Whatcanyousee?relayannualsportstournamentbatonpassthebatontothenextrunnersetoffstraintorunasfastashecanavoiddroppingthebatonalloverinjustoneminute/aninstantcrossthefinishlineWritingaboutasportingmoment!timeplacesightssoundsatmosphereWhatinformationshouldbeincludedinthedescription?feelingsReadthepassagetofindthefollowinginformation.timeplacesightssoundsfeelingspage46Readthepassagetofindthefollowinginformation.page46timeplacesightssoundsfeelingssightssightsfeelingsfeelingssoundsfeelingssightssightssoundsfeelingsWriteasimilarparagraph!Ionceranthefirstlegof4x100-meterrelayatourannualsportstournament…-ingassubjectpage39page38FeedbackIonceranthefirstlegof4x100-meterrelayatourannualsportstournament…審題1.寫什么？（內容的完整性和比例）2.怎么寫？（時態）3.其他要求（劃線）Feedback語言1.用詞的準確性intenseaudienceallofasudden2.搭配的準確性ata…speedpassAtoB3.句子的完整性4.高級結構的必要性theatmospherewhichwasintense?SettingoffrunningwhenIheardthesound.Hearingthesound.Istartedtorun.(邏輯通順）Ionceranthefirstlegof4×100-metrerelayatourannualsportstournament.ItwasanextraordinaryexperienceandsomethingIwillneverforget.Standingonthestartingline,waitingforthestartinggun,Icouldalmosthearmyownheartbeating.Thenthegunsounded,andIalmosthadblockedouteverythingelse.Tothisday,Idon'trememberhowIfinishedmylegoftherace.OnlywhenIpassedthebatontothesecondrunnerdidIhearthewildcheeringandshouting.Witheverysinglerunnerstrainingtorunasfastaswecould,thewholeracewasoverinjustaninstant.Thecrowdwentwildandrosetotheirfeet,withtheircheeringbecomingevenlouder.Itwasourteamthatwontherace,andthefourofushuggedeachothertightforquiteawhile,likebeinghitbyahugewaveofexcitement.Beingpartofthissportingmomentandenjoyingitsspeedandpassiondefinitelymademyday!APossibleVersionIonceranthefirstlegof4×100-metrerelayatourannualsportstournament.ItwasanextraordinaryexperienceandsomethingIwillneverforget.Standingonthestartingline,waitingforthestartinggun,Icouldalmosthearmyownheartbeating.Thenthegunsounded,andIalmosthadblockedouteverythingelse.Tothisday,Idon'trememberhowIfinishedmylegoftherace.OnlywhenIpassedthebatontothesecondrunnerdidIhearthewildcheeringandshouting.Witheverysinglerunnerstrainingtorunasfastaswecould,thewholeracewasoverinjustaninstant.Thecrowdwentwildandrosetotheirfeet,withtheircheeringbecomingevenlouder.Itwasourteamthatwontherace,andthefourofushuggedeachothertightforquiteawhile,likebeinghitbyahugewaveofexcitement.Beingpartofthissportingmomentandenjoyingitsspeedandpassiondefinitelymademyday!APossibleVersion敘事完整+各部分占比恰當Ionceranthefirstlegof4×100-metrerelayatourannualsportstournament.ItwasanextraordinaryexperienceandsomethingIwillneverforget.Standingonthestartingline,waitingforthestartinggun,Icouldalmosthearmyownheartbeating.Thenthegunsounded,andIalmosthadblockedouteverythingelse.Tothisday,Idon'trememberhowIfinishedmylegoftherace.OnlywhenIpassedthebatontothesecondrunnerdidIhearthewildcheeringandshouting.

Witheverysinglerunnerstrainingtorunasfastaswecould,thewholeracewasoverinjustaninstant.Thecrowdwentwildandrosetotheirfeet,withtheircheeringbecomingevenlouder.

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