滿分攻略描寫形象生動滿分攻略攻略---外貌、性格與環境描寫讓續寫更加豐滿圍繞原文主旨，續寫部分可利用恰當的詞語描述人物的外貌、性格和周圍的環境，豐富續寫情。一、外貌性格描寫1．外貌性格描寫的3個原則①進行外貌描寫時，可寫對一個人的總體印象，也可以抓住人物重要的外貌特征或性格特點進行描述。如攻略3例題原文中第一段對媽媽性格的描寫，采用了loving,sweet,absent-minded和forgetful等形容詞，使一個可愛又健忘的媽媽的形象躍然紙上。②可以具體描述人物的五官、著裝，甚至可以配上動作描述。③在描寫人物片段時，可寫你對人物印象最深的一兩點，再加上一兩句人物評價。2．外貌與性格描寫的高分素材外貌描寫(1)她圓圓的臉上有一雙藍色的眼睛，還有兩個可愛的酒窩。①Onherroundfaceareapairofblueeyesandlovelydimples.(倒裝句型)②Sheisagirlwithapairofblueeyesandlovelydimplesonherroundface.(with引導的介賓結構作后置定語，補充說明人物信息)(2)李老師三十多歲，身材適中，常梳著馬尾辮。①MissLiisinherthirtieswithamediumbuildandhasherhairinaponytail.(由and連接的并列句；with短語用作狀語，表示伴隨狀態)②MissLiisamedium-sizedwomaninherthirtieswhooftenwears/tiesherhairinaponytail.(定語從句補充介紹人物特征)③MissLi,inherthirties,isofmediumsize,andoftenhasherhairtiedinaponytail.(“beof＋adj.＋n．”結構表示人或物具有某種特征。常用的名詞有：size,height,weight,build,age,shape等)性格描寫①SuchisMs.Han,aneasygoing,kindandwarm-heartedwoman.韓老師是一個隨和善良又熱心腸的女人。②Thoughhecomesfromapoorfamily,heisapersonofgreatdeterminationandcourage.他雖出身貧寒，但擁有堅強的意志和勇氣。二、環境描寫1．環境描寫的4個原則①選擇與主題和情節設置一致的環境要素，以營造故事發生的特定環境。②細致深入。所選的景物一定要運用所學的詞匯和句法進行細致深入的描寫。③添加附加信息，如天氣變化和周邊的景物等，如昏暗的路燈、搖曳的樹影等。④環境細節描寫一定要與動作和心理活動等相結合，才能更好地完成續寫任務。例如：攻略3第一段續寫中可適當描寫一下在帳篷中過夜時周圍的環境，突出作者內心的祥和、快樂。2．環境描寫的高分素材①Itwasbeginningtosnow,andsnowflakeswereblindingmyeyes.天開始下雪了，雪花讓我看不清了。②Thesunwasbreakingthroughtheblanketofmist.太陽穿過薄霧。③Summerseesthemountainsturnbrightgreenwithgrowingrice.Duringautumn,thesesamemountainsareflashgold,andinwintertheyarecoveredinsheetsofwhitefrost.夏天，水稻生長群山綠意盎然。秋天漫山鋪金，冬天銀裝素裹。④Alittlewayoffwasalittlebrook,rushingandsparklingalongbetweengreenbanks.不遠處有一條小溪，在綠色的兩岸之間奔流不息，波光粼粼。【寫作演示】(2017年11月，浙江卷)閱讀下面材料，根據其內容和所給段落開頭語續寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。續寫的詞數應為150左右。AVacationwithMyMotherIhadaninterestingchildhood:Itwasfilledwithsurpriseandamusements,allbecauseofmymother—eq\a\vs4\al(loving)，eq\a\vs4\al(sweet)，andyeteq\a\vs4\al(absent-)eq\a\vs4\al(minded)andeq\a\vs4\al(forgetful).OnestrangefamilytripwetookwhenIwaseleventellsalotabouther.MytwosetsofgrandparentslivedinColoradoandNorthDakota,andmyparentsdecidedtospendafewweeksdrivingtothosestatesandseeingalleq\a\vs4\al(thesights)alongtheway.Asthefirstdayofourtripapproached,David,myeight-year-oldbrother,andIunwillinglysaidgood-byetoallofourfriends.Whoknewifwe'deverseethemagain?Finally,themomentofourdeparturearrived,andweloadedsuitcases,books,games,campingequipment,andatentintothecarandbravelydroveoff.Webravelydroveoffagaintwohourslaterafterwe'dreturnedhometogetthepurseandtraveler'schecksMomhadforgotten.DavidandIwerealwaysalittlenervouswhenusinggasstationbathroomsifMomwasdrivingwhileDadslept.“YoustandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileIgo,andI'llstandoutsidethedoorandplaylookoutwhileyougo.”Ihadterriblepicturesinmymind:“Honey,wherearethekids？”“What？！Oh,Gosh...Ithoughttheywerebeingawfullyquiet.”Wewereneveractuallyleftbehindinastrangecity,butweweren'tabouttotakeanychances.Onthefourthorfifthnight,wehadtroublefindingahotelwithavacancy.Afterdrivinginvainforsometime,Momsuddenlygotagreatidea:Whydidn'twefindahousewithalikely-lookingbackyardandaskifwecouldsetupthetentthere?DavidandIbecamenervous.Toourgreatrelief,Dadturneddowntheidea.Momnevercouldunderstandourobjections.Ifastrangefamilyshoweduponherfrontdoorsteps,Momwouldhavebeendelighted.Shethinkseveryoneintheworldasniceassheis.Wefinallyfoundavacancyinthenexttown.Paragraph1Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【續寫思路點撥】1．細讀原文，明確敘述意圖原文基調輕松、溫暖。通過介紹一次出游經歷，描述媽媽健忘、心不在焉、善良、愛孩子的性格特征。第一段概括媽媽的性格特征；第二段以媽媽遺落錢包的事情來說明媽媽健忘；由第三段擔心媽媽遺忘孩子的事，說明媽媽心不在焉，同時側面反映孩子的靠譜、沉穩；由最后一段倒數第二和第三句可看出媽媽很善良。根據人物性格特征，結合續寫第二段首句可推測，續寫時應設計一件有趣的事來體現“快樂、母愛、溫情、親情”。2．根據段落開頭語，確定續寫方向※根據續寫第一段首句中的關鍵詞“werememberedthebrand-newtent”可知，該段應著重描寫圍繞帳篷發生的有趣的eq\a\vs4\al(故事)。※根據續寫第二段首句中的關鍵詞“alongtheway”可推斷第二段可描述一路上媽媽對孩子的關愛。結合首句中關鍵詞“greatsights”，可簡單進行環境描寫與原文呼應。3．圍繞原文主旨，進行人物性格和環境描寫①在描寫母親時，以原文對母親性格的描寫為依據，描述一件小事突出母親的健忘和心不在焉；也利用一些描述性的詞語，如read、sing、warmth、comfortable、safe、laughter等描寫旅途中母親所表現出的母愛。這些描寫能使母親的形象更加豐滿、高大，“母愛”溢于言表。②根據原文標題中的關鍵詞vacation，和原文第二段中的“allhersightsalongtheway”，可推斷出續寫部分可適當進行環境描寫，體現和母親共度假期的快樂，一家人的親情。【參考范文】Paragraph1Thenextdaywerememberedthebrand-newtentwehadbroughtwithus.Mominsistedthatweshouldmakefulluseofitsincewehadbroughtit.DavidandIlookedatDad,hopinghecouldrefusehercrazyideaagain,buttoourgreatdisappointment,heagreedwithMom'sidea.Sowesetupthetentatthefootofthemountainbyariver.“Oh,Iforgotthepillows！”Momscreamedoutbeforeweslept.Finally,wehadtocollectsomegrassasourpillows.Despitetheacheofmyneck,Ienjoyedthenicenightwithfreshairandmillionsofstars.Paragraph2Wedrovethroughseveralstatesandsawlotsofgreatsightsalongtheway.Thetentbecameaclosefriendthen.Everytimewecamped,Momreadabookorsangasoftsong.Thewarmthofherarmsletusfeelcomfortableandsafe.Thoughshewasforgetfulandabsent-minded,laughteraccompaniedusalongtheway.Finallywemetourtwosetsofgrandparentsandenjoyedfamilyhappiness.Thistripmademeexperiencemymother'sandfamily'slove.真題演練真題演練（2018年6月，浙江高考）閱讀下面短文，根據所給情節進行續寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。Itwassummer,andmydadwantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.HedecidedtotakemeonatriptotheWildWest.WetookaplanetoAlbuquerque,abigcityinthestateofNewMexico.WereachedAlbuquerqueinthelateafternoon.UnclePaul,mydad’sfriend,pickedusupfromtheairportanddroveusuptohisfarminPecos.HiswifeTinacookedusadeliciousdinnerandwegottoknowhissonsRyanandKyle.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthefarmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdowntherivernearby.Veryearlyinthemorning,UnclePaulwokeusuptohavebreakfast."Thedaystartsatdawnonmyfarm,"hesaid.Afterbreakfast,IwenttohelpAuntTinafeedthechickens,whilemydadwentwithUnclePaultotakethesheepouttograze(吃草).IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool.Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasn’tgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains."Don’tbelateforsupper,"UnclePaulcried,"andkeeptothetracksothatyoudon’tgetlost!""OK!"mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmhousewereoutofsight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(編織的)blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.注意：（1）所續寫短文的詞數應為l50左右；（2）至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語：（3）續寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；（4）續寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。Paragraph1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【參考范文】Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.MyhorseturnedtothelefttoavoidthelittlerabbitasIheldontightlyandtriednottofall.Thenmydadturnedaroundandshouted,“Holdon!”Allofasuddenthehorsebegantorun.Mydadtriedtokeepupbehindus.Forafewminutesmyhorsesloweddowntoatrotandthenstoppedbesideariver.Ilookedaroundandr