old saying goes, “storm makes trees take deeper roots”, without frustration, never could we grow up as a strong-willed person. Were we surrounded by over-praise and i

14、mmersed in the pride and happiness, frustration would be a timely alarm, urging us not to stop at the so-called peak and continue your pace of pursuit. Were we confronted with obstacles, frustration could be a philosophers stone（魔法石）（魔法石）, with which we could transform the temporary setbacks to grea

15、t opportunities to become strongerIn a word, life is not only about how to live through the storm but also how to dance in the rain.說說挫折的意義說說挫折的意義 2. Never can we emphasize the significance of setback too much. Without setback, our life would be a rose lacking fragrance. Without setback, our life wo

16、uld be a voyage lacking direction. It is no exaggeration to say that frustration has sown the seed of maturity and self-development in my inner heart and has made it possible for me to achieve great success.老師對學生的影響老師對學生的影響 1. Suppose that teachers were absent in our life, students life would be a p

17、icture with intense darkness. Without teachers, the laborious engineers of our soul, students personalities and characters would not be shaped. Without teachers, the ladder with selfless devotion, our heart would not be lifted up by encouragement and grow mature. Without teachers, the sparkling ligh

18、thouse in the ocean of knowledge, never could teenagers find access to the successful life in the future. 老師對學生的影響老師對學生的影響 2. Without the patient and careful teachers, never could students grow from a childish and dependent child into a mature and independent adult. Without the selfless and affectio

19、nate preaching of teachers, never could students step onto a path with a bright and promising future. Without the knowledgeable teachers, never would students master the necessary knowledge and devote them to the construction of a more harmonious society and country.母愛的理解母愛的理解 1. Without maternal af

20、fection, we would change from fragrant flowers into weeds abandoned by others without a shelter and care. Without this ever-lasting emotion, never would we live as full and rich a life as other children surrounded by merriment and happiness. 母愛的理解母愛的理解 2. Maternal love is like a circle. It has no be

21、ginning and no ending. But for motherhood, we would be the little strayed lambs who step on the mistaken track. But for motherhood, never can we be enveloped in warmth and merriment by a patch of sunlight. But for motherhood, we could be overwhelmed by endless darkness and the world would fade from

22、colorful and wonderful to dim and cold.決心的影響決心的影響 1. Determination is the fuel of ships, without which, never could we arrive at the shore of success. Determination is the walking stick of the climbers, without which, never could we reach the peak of life. Determination is the very condition, withou

23、t which, never could we get rid of the dark depth of depression. 決心的影響決心的影響 2. Without the firm determination, never could individuals grow into strong trees struggling in the wind and rain. Without the steadfast mind, never could teams unite together to create miracle. Without the unswerving resolu

24、tion, never could countries unite and fight for the flourishing and bright future as well as a harmonious world. 說說挫折的意義說說挫折的意義 1. Hard and painful as frustration is,（倒裝）（倒裝） it is of significance in our life. As the old saying goes, “storm makes trees take deeper roots”,（名言）（名言） without frustration

25、, never could we grow up as a strong-willed person. （虛擬）（虛擬）Were we surrounded by over-praise and immersed in the pride and happiness, frustration would be a timely alarm, urging us not to stop at the so-called peak and continue your pace of pursuit. Were we confronted with obstacles, frustration co

26、uld be a philosophers stone（魔法石）（魔法石）, with which we could transform the temporary setbacks to great opportunities to become stronger.(虛擬虛擬+排比排比+非限制性定從非限制性定從) In a word, life is not only about how to live through the storm but also how to dance in the rain.(總結總結部分可以用現在時部分可以用現在時)說說挫折的意義說說挫折的意義 2. Nev

27、er can we emphasize the significance of setback too much. (倒裝倒裝) Without setback, our life would be a rose lacking fragrance. Without setback, our life would be a voyage lacking direction. It is no exaggeration to say that frustration has sown the seed of maturity and self-development in my inner he

28、art and has made it possible for me to achieve great success.（虛擬反說（虛擬反說+比喻比喻+排比）排比）老師對學生的影響老師對學生的影響 1. Suppose that teachers were absent in our life, students life would be a picture with intense darkness. Without teachers, the laborious engineers of our soul, students personalities and characters w

29、ould not be shaped. Without teachers, the ladder with selfless devotion, our heart would not be lifted up by encouragement and grow mature. Without teachers, the sparkling lighthouse in the ocean of knowledge, never could teenagers find access to the successful life in the future.（虛擬反說（虛擬反說+排比）排比） 老

30、師對學生的影響老師對學生的影響 2. Without the patient and careful teachers, never could students grow from a childish and dependent child into a mature and independent adult. Without the selfless and affectionate preaching of teachers, never could students step onto a path with a bright and promising future. Witho

31、ut the knowledgeable teachers, never would students master the necessary knowledge and devote them to the construction of a more harmonious society and country.（虛（虛擬反說擬反說+排比）排比）母愛的理解母愛的理解 1. Without maternal affection, we would change from fragrant flowers into weeds abandoned by others without a sh

32、elter and care. Without this ever-lasting emotion, never would we live as full and rich a life as other children surrounded by merriment and happiness. （虛擬反說（虛擬反說+排比）排比）母愛的理解母愛的理解 2. Maternal love is like a circle. It has no beginning and no ending. （比喻，多一句進（比喻，多一句進行補充說明，使得比喻更具體形象）行補充說明，使得比喻更具體形象）But for motherhood, we would be the littl