專題06讀后續寫關鍵之快速故事情節

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【高考真題】

1.（2024年1月新高考浙江卷）---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------2頁

2.（2024年九省聯考試題）---------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------4頁

3.(2021·新高考Ⅰ&Ⅱ卷)----------------------------------------------------------------------7頁

【高考模擬】

1.（2024·廣東省茂名市一模）----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------9頁

2.（2024·云南省昆明市一模）--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------11頁

3.（2024·山東省德州市“優高聯盟”高三2月診斷性檢測）-----------------------------------------------------14頁

4.（2024·山東省濟寧市第一中學高三模擬）--------------------------------------------------------------------------16頁

5.（2024·福建省部分學校高三模擬）-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------19頁

06讀后續寫關鍵之快速故事情節

【高考真題】

1.（2024年1月新高考浙江卷）閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續寫兩段，使之構成一篇完

整的短文。

Evaspentthefirstweekofhighschooltryingtokeepherheadabovewater.Oneofthemajorheadachesfor

herwasfindingherwayinthehugeschoolbuilding.Itwasasix-storybuilding.Oneachfloor,hallways

stretchedinfourdirections,leadingtoclassrooms,laboratories,andteachers'offices.Somewhereinthe

building,therewasalsoalibrary,acafeteria,andagym.

Havingapoorsenseofdirection,Evafounditimpossibletogetaroundinsuchahugebuilding.Allthe

differenthallwaysandroomsweretoomuchtothinkabout,letalonecommittomemory.Shedecidedthatshe

wouldmemorizewhereherclasseswereandthenpretendthattherestoftheplacedidn’texist.

InherfastP.E.class,EvawasshockedwhenCoachPittannouncedthateveryonehadtorunonemilearound

thetrackoutside.Shesearchedthefacesofherclassmatesforsignsofpanic.Therewasnothingshefearedmore

thanhavingtorunawholemile.ToEva,"amile"wasusedtodescribelongdistances.Itwastenmilesfromher

hometohergrandfather's,andthatalwaysseemedlikealongway,eveninacar!

WhenCoachPittblewhiswhistle（哨子）,Evafiguredshewouldbeleftinthedust.However,whilesomeof

herclassmatesedgedahead,othersactuallyfellbehind."It'sjustthebeginning,"shethought."I'llcomeinlast

forsure."

SoonEvabegantobreathehard,withherheartpoundingandlegsshaking.Feelingdesperate,Evastarted

usingamindtrickonherself.Shestoppedthinkingabouttheword"mile."Instead,shefocusedonreachingthe

shadoweastonthetrackbyanoaktreeupahead.Thensheconcentratedonjoggingtothespotwherethetrack

curved(彎）.Afterthat,shetriedtoseeifshecouldcompleteherfirstlap.Onelapturnedintotwo,thenthree,

thenfour.

注意:

1.續寫詞數應為150個左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。

Paragraph1:WhenCoachPittsaid"Nicework!"toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.

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Paragraph2:Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.

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1.文本大解讀

Eva在高中的第一周艱難適應。對于沒有方向感的她來說，一個重大難題是在一所樓高六層，每層有

四個方向走廊的學校建筑中找到自己的路，同時體育課上跑步也是一個巨大挑戰。

2.故事山梳理故事情節

Beginning:Eva開始了她的高中生活，在這個新環境中她艱難適應。最大的挑戰之一是在巨大的學校建筑

中找到自己的路。建筑物龐大，使她感到迷茫。

Build-up:Eva在巨大的學校建筑中迷路的問題逐漸升級，她決定只記住自己上課的地方。此時，體育課

上的一個新挑戰出現了：教練要求每個人跑一英里。Eva對跑步感到極度恐懼，認為自己無法完成。

Climax：跑步的時候，Eva開始感到絕望。然而，她使用了一個心理技巧：不再想象一英里到底有多長，

而是專注于逐漸實現小目標。她的心情由恐懼慢慢轉變為自信，一圈又一圈地堅持。

Resolution:Eva最終成功地完成了跑步，并意外地獲得了教練的表揚。她意識到，她所害怕的距離實際上

更多是心理層面的挑戰。她決定將這種分解任務的方法應用到學校的探索上，逐步熟悉整個建筑。

Ending:Eva通過逐步攻克學校建筑的復雜性，成功地適應了新環境。故事以她的成長和自信的提升結束，

她從一開始的迷茫和恐懼變得更加自信和適應。這個故事不僅是關于學習和適應的，還強調了面對挑戰時

心理策略的重要性。

3.分析文本語言特點：見文本劃線部分。

【參考范文】

WhenCoachPittsaid"Nicework"toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.Despiteherinitial

doubts,shehadnotonlycompletedthemilebuthadalsokeptpacewithmanyofherclassmates.Herheartstill

poundedfromtheexertion,andherlegsfeltlikejelly,butasenseofaccomplishmentsurgedthroughher.Breaking

thedauntingdistanceintosmallerachievabletargetshadmadetheimpossiblepossible.Sherealizedthatfocusing

onimmediate,reachablegoals,likethenextbendinthetrackortheshadowofatree,haddistractedherfromthe

overwhelmingideaofthemile.

Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.Insteadofbeingdauntedbyits

enormity,shebrokeitdownintomanageablesections.First,shefocusedonmemorizingtheroutefromthe

entrancetoherfirstclass.Gradually,sheaddedotherlandmarks-thelibrary,thecafeteria,thegym-toher

mentalmap.Daybyday,whatwasonceamazebecameaseriesoffamiliarpathways.Mirroringhertriumphon

thetrack,masteringthelayoutoftheschoolmarkedyetanotherstepinherjourneytowardsself-assuranceand

adaptability.

2.（2024年九省聯考試題）

閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。

Lastsummer,Hildaworkedasavolunteerwithdolphintrainersatasealifepark.Herjobwastomakesurethe

tankswerefreeofanyitemssothatthetrainerscouldtrainthedolphinstofetchspecificitems.However,oneday

aftercleaning,oneofthedolphins,Maya,presentedHildawithacandywrapperfromthetank.WhenKatherine,the

trainer,sawthis,sheblamedHildaforhercarelessness.Upsetbutnotdiscouragedbythisevent,Hildadecidedtodo

somespyingonMaya.

Thenextmorning,Hildaarrivedattheparkearly.Sheputonherscubagear(水下呼吸器)andjumpedintothe

tankforherusual,underwatersweep.Findingnothinginthetank,sheclimbedoutofthewaterjustintimetosee

Katherinejumpinginontheotherside.Afterwhathappenedyesterday,Hildaknewwhatshewasdoing.Shewatched

asKatherineperformedherunderwatersearch,butHildawasn'tsurprisedwhenshesurfacedempty-handed.

Duringthetanksweeps,Mayahadbeenswimmingplayfully,butnowthedolphinstoppedsuddenlyand

swamtothebackpartofthetankwherethefilter(過濾)boxwaslocated.Shestuckhernosedownbehindthebox

andthenswamaway.WhatwasMayadoingbackthere?Hildawondered.Shejumpedbackintothewaterand

swamovertotakealookbehindthebox,andherquestionwasanswered.Hildathenswamacrossthetank

followingMaya’spathandemergedfromthewatertofindKatherineremovingherscubagear.AsKatherineturned

around,hermouthdroppedopen.TherewasMayaattheedgeofthetankwithacomb(梳子)inhermouthwaiting

forhertreat.

“Maya!Wheredidyougetthat?”demandedKatherine,takingthecombandthrowingherafish.“Iknow

whereshegotit,”declaredHildaclimbingoutofthetankwithahandfulofitemsstillwetfromtheirwatery,resting

place.“What’sallthis?”Katherineasked,obviouslyconfused.

注意:

1.續寫詞數應為150個左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。

“ThisisMaya’ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.

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NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.

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【文本解讀】

1.人物及性格特點

Whowhatcharacteristics

負責清理海豚訓練的水箱。聰明、觀察細致

Hilda:海洋公園志愿者

起初因為誤會責備Hilda，后來意嚴厲的

識到Hilda的洞察力和瑪雅的特殊

Katherine:海豚訓練師行為。

Maya:海豚喜歡收集物品，并將其藏在過濾箱聰明

后面

2.梳理文本情節發展：

Opening:Hilda作為志愿者在海洋公園工作，負責清理海豚水箱。

Build-up:因為Maya呈現了一個糖果包裝紙，Katherine錯誤地責備Hilda粗心沒打掃干凈。Hilda決定弄

清真相，通過觀察，最終發現了海豚收集和隱藏物品的行為。

Climax:Hilda向Katherine揭示了Maya的秘密并展示了海豚收集的物品。

Resolution:Katherine意識到了Hilda的細致觀察和Maya的特殊行為，解開了兩人之間的誤解。

Ending:故事以Katherine對Hilda的贊賞和對Maya行為的新理解結束，突出了觀察、理解和團隊合作的

重要性。

3.段落構思

由第一段段首句“海達微笑著說那是瑪雅的秘密哦”和第二段段首句“現在凱瑟琳明白事實真相了”可知，

第一段主要描寫海達揭示秘密，凱瑟琳的反應以及解釋秘密如何被發現的三部分。第二段主要描寫凱瑟琳

向海達道歉，并對瑪雅行為表示理解，并突出觀察、理解以及團隊合作的重要性這三部分。

【參考范文】

“ThisisMaya'ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.Inherhand,shedisplayedtheitemsshehadretrieved

behindthefilterbox.“She'sbeenkeepingthesefromthetank,notme.”Katherine'seyeswidenedassheexamined

thesmallpileofobjectsthatMayahadcollected.HildaexplainedhowshehadwatchedMayacleverlyhidethe

itemsaway,turningthetankintoherownlittlecollectionspot.ThetensionintheairdissolvedasKatherine

realizedthatHilda'sdedicationhadrevealedMaya'splayfulhabit,notamistakeonherpart.

NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.ShelookedatMaya,thenatHilda,andhersternexpression

softenedintoasmile.“Ioweyouanapology,Hilda.You'veshowngreatinitiativeandcare,”shesaid,hertone

filledwithnewfoundrespect.Together,theywatchedMayaperformhertricks,understandingnowthatthe

dolphin'sbehaviorwasnotatrainingissuebutasignofherintelligenceandcuriosity.Thedayendednotwith

blame,butwithlaughterandasenseofteamwork,astheyallenjoyedMaya'scleverantics.

3.(2021·新高考Ⅰ&Ⅱ卷)

閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。

AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISE

ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother's

Day.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.Theyplannedtomake

Frenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.Jennaand

Jeffknewexactlywhattodo.

Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a．m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.They

decidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.Theyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadethe

Frenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesinto

theeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.Everythingwasgoing

smoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jenna

threwtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoit

cookednicely.

ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridge

boiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthe

stovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.But

Jeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshe

caughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.

注意：1．續寫詞數應為150左右；

2．請按如下格式作答。

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.

【技法指導】

1．本文的6要素

本文是一篇記敘文。文章講述了一對雙胞胎在母親節那天為媽媽做早餐的故事。

人物ThetwinsJennaandJeff,theirfather,theirmother

時間OnthemorningofMother'sDay

地點kitchen,bedroom

ThetwinsJennaandJeffpreparedasurpriseonMother'sDayfor

起因、經過和結果

theirmother,butfailedatthebeginning...

2．本文的3大線索

(1)時間線：母親節前(一對雙胞胎計劃給媽媽一個驚喜)→開始做早餐(悄悄溜入廚房做準備工作)→做早

餐過程中(出現了各種各樣的問題)→做好早餐(續寫內容)。

(2)情節線：在母親節那天，雙胞胎Jenna和Jeff計劃著給媽媽一個驚喜——他倆決定在廚房為媽媽做法

式吐司和雞肉粥早餐→但是因為缺乏經驗，他們煮粥的時候把廚灶弄得一團糟→Jeff的手被燙傷了→平底鍋

里的面包也烤焦了。

(3)情感線：一對雙胞胎想給媽媽一個驚喜(打算做早餐)→早起去廚房準備早餐(不驚動父母)→慌張(廚房

出亂子)→失望(搞砸了早餐)。

3．本文的主旨和故事的發展方向

(1)本文的主旨：ThetwinswerepreparingasurpriseonMother'sDayfortheirmothertoshowtheirlove.

(2)故事的發展方向：Howtopreparethesurprisebreakfastsuccessfully?

【參考范文】

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Seeingthemessinthekitchen(動詞

-ing短語作狀語),heimmediatelyunderstoodwhathadhappened(賓語從句),buthewasn'tupset.Instead,he

appliedsomemedicinetoJeff'shand,andthensetouttohelpthemcleanupthemess,throwingawaytheburnt

toast.Next,theybegantomakebreakfast,anduntilthenthetwinslookedcheerful.Beforelong,theporridgewas

ready.Theirfatherinstructedthemtofrytherestofthebread.Soon,thebreakfastwasready,too.

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Openinghereyes,shecouldn'tbelievewhat

shehadseen.Beforeshecouldaskanyquestion,theirfatherturnedupandtoldhiswifeabouthowthetwinshad

madepreparationstogiveherthesurprisebreakfast(about的第一個賓語從句),andwhattroubletheyhadgone

throughwhenmakingtheporridgeandFrenchtoast(about的第二個賓語從句，其中whenmaking相當于when

theyweremaking)．Disbeliefgavewaytoexcitementandpride.Huggingtheminherarms,shesaid,“Thankyou,

children.It'ssuchanunforgettableMother'sDayforme.”

【高考模擬】

1.（2024·廣東省茂名市一模）閱讀下面的材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續寫兩段，使之構成一篇完

整的短文。

“Mom,I’mreadytogo,”calledJason.

EverySaturday,JasonlookedforwardtogoingtoChinatowntoshopforfoodbecausehismomlethimpick

hisfavoritesnacks:roastporkbunsandbubbletea.

ThestreetsinChinatownwerecrowdedwithcarsandpedestrians.Hismothercouldnotfindthesameexotic

vegetablesinthelocalsupermarkets,sotheyalwayscameheretoshop.WhatfascinatedJasonwastastyroastpork,

eventhewholepigshangingonbighooksinthewindows,theirskinsroastedtoaglisteningbrown.Jason’smouth

wouldwaterjustlookingatthem.

AstheypassedthenewsstandcarryingChinesenewspapersandmagazines,Jasonspottedanoldmansitting

onthesidewalk.Hishairwaslong,white,andmessy.Thefacebeneathwaslined,dirty,andunshaven.Frayedand

tornclothingwrappedaroundhisthinframe,andinthiskindofcoldweather,heevenworesandals,hisfeetblue

withcold.Hebangedanemptycanagainstthesidewalk.AsJasonwalkedby,hecouldsmellamustyodorand

pinchedhisnostrilstogether.TheoldmanreachedoutandtouchedJason’sleftleg.Instinctively,Jasongatheredall

hisstrengthtojerk(猛拉)hislegawayandkicktheoldman’shandheavily.Frightened,hehurriedtocatchupwith

hismotherwithoutlookingback.

“Mom,theoldmantouchedme,”hecried,“Hetouchedmewithhisdirtyhands.It’sdisgusting!Andhe

smelledtoo.”

Jason’smotherglancedbackatthemanwithalookofunderstandingandsaidgently,“Jason,hecan’thelpit.

He’shomeless.Hedidn’tmeananyharm.”

Mom’swordsmadeJasonlookbackattheoldmanwithregret,whonowwaslookingupatotherpassersby,

stillbanginghiscan.

Ontheirwayhome,Jasonasked,hisvoicefilledwithconcern.“Whyisthatoldmanhomeless?Wheredoes

hesleep?”

“Idon’tknow.It’stoughtobehomeless,especiallyinthiscoldweather.Hedidlookquiteweak,”hismother

replied.

Mom’swordsmadeJason’sregretdeepened.Heconfessedhisheavykicktohismother,whoremindedhim

thatitwascrucialtoacknowledgehismistakeandtrytomakeupforit.

注意：1.續寫詞數應為150左右；

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。

Thenextday,withhismother’shelp,Jasondecidedtodosomething.

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Hearingthis,theoldmanlookedatthemwithwateryeyes.

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【參考范文】

Thenextday,withhismother’shelp,Jasondecidedtodosomething.Theydrovetothefamiliarsidestreetin

Chinatownwithseveralpackagesofnecessities.Theoldmanwasstillthere,lookingevenskinnierthantheday

before.HeglancedatJasonandseemedtorecognizehim.Jasonopenedhispackagesandhandedtheoldmanapair

ofshoesandsomeclothes.Hesaidgentlytotheman,“Ihopetheyfit.”Andthenhetookapackageofroastpork

fromhismom.Eagerlyslippingittotheoldman’shand,hesaid,“It’salsoforyou.”

Hearingthis,theoldmanlookedatthemwithwateryeyes.Heboweddeeply,whispering“Thankyou!”ina

tremblingvoice.Jasonhelpedhimputonthenewshoesandclothes.Surprisingly,Jasondidn’tthinkofthemanas

smellybutsomeoneworthyofrespectandcareatthismoment.Whentheoldmanwaswolfingdowntheroastpork,

hiseyesmistedoveronceagain.“I’msorryforthatkick,”Jasonapologizedsincerely.Touchedbytheman’s

gratitude,Jasonunderstoodthatitwasnevertoolatetomakeupforapastmistake,nomatterhowlateitmight

seem.

【文本解讀】本文是一篇記敘文，以人物為線索。Jason和媽媽每周六都會去唐人街購物，那里有他喜歡的

零食。一次，當他經過一個賣報刊的攤位時，一個臟兮兮的老流浪漢碰了他的腿，他本能地一腳踢開了老

人。然而當他告訴媽媽時，媽媽卻對他解釋說這位老人無家可歸，他并沒有惡意。Jason為自己的行為感到

抱歉，決定為他做點事情。第二天在媽媽的幫助下，他帶著一些必需品來看望老人，還給了他一雙鞋和一

些衣服。老人非常感激。Jason也真誠地向老人致歉，他也意識到彌補自己的錯誤永遠為時不晚。

【續寫構思】

①由續寫第一段首句“第二天，在母親的幫助下，Jason決定做點什么。”可知，第一段可以描寫Jason在媽

媽的幫助下給老人帶來了一些必需品，還給老人一雙鞋子和一些衣服。

②由續寫第二段首句“聽了這話，老人眼含熱淚地看著他們。”可知，第二段可以描寫老人感動的言語和行為，

以及Jason為自己的行為道歉，他也意識到彌補自己的錯誤永遠為時不晚。

【續寫線索】Jason決定做點什么——他和媽媽帶著必需品來唐人街找這位老人——老人感激地收下了東西

——Jason真誠地向老人致歉——他明白了彌補自己的錯誤永遠為時不晚

【語言亮點】

行為類

①瞥一眼：glanceat/takeaglanceat

②認出：recognize/identify

③彌補：makeupfor/compensatefor

情緒類

①令人驚訝地：surprisingly/insurprise/toone’ssurprise

②感動的：touched/moved

③感激：gratitude/thankfulness

【點睛】【高分句型1】Theoldmanwasstillthere,lookingevenskinnierthanthedaybefore.(使用了現在分詞作

狀語、比較級結構)

【高分句型2】Touchedbytheman’sgratitude,Jasonunderstoodthatitwasnevertoolatetomakeupforapast

mistake,nomatterhowlateitmightseem.(使用了that引導賓語從句、itis/was+adj.+todosth.結構、too…to…

結構、nomatterhow引導讓步狀語從句)

2.（2024·云南省昆明市一模）閱讀下面短文，根據所給情節進行續寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。

Whatdoesitmeantobeahero?Ithinkaheroissomeonewhogoesoutofhiswaytomakeothershappy.My

heroisMr.Wright,mychorus(合唱隊)teacher.

WhenIwas12yearsold,mygrandparentspassedaway.Iwasreallyclosetothem,andlosingthemwasthe

hardestthingI’veeverhadtogothrough.Icouldn’teat,sleep,orthink;IfeltlikeIcouldn’tevenbreathe.Itwasas

ifmywholeworldhadfallendownfromunderme,andIfellintothishugeholeofdepression(抑郁).

AlthoughIwasbattlingdepression,Iwasdeterminedtomakemyhighschoolyearsthebestofmylife.Itwas

difficulttobehappy,butIhadtotry.IjoinedWomen’sChoir.Mr.Wrightwasthechoraldirectorandhewasso

funnythatthefirstday,IjustknewIhadmadethebestdecisionofmylife.

Astheyearprogressed,Ilovedchorusmoreandmore.Ibegantosmileagainandreallyenjoylife.

Thenonedaythatallchanged.Myfriends—orthosethatIthoughtweremyfriends—startedtalkingabout

mebehindmyback.Iwashurt,andIsatbymyself.Mr.Wrightcameoverandaskedwhatwaswrong.Thelookin

hiseyestoldmethatIcouldtrusthim.Tryinghardtofightbacktears,Itoldhimthewholestory.WhenIfinished,

henoddedandtoldme,“Ifyouneverlearnanythingfromme,learnthis:Nooneisworthstealingyourjoy.”

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2.請按如下格式作答。

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WhatMr.Wrightsaidreallystruckachord(心弦)inmyheart.

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Mr.Wrightisaherotoeveryonehemeets.

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【參考范文】

WhatMr.Wrightsaidreallystruckachordinmyheart.Hiswordsresonatedwithmeinawaythatnoone

else'shadbefore.Forsolong,Ihadlettheopinionsofothersdictatemyhappiness,butMr.Wrightremindedme

thatmyjoywasminetoprotect.Fromthatdayforward,Imadeapromisetomyself.Iwouldnolongerallowthe

negativityofotherstobringmedown.Ifocusedonsurroundingmyselfwithpositiveinfluencesandchoseto

distancemyselffromthosewhowerenotsupportive.

Mr.Wrightisaherotoeveryonehemeets.Notonlydidheteachusaboutmusicandharmony,buthealso

taughtusaboutresilienceandself-worth.Hecreatedanenvironmentwherewefeltsafetobeourselvesand

encouragedustoembraceourindividuality.Mr.Wright'skindness,compassion,andunwaveringsupporthave

foreverchangedmylife.Heshowedmethatbeingaheroisnotabouthavingsuperpowersorsavingtheworld.It's

aboutbeingthereforothers,upliftingthem,andhelpingthemfindtheirownstrength.

【文本解讀】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了作者在12歲時失去親人，陷入抑郁，但通過加入合唱隊并遇

到合唱老師Mr.Wright，重拾了對生活的熱愛和快樂。Mr.Wright不僅教會了作者音樂和和諧，還教會了作

者堅持自己的快樂、保護自己的喜悅的重要性。作者認為Mr.Wright是一個真正的英雄，他通過善良、同

情和堅定不移的支持，改變了作者的生活，并教會了作者如何成為一個英雄。

【構思段落續寫】

①由第一段首句內容“Mr.Wright的話確實撥動了我的心弦。”可知，第一段可描寫作者在聽了Mr.Wright的

話之后的想法和感悟，有了自己的一些想法和感受。

②由第二段首句內容“Mr.Wright先生對他遇到的每個人來說都是英雄。”可知，第二段可描寫Mr.Wright對

其他每個人的幫助，以及給其他人帶來的影響。

【續寫線索】Mr.Wright先生的教誨讓作者產生感悟——讓自己顧慮掉消極信息，專注于周圍的積極影響

——Mr.Wright幫助其他人——對他人產生積極影響——作者自己最終感悟

【語言亮點】

詞匯激活

行為類

①集中：focuson/concentrateon

②.遠離：distanceoneselffrom/keepawayfrom

③.接受：embrace/accept

情緒類

①.使某人沮喪：bringsbdown/makesbdepressed

②.使某人振奮：upliftsb/cheersb

【點睛】[高分句型1].Hiswordsresonatedwithmeinawaythatnooneelse'shadbefore.（運用了that引導的

定語從句）

[高分句型2].Hecreatedanenvironmentwherewefeltsafetobeourselvesandencouragedustoembraceour

individuality.（運用了where引導的定語從句）

3.（2024·山東省德州市“優高聯盟”高三2月診斷性檢測）閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續

寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。

ASkyFullofCourage

SamrushedintoMom’sstudy.“LookatthefeatherIfound!”Heheldupabrilliantbluetailfeather.“Western

Bluebird!I’vebeenlookingforthisoneforages!”Hebouncedonhistoes.Momglancedupfromhermap.

“Amazing.”Shegrinned,thentookadeepbreath.“Sam,tomorrowIgettoflyabiplane(雙翼飛機)over

downtownPortland.It’stheflyingclub’scontributiontotheairshow.Wanttoflywithme?”Samshookwithfear.

Justthethoughtofflyinghighintheairmadehimfeelsick.“Nothanks,Mom.Sorry.”

HecycledtothevolunteerprogramattheWildlifeCareCenterasheusuallydidonweekends.WhileDr.

Malone,thevet(獸醫),tookcareofanimals,Samcleanedcages.Dr.Malonesteppedintotheroom,holding

somethinggentlyinherhands.Herquietwordsmadehimglanceup.“Lookhere,Sam!ItwasfoundnearMatthews

Valleywithabrokenwing.Probablymigratingwhenaneagletriedtocatchher.Shewaswayoffcourse.”Thevet

openedherhandstorevealabirdwithabandaged(包扎)wing.Samjumpedtohisfeet.AVaux’sswift(雨燕)!“So

theswift’scompanionsarelost!”Samconcluded.

Everyfall,flocksofVaux’sswiftsmigratedthroughPortlandontheirwaysouth,restingovernightinone

buildingofhiselementaryschool.Peoplefromallovershowedupeverynighttowatchthousandsofswiftsfly

acrosstheeveningsky.Intheevening,theswiftsflewdownintohisschool’shometosleepforthenight.Butthis

year,Septemberhadnearlycomeandgonewithoutanyswifts.

“Ican’tbelievesomanybirdscanbemissing.”Dr.Malonesaid.“TheyprobablystillflynearMatthewsValley.

Theyneedyou,Sa