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溝通解決達到1+1>2寧波市2024學年第一學期高考與選考模擬考試原文分析讀后續寫原文審讀多篇范文呈現解題思路分析讀后續寫可積累文本1、

原文審讀：第二節（滿分25分）閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。ThesunwassettingoverSpringdale,castingshadowsacrossthebusycommunitycenter.Agroupofteenagers,themembersoftheSpringdaleYouthCommittee,gatheredatatable.Theylookeddeterminedandworried.AmongthemwasEmily,asmartbutoftenunnoticedgirlwholoveshelpingothers.Forweeks,theyhadbeenorganizingafundraisingeventforthelocalhomelessshelter,astheshelterstruggledtoassisttheincreasingnumberofindividualsseekinghelp.Thebigdaywasoneweekaway,andeverythingwasset--untiltheydiscoveredanothergrouphadasimilarcharityeventonthesameday.Thiscoulddividethepeoplewhomightcomeandthedonationstheyhopedtoget.“Wecannotchangethedatenow,”saidTom,aseniormember,hisvoicefilledwithfrustration.“We’vealreadysentoutinvitations,andtheplaceisbooked.”Emilylistenedquietlytothediscussion.Sheknewchangingthedatewasn’tpossible,butsherealizedcompetingwithanotherworthycausecouldhurtbothsides.Afterthemeetingendedwithoutasolution,Emilydecidedtotakeaction.Shespentthenextdaylookingintowaystoworkwithothergroup,hopingtofindawaythatwouldhelpboththehomelessshelterandtheothercause.Thenextday,shecametothecommitteewithasuggestion.“Whatifwejoinourevents?”sheasked.“Wecouldshareresources,worktogetheronpromoting,andmostimportantly,makesurebothcausesaresupportedbythecommunity.”Thememberslookedateachother,somedoubtful,othersinterested.“That’sagreatidea,Emily,buthowwillwegetthemtoagree?”Laura,anothermember,asked.Emilyhadalreadythoughtthisthrough.“I’lltalktotheirorganizerandshowthemthebenefitsofajointevent.”Sheknewthepathaheadwouldbechallenging,butshewasdeterminedtomakeithappenforSpringdaleanditspeople.注意：1.所續寫短文的詞數應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Paragraph1:ThecommitteeagreedtoletEmilyleadthiseffort._______Paragraph2:Afterdaysofnegotiation,Emilyfinallygotapositivereply._______2、

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紅色定從/定語；藍色賓從；黃色狀從，從句斜體；下劃線+標黃單詞+斜體

為需掌握積累單詞、短語；黑體標黃，非謂語；可積累部分為

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注釋(定語從句)ItwastheseconddayinthenewofficeandMayawasstillonherown.Exceptthemanwhohadtakenherinduction(入職),therewasnooneelsewhohadsaida“hi”totheyoungwoman.Notonlywasitanewoffice(讓步狀語從句),itwasalsoanewcity.Whileshehadsuccessfullyclimbedthecorporateladder(階梯)forabettersalary,shehan’treallymadeanyfriendsinthenewcityorofficeyet.Looking(非謂語動詞做伴隨動作)

atthewholeworkplacefromherseatattheendofthehall(方式狀語),Mayafeltanurgetocry.Butshewasagrownwomanandthatwassimplynotanoption.Shedecidedtoeatherlunch,aslonelyasitmightfeel.Herlunchboxrevealedfriedricewithvegetablesandanoldmemoryhitherfromthedepthofhermind.

解題思路分析：1.構思思路

-問題梳理：明確文章中主要沖突點，即兩個組織在同一時間舉辦活動可能分散資源的問題。Emily提出的合作方案能夠解決沖突，形成一種雙贏的解決方式。-情感發展：通過Emily的行動，展現她的責任心和對社區的熱情，使她從一名普通的成員成長為團隊的關鍵角色。2.提煉框架

-段落一：描述Emily與對方組織的溝通過程，她向他們展示合作的優勢，例如資源共享、相互支持。可以通過對方組織的初步猶豫，然后逐漸理解Emily的建議。-段落二：兩方達成協議，共同宣傳活動。Emily和團隊看到社區對活動的支持，感到欣慰與自豪。最終，她的努力得到認可，收獲了團隊成員的尊重。解題思路分析：3.實施寫作

-細節刻畫：通過描述Emily與對方的溝通過程，展示她的耐心與堅持。可以加入她內心的掙扎，如何用合理的理由說服對方。-人物成長：將Emily從一名“常被忽視的成員”塑造成“團隊的主心骨”，展示她通過堅持和溝通獲得的成長。續寫注意事項：4.注意內容

-情感真實：盡量保持情感的真實和細膩，使Emily的成長和努力顯得合情合理。-邏輯清晰：展示Emily提出的合作方案，并清晰地描述各方對該方案的反饋，使情節發展合理、自然。故事山模式：

銜接點1：位于續寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語；銜接點2：位于續寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；銜接點3：位于續寫第二段段首，續寫銜接第二段段首語；銜接點4：文章結尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強調主題。原文與續寫的銜接點：-castshadowsacross：意為“在…投下陰影”。常用于描述光線對環境的影響。-filledwithfrustration：表示“充滿了沮喪”。描述人物情感時常用的搭配。-takeaction：意為“采取行動”，表示下定決心去做某事。-lookintoways：指“尋找方法”，表示通過調查或研究找到解決辦法。原文詞匯和可積累部分：1.determine-詞性：動詞

-詞義：決定；下定決心

-近義詞：decide,resolve-反義詞：hesitate,waver-例句：

-Shedeterminedtopursueherdreamsdespitethechallenges.-Heisdeterminedtosucceedinhiscareer.原文詞匯和可積累部分：2.frustration-詞性：名詞

-詞義：沮喪；挫折

-近義詞：disappointment,discouragement-反義詞：satisfaction,contentment-例句：

-Herfrustrationgrewastheprojectencounteredmoreissues.-Hefeltasenseoffrustrationwhenhiseffortswentunrecognized.原文詞匯和可積累部分：3.resource-詞性：名詞

-詞義：資源；材料

-近義詞：supply,material-反義詞：scarcity,lack-例句：

-Theschoolhaslimitedresourcesforextracurricularactivities.-Theyusedeveryavailableresourcetomaketheeventsuccessful.原文詞匯和可積累部分：5.support-詞性：動詞/名詞

-詞義：支持；幫助

-近義詞：aid,assist-反義詞：oppose,discourage-例句：

-Thecommunitygatheredtosupportthecharityevent.-Shehasalwayssupportedherfriendsindifficulttimes.推薦的動作、心理、環境描寫例句：動作描寫1.Shehesitatedforamoment,thenknockedsoftlyonthedoor.2.Maya’sfingerstrembledslightlyassheopenedherlunchbox.3.Tinaextendedherhandwithawarmsmile,offeringapieceofhersandwich.心理描寫1.AwaveofregretwashedoverMayaassherecalledherwordstoTina.2.Shefeltaflickerofhopewhenshenoticedthewomanstandingbesideher.3.Lonelinessgnawedatherheart,butsheresolvedtofacethedaywithcourage.環境描寫1.Theofficebuzzedwithfaintchatter,butMayafeltlikeanoutsiderinadistantworld.2.Theclassroomwasfilledwiththearomaofsnacksandthechatterofchildren.3.Sunlightstreamedthroughthelargewindows,castinglongshadowsonthetiledfloor.語法現象分析：1.過去完成時：原文："Whileshehadsuccessfullyclimbedthecorporateladder..."作用：表示過去某一時刻之前已完成的動作。例句：ShehadrealizedhermistakebeforeTinaofferedherkindness.2.虛擬語氣：潛在使用："IfonlyshehadbeenkindertoTinabackthen."作用：表示與過去事實相反的假設。例句：IfMayahadknownhowlonelyTinafelt,shewouldhaveacteddifferently.3.狀語從句：原文："Whilethestudentssaidabig'hi'toherinchorus..."作用：描述時間或條件，補充背景信息。例句：WhenMayaglancedup,shesawthewomansmilingather.

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范文中涉及的語法知識點1.間接引語（ReportedSpeech）

例句：“ThecommitteeagreedtoletEmilyleadthiseffort.”

介紹：使用間接引語來表達他人的話語或決定，是敘述和復述他人觀點時的常用語法結構，有助于更流暢地表達情節。2.非限定性從句（非謂語動詞）

例句：“toletEmilylead,”“approached...layingoutherplan,”“afterdaysofnegotiation.”

介紹：不定式和動詞的-ing形式用于表達意圖、動作或事件的連續性，幫助簡潔表達人物的行動或時間順序。3.一般過去時和過去進行時的結合

例句：“Thecommitteeagreed”，“Emilywasamazedattheturnout.”

介紹：一般過去時用于主要動作，過去進行時用于描述特定情境中的持續狀態或動作，二者結合使敘述更流暢且富有層次。4.對比從句（although,while等引導）

例句：“Althoughinitiallyunsure,”“Whiletheorganizerseemedhesitant.”

介紹：這些從句結構用于引出對比，增強描述中態度或狀態的變化，使敘述更加豐富和細膩。

文中較好的短語及替換詞匯1.layingoutherplan-釋義：詳細說明她的計劃

-同義短語：explainingherstrategy,presentingherplan-替換詞：outliningherproposal,elaboratingonhervision2.amixtureofnervesandexcitement-釋義：緊張與興奮交織

-同義短語：ablendofanxietyandexcitement,amixofnervousnessandenthusiasm-替換詞：afeelingofboththrillandanxiety,acombinationofeagernessandunease3.wonthemover-釋義：贏得他們的支持

-同義短語：gainedtheirsupport,broughtthemaround-替換詞：securedtheirbacking,earnedtheirtrust4.poolingresources-釋義：合并資源

-同義短語：combiningresources,sharingresources-替換詞：mergingassets,consolidatingresources5.asparkofinterest-釋義：引起興趣

-同義短語：ahintofinterest,aglimmerofenthusiasm-替換詞：aflickerofcuriosity,atouchofintrigue6.onthedayoftheevent-釋義：活動當天

-同義短語：atthetimeoftheevent,duringtheeventday-替換詞：whentheeventtookplace,onthescheduledday7.filledthehall-釋義：大廳里擠滿了人

-同義短語：packedthevenue,crowdedthehall-替換詞：overflowedintothespace,gatheredinlargenumbers8.broughtinrecorddonations-釋義：創下捐款記錄

-同義短語：raisedunprecedentedfunds,achievedafundraisingrecord-替換詞：securedexceptionaldonations,setanewdonationrecord9.senseofprideandfulfillment-釋義：自豪感與成就感

-同義短語：feelingofaccomplishment,senseofsatisfaction-替換詞：prideandgratification,fulfillmentandjoy1.cast-詞性:動詞-詞義:投擲，投射（光、影）-近義詞:project,throw-聯想詞:shadow,light,beam-例句:-Thesunsetcastawarmglowovertheentirevalley.-Theoldtreecastalongshadowontheground.2.gatheredat-詞性:動詞短語-詞義:聚集在-近義詞:assembledat,metat-聯想詞:meet,congregation,group-例句:-Theygatheredatthecommunitycentertodiscussthenewproject.-Thestudentsgatheredattheentrancebeforetheeventstarted.3.organizeafundraisingevent-詞性:動詞短語-詞義:組織募捐活動-近義詞:arrangeacharityevent,hostafundraiser-聯想詞:charity,support,donation-例句:-Theyouthcommitteedecidedtoorganizeafundraisingeventfortheshelter.-Shehelpedorganizeafundraisingeventtosupportthelocalhospital.9.senseofprideandfulfillment-釋義：自豪感與成就感

-同義短語：feelingofaccomplishment,senseofsatisfaction-替換詞：prideandgratification,fulfillmentandjoy1.cast-詞性:動詞-詞義:投擲，投射（光、影）-近義詞:project,throw-聯想詞:shadow,light,beam-例句:-Thesunsetcastawarmglowovertheentirevalley.-Theoldtreecastalongshadowontheground.4.struggletodo-詞性:動詞短語-詞義:努力去做某事，掙扎-近義詞:tryhardto,striveto-聯想詞:effort,difficulty,persevere-例句:-Hestruggledtofinishtheprojectontime.-Thestudentsstruggledtounderstandthecomplextheory.5.book-詞性:動詞-詞義:預訂-近義詞:reserve,schedule-聯想詞:reservation,arrange,plan-例句:-Weneedtobookavenuefortheeventassoonaspossible.-Shebookedatablefordinnerattherestaurant.6.withoutasolution-詞性:短語-詞義:沒有解決方案-近義詞:unresolved,noanswer-聯想詞:problem,difficulty,unresolved-例句:-Theyleftthemeetingwithoutasolutiontotheproblem.-Theteamdiscussedvariousoptionsbutleftwithoutasolution.7.thinkthrough-詞性:動詞短語-詞義:仔細考慮-近義詞:consider,deliberate-聯想詞:plan,analyze,evaluate-例句:-It’simportanttothinkthroughallthedetailsbeforemakingadecision.-Shethoughtthroughherproposalcarefully.8.spreadtheword-詞性:動詞短語-詞義:傳播消息-近義詞:inform,sharenews-聯想詞:announce,notify,communicate-例句:-Theyusedsocialmediatospreadthewordabouttheevent.-Weneedtospreadthewordtoensureeveryoneknowsthenewplan.9.strengthen-詞性:動詞-詞義:增強，加強-近義詞:reinforce,bolster-聯想詞:support,improve,enhance-例句:-Thecommunityaimedtostrengthentiesthroughcollectiveactivities.-Shestrengthenedherskillswithadditionalpractice.10.layoutherplan-詞性:動詞短語-詞義:陳述計劃-近義詞:presentherplan,outlineherstrategy-聯想詞:strategy,explanation,detail-例句:-Shelaidoutherplanfortheeventwithprecision.-Helaidouthisplaninfrontoftheteamforfeedback.11.poolresources-詞性:動詞短語-詞義:合并資源-近義詞:combineresources,shareresources-聯想詞:collaboration,unity,teamwork-例句:-Thetwogroupsdecidedtopoolresourcestomaximizetheimpact.-Bypoolingresources,theycouldachievemore.12.merge-詞性:動詞-詞義:合并，融合-近義詞:combine,unify-聯想詞:blend,join,integrate-例句:-Thetwocompaniesmergedtoformamorecompetitiveorganization.-Theydecidedtomergetheireffortsforabetteroutcome.13.exceed-詞性:動詞-詞義:超過-近義詞:surpass,outdo-聯想詞:more