1、作文專項練習之一亮點詞匯及句型篇亮點詞匯及句型篇評分重點項目評分重點項目l關(guān)聯(lián)詞l同義替換（詞匯+句型）l內(nèi)容：不跑題六級考試作文閃光點六級考試作文閃光點- 高分作文標志高分作文標志 l1. 主動和被動語態(tài)交替使用l 2：是否長短句交叉;l 3、是否會使用插入語;l 4、用詞是否多樣，準確，形象，盡量使用能夠吸引閱卷老師眼球的閃光詞; l 5、關(guān)鍵詞是否換用，切勿老用重復詞; l 6、句型使用是否準確、地道。寫作技巧：寫作技巧：l1. 適當用被動替換主動，適當用被動替換主動，這樣能更客觀的反映事實, 句子開頭不要總是用we / I (比如寫結(jié)尾時不用we should pay attentio

2、n to而用Attention should be paid to. ) l修改前修改前: I think although a name is necessary in social life, we should not overemphasize its importance. l修改后：修改后： From my perspective, although a name is indispensable in social life, its importance should not be overemphasized.2.巧用插入語巧用插入語l除去所有的不可能,剩下的就是再不可能也是

3、真相。 l在福爾摩斯探案集里找到的原文：lWhen all other contingencies（意外事件） fail, whatever remains, however improbable, must be the truth. 插入語的類型插入語的類型lA. 副詞插入語：frankly， especially， fortunately， indeed， howeverl【譯文】但是其他的人認為l原文1: However, other individuals take the attitude that l修改后： Other individuals, however, take th

4、e attitude that lB. 短語插入語：generally speaking， to tell the truth， in a sense， in a word，needless to sayl【譯文】總而言之，家長不該無視電腦游戲?qū)π『⒌母弊饔谩【例句】Parents， in a word， should never neglect the side-effects of computer games on their children.lC. 短句插入語：I suppose， as I see it， I believe， what is importantl【譯文】重要的是

5、，環(huán)境對人的性格有深遠影響。l【例句】Environment， what is important， has a far-reaching influence on ones personality. l 3. 一定要學會換詞，換形象，具體的一定要學會換詞，換形象，具體的替換太寬泛的。替換太寬泛的。(考試中一般不要出現(xiàn)good, bad , many, thing, think, people, more and more等等)六級寫作30個最經(jīng)典的替換詞l1.individuals替換(people )l2: positive, favorable，promising(有希望的)，perfe

6、ct, pleasurable , excellent, outstanding, superior替換goodl3:unfeasible , unadvisable, unfavorable, adverse, detrimental (有害的)替換badl如果bad做表語，可以有be less impressive替換leg. An army of college students indulge themselves in playing games, enjoying romance with girls/boys or killing time passively in their

7、dorms. When it comes to graduation ,as a result, their records are less impressive.l4.(an army of, an ocean of, a sea of, a multitude of ,a host of, manyif not most)替換many.ll 5: a slice of, quiet a few , several替換somel6:harbor the idea that, take the attitude that, hold the view that, it is widely s

8、hared that,l句型It is universally acknowledged that替thinkl7:affair ,issue ,matter 替換thingl8: profound, far-reaching 代替 deepl9.reap huge fruits 替換get many benefits l10:from my own perspective 替換 in my opinionl11:increasing(ly),growing ,mounting 替換more and more( 注意沒有g(shù)rowingly這種形式。所以當修飾名詞時用increasing/gro

9、wing.修飾形容詞，副詞用increasingly.lEg. sth has gained growing popularity.ll 12.little if anything, 或little or nothing替換hardlyl13.beneficial, rewarding替換helpful,l14. consumer, purchaser, 替換customerl15.exceedingly,extremely, intensely 替換veryl 16. indispensable 替換necessaryl17.sth appeals to sb, 或者 sth exerts

10、a tremendous fascination on sb 替換sb is interested in 18.capture ones attention替換attract ones attention.l19.facet,dimension 替換aspectl20.give rise to, lead to, result in, trigger ,contribute to 替換cause.l 21. launch a huge impact on , 或者 exert a tremendous influence on ,或者affect, 或者have a positive effe

11、ct on 代替 influencel 22. There are several factors accounting for the phenomenon that 替換.reasons for sthl23.desire 替換want.l24. be alert to 替換pay attention tol25.bear in mind that 替換rememberl26. enjoy, possess 替換have(注意process是過程的意思)l27. interaction替換communicationl28.frown on sth替換 be against , disagr

12、ee with sthl29.to name only a few, takeas an example替換 for example, for instancel30. vital, crucial 替換 important Exercisesl1. All in all, it is bad to put all eggs in just one basket because it may lead to bad results.l2. It is bad to judge a person by his appearance.l3. There are many reasons for t

13、he wide use of technology in education.l4. Undoubtedly, Smart phones affect peoples life greatly.l5. Technology has been a necessary part in education, influencing the way people receive education.l6. People should pay attention to the bad effects of technology as over-dependence will certainly lead

14、 to lack of basic skills. Exercisel1. All in all, it is bad to put all eggs in just one basket because it may lead to bad results.l修改后: All in all , it is highly unfeasible to put all eggs in just one basket because it may give rise to unfavorable / unexpected/ less impressive results.l2. It is bad

15、to judge a person by his appearance.l修改后： It is unadvisable to judge a person by his appearance. l3. There are many reasons for the wide use of technology in education.l修改后：There are many reasons accounting for （或者 contributing to ）the wide application of technology in education. l4. Undoubtedly, Sm

16、art phones affect peoples life greatly.l修改后： Smart phones, undoubtedly, launch a huge impact on human life.l或者 Smart phones , undoubtedly, exert a tremendous effect on human life. l5. Technology has been a necessary part in education, influencing the way people receive education.l修改后： Technology has

17、 been an indispensable part in education, exerting great influence on the way people receive education. l6. People should pay attention to the bad effects of technology as over-dependence will certainly lead to lack of basic skills. l修改后： People should be alert to the negative effects of technology

18、as over-dependence will certainly result in lack of basic skills. 六級考試作文閃光點六級考試作文閃光點- 高分作文標志高分作文標志 l1. 主動和被動語態(tài)交替使用l 2：是否長短句交叉;l 3、是否會使用插入語;l 4、用詞是否多樣，準確，形象，盡量使用能夠吸引閱卷老師眼球的閃光詞; l 5、關(guān)鍵詞是否換用，切勿老用重復詞; l 6、句型使用是否準確、地道。l 如何寫句子如何寫句子l一、 長短句結(jié)合l二、 主題句l三、一二三原則l四、短語原則l五、 多實少虛原則l六、句型多樣化l一、一、 長短句原則。長短句原則。lAs a cr

19、eature, I eat; as a man, I read. Although one action is to meet the primary need of my body and the other is to satisfy the intellectual need of mind, they are in a way quite similar. l強烈建議：在文章第一段強烈建議：在文章第一段(開頭開頭)用一長一短用一長一短，且先長且先長后短后短;在文章主體部分，要先用一個主題句解釋主要意思，然后在闡述幾個要點的時候采用先短后長先短后長的句群形式，定會讓主體部分妙筆生輝!文章

20、結(jié)尾一般用一長一短一長一短就可以了。l二、 主題句原則主題句原則。l一定要寫一個主題句，放在文章的開頭(保險型)或者結(jié)尾，讓讀者一目了然，必會平安無事!l特別提示：隱藏主體句可是要冒險的!lThere are several reasons why it is not proper that we haste to get a conclusion. l三、三、 一一 二二 三原則。三原則。l to begin with, then, furthermore, finally(強烈推薦)l1)to start with, next, in addition, finally(強烈推薦)l2)f

21、irst and foremost, besides, last but not least(強烈推薦)l3)most important of all, moreover, finallyl4)on the one hand, on the other hand(適用于兩點的情況)l5) for one thing, for another thing(適用于兩點的情況)Bank-fillingl他（ ）犧牲生命， （ ）出賣組織。l60后： 寧可，也不l70后： 害怕， 所以l80后： 與其， 不如l90后： 即使， 也要 (1)如分段敘述某一個問題或表示順序順序時，可用First， Se

22、cond， Third或Inthefirstplace, Inthesecondplace,Lastbutnottheleast來表示銜接。 (2)舉例說明舉例說明時可用for example, for instance, to illustrate, a case in point is 來表示。 (3)進一步闡述闡述時可用furthermore, in addition, similarly, moreover來加以提示。 (4)強調(diào)某一點的重要性強調(diào)某一點的重要性時，可用surely, truly, undoubtedly, clearly, indeed, as a matter of

23、 fact來加強句子的力度。 (5)作結(jié)論結(jié)論時可用therefore, in summary, consequently, in conclusion, in short, in a word等來導出。 (6)分析因果因果時可用because，due to，so that，as a result等來表現(xiàn)主從句之間的邏輯關(guān)系。 (7)轉(zhuǎn)換思路轉(zhuǎn)換思路時，可用but，however，nevertheless，otherwise等以示轉(zhuǎn)折，而on the one hand, on the other hand;on one side of the coin, on the other side o

24、f the coin 則可用來連接兩個相反的事實或觀點。 (8) It follows that. It can be inferred that. It suggests that.則將讀者引入作者的邏輯推理邏輯推理思路。 如何使英文句子上下連貫，段落銜接過渡自然？如何使英文句子上下連貫，段落銜接過渡自然？l四、短語優(yōu)先原則。四、短語優(yōu)先原則。l關(guān)鍵時刻思維短路，只有湊字數(shù)，怎么辦?用短語是一個辦法!比如：I cannot bear it. 可以用短語表達：I cannot put up with it. lI want it. 可以用短語表達：I am looking forward to

25、 it. 這樣字數(shù)明顯增加，表達也更準確。l五、多實少虛原則五、多實少虛原則l原因很簡單，寫文章還是應(yīng)該寫一些實際的東西，不要空話連篇。這就要求一定要多用實詞，少用虛詞。我這里所說的虛詞就是指那些比較大的詞。l比如我們說一個很好的時候，不應(yīng)該之說nice這樣空洞的詞，應(yīng)該使用一些諸如generous, humorous, interesting, smart, gentle, warm-hearted, hospital 之類的形象詞。l再比如： 走出房間，概括性的詞是：walk out of the room 但是小偷走出房間應(yīng)該說：slip out of the room 小孩走出房間應(yīng)該

26、說：jump/ dance out of the room 老人走出房間應(yīng)該說：stagger out of the room.l所以多用實詞，少用虛詞，文章將會大放異彩!六、句型的多樣化六、句型的多樣化l(1) The goats grazed（吃草） peacefully in the farm and were unaware of the approaching hunter. (并列分句(1)+2)l(2) Grazing peacefully, the goats in the farm were unaware of the approaching hunter. (現(xiàn)在分語短語

27、+簡單句)l(3) There were goats grazing peacefully in the farm, unaware of the approaching hunter. (簡單句+形容語短語)l(4) As the goats grazed peacefully in the farm, they were unaware of the approaching hunter. (原因副詞從句+主句) summaryl1. ：詞匯 亮點詞匯l2. 句型一、 長短句結(jié)合二、 主題句三、一二三原則四、短語原則五、 多實少虛原則六、句型多樣化 插入語 主動被動轉(zhuǎn)換l下面舉一篇南京工程

28、學院某位同學寫的優(yōu)秀作文(14分) Computer and I 的例子，看看他是如何綜合運用各類寫作技巧的。 Computer and I l1. I never forget the very exciting day when my mother bought me a computer as birthday present, which interests me so that I indulged myself in searching a lot of useful information I had expected ,and enjoy a lot of melodious

29、classic music. That night I was sleepless, feeling that the whole world belonged to me. Computer and I l I never forget the exceedingly thrilling day when my mother bought me a computer as birthday present, which exerted a tremendous fascination on me so that I indulged myself in googling an army of

30、 useful information i had expected ,and enjoy a sea of melodious classic music. That night I was sleepless, feeling that the whole world belonged to me. ll2. Computers become more and more popular in the dawn of the new century. With the development of science and technology, computers entering into

31、 the current society as a fashion are appealing to more and more individuals. It is no doubt that we have been submerged by them, in large measure!lThe dawn of the new century witnessed the increasing popularity of computers.l Coincident with the advancement of science and technology, computers pour

32、ing into the current society as a fashion are appealing to growing individuals. lIt is no exaggeration to say we have been submerged by them, in large measures.ll3. To begin with, we can search desired information at any moment . Little by little, we can enrich our knowledge and broaden our horizons. Besides, we can get huge recreations online by chatting, playing games, or sending email.lll For a start, we can, freely, search desired information at any moment .l Little by little, our