題型15讀后續寫

銜接儲備

讀后續寫是隨著我國高考改革由教育部考試中心研制的英語高考新題型,2016年10月在浙江省首次使

用.該題型通過讀寫結合,檢測學生的英語書面語言理解與表達能力.要求學生能夠梳理故事文體的結構、分析

故事發展的線索、想象故事發展的情節以及續寫故事的發展和結局.下面介紹一下讀后續寫的答題技巧：

讀后續寫五步寫做法

1.高分標準

?故事要圍繞主要人物展開.

?詳細刻畫人物角色及其情感.

?有效使用連接成分，結構緊湊.

?運用豐富的詞匯、語法結構和修辭使描寫生動.

?第一段和第二段的內容銜接自然，邏輯合理通順.

?續寫內容與所給短文融洽度高，語言風格保持一致，思想積極向上.

2.高分手段

（一）增加細節

?環境描寫

?肖像描寫

?動作描寫

?語言描寫

?心理描寫

（二）營造沖突

?人物和人物之間的沖突

?人物和環境之間的沖突

（三）升格語言

?非謂語動詞

,with復合結構

?雙形容詞作狀語

?特殊句式

?虛擬語氣

?常用修辭

3.寫作步驟

?StepI瀏覽所給信息，確定大意主題一落點

?Step2梳理已知段落，確定主要情節一重點

?Step3借助段落開頭，確定續寫內容一突破點

?St叩4刻畫細節沖突，優美連貫表達一一亮點

?Step5做到首尾呼應，結構完整合理一基本點

4.兩個雷區

?情節設計要符合生活實際和文章邏輯，避免太過離奇.

?敘述力求精煉、生動、連貫,對話不要太多，書面化的長句不宜太多.

典例剖析

例題1

閱讀下面短文，根據所給情節進行續寫,使之構成一個完整的故事.

Mymotherwasasupporterofphysicalpunishment,butforallhertalkingshehasneverspanked（打屁股）my

siblings（兄弟姐妹）andmeonlyonce.Insteadshefoundwaysofpunishmentthatleftamorelastingmemorythan

givingusaspanking.OneofthemostmemorableoftheseoccasionsoccurredwhenIwasfour.Intheearly70*smy

motherattendedcollegeduringthedayandIwasindaycare.Onedayatdaycarewatchedanextremelytired

motherattempttopickupherdaughter.Thelittlegirlasked,“Momma,arewegoingtoMcDonald'sfbrdinner?^^

Themotherreplied,t4Honey,nottonight.Mommahastorunafewerrands（差事）andthenwehavetogohomeand

cookdinnerfbrDaddy.,HfcButIwannago.”"Susie,Isaidnottonight.Maybe,ifyouareagoodgirl,wecango

tomorrow."Susieimmediatelydroppedtothefloor,kickingandscreaming,wanttogotoMcDonald^s.^^

Noamountofpleading（懇求）orscolding,hermothertriedtostopSusie'stantrum（發脾氣）.Finallyhermother

gavein,“Okay,Susie,let'sgotoMcDonald's."Susiestoppedyellingandsmiling,shegrabbedhermother'shand

andtheyleft.TosayIwasamazedwouldbeinaccurate;IwasdelightedthatanythingIwantedcouldbehadby

throwingatantrum.

Thatdaymymotherpickedmeupearlyfromdaycarebecauseweweregoingtoastoretopurchasesome

Christmasitems.Iwasexcitedbythelightsanddecorations,andaswewalkedthroughthetoysectionontheway

tothecounter,IsawatoyIhadtohave.Itwasawhiteandredtelephonewhosebellsrangasitwaspulledalongon

astring.LookinglovinglyupatmymotherIasked,"Mama,canIhavethattelephone?^^

Shereplied,44Baby,notnow,butifyouareagoodgirl,maybeSantawillbringittoyou.”"ButMama,Iwant

thattelephonerightnow."Hereyesnarrowedandherhandtightenedonmine."Becky,youcan'thavethat

telephonetoday,butifyoumisbehave,youcanhaveaspanking.,,

注意：

1.所續寫短文的詞數應為150左右；

2.至少使用5個短文中標有下畫線的關鍵詞語；

3.續寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；

4.續寫完成后，請用下畫線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語.

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BynowwewerestandinginthelongHolidaylinetopaythebill,andIfigureditwasagoodchance.

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“Mama,stop.Mama,getupJItearfullypleaded.

思路點撥:第一步;通讀文本，提取線索詞和信息句,寫出每段段落大意.

重點信息句:shefoundwaysofpunishmentthatleftamorelastingmemorythangivingusaspanking.

線索詞:mymomandI

第一段情感詞：lastingmemory

段落大意:despitethefactthatmymomsupportsphysicalpunishment,shefoundaspecialwayto

punishmewithoutspankingme.

重點信息句:Susieimmediatelydroppedtothefloor,kickingandscreaming.

線索詞:Susieandhermom

第二段

情感詞:kickingandscreaming

段落大意:SusiewantedtogotoMcDonald'sfordinner,butwasdeclinedbyhermom.

重點信息句:hermothergaveinandtheywenttoMcDonald's.

線索詞:sloppedyellingthrowingatantrum.

第三段

情感詞:delighted

段落大意:Susiegotwhatshewantedbythrowingatantrum,soIwouldmodelafterher

第四段重點信息句:LookinglovinglyupatmymotherIasked,"Mama,canIhavethattelephone?^^

線索詞:IsawatoyIhadtohave

情感詞:excited;lovingly

段落大意:IsawthetoyIlikedverymuchandaskedmymomtobuyit.

重點信息句:ButMama,Iwantthattelephonerightnow.

線索詞:butifyoumisbehave,youcanhaveaspanking.

第五段

情感詞:Hereyesnarrowedandherhandtightenedonmine.

段落大意:Iinsistedonbuyingthetoybutmymomrefused.

第二步:根據文本每段內容，結合所給續寫部分的首句，構思完整的故事情節.

人物Mom;I

矛盾焦點我想耍賴獲得玩具，媽媽如何在不體罰我的情況下讓我明白耍賴是行不通的.

我媽媽主張對孩子應該體罰，但是從未真正體罰過孩子.我四歲的時候看到小朋友在媽媽面前任

故事情節性耍賴而得到滿足，我心里就有了效仿小朋友的想法.沒想到媽媽在大庭廣眾之下坐在地上模仿

我的耍賴樣子，我被嚇到了，流著淚求媽媽起來.媽媽沒有體罰我卻給我上了一節終生難忘的一課.

參考范文:

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BynowwewerestandinginthelongHolidaylinetopaythebill,andIfigureitwasagoodchance.Ilaydown

onthegroundandbeganscreaming,wantthattelephone,overandoveragain.WearyChristmasshoppers

lookedasmymothercalmlysaid,"Becky,you'dbettergetupbythecountofthreeorelse.

One...Two...Three."Nothing.Iwasstillinfulltantrum.Sothenshelaydownbesidemeonthefloor,andbegan

kickingandscreaming,"Iwantanewcar,Iwantanewhouse.Iwantsomejewelry,Iwant..."Shocked,Istoodup.

“Mama,stop.Mama,getup,“Itearfullypleaded.Shestood,andbrushedherselfoff.Atfirststunned,the

otherswaitinginlinebegantosporadicallyclap,andbeforeIknewittheywerecheeringandlaughingandpatting

mymotheronherback.Sheblushedandtookalittlebowandthenextthirtyminutesinlinewaspuremiseryfbr

measvariousparentsleavingthestore,shaketheirheadsatmeandsaywithasmile,“Yourmomgotyougood.I

betyou*llnevertrythatagain."And1didn*t,becauseitleftalastingmentalpicturemoreeffectivethanany

physicalmark.

即學即練

Onacoldwindyday,apoorboytriedtopayhiswaythroughschoolbysellinggoodsdoortodoor.Wandering

onthestreet,hewasnotasuccessfulseller.What'sworse,hefoundthatheonlyhadonedime(-角硬幣His

emptystomachremindedhimconstantlythatfordayshehadn'teatenanything.Hehadnochoicebuttobegfora

mealatthenexthouse.Hesitantlyheknockedatdoor,thinkingaboutwhattosaywhenitopened.However,helost

hisnervewhenalovelyyoungwomanopenedthedoor.44WhatcanIdoforyou?^^askedtheyoungwoman.Theboy

pausedforawhile“Wouldyoupleasegivemesome...adrinkofwater<?^^theboydarenottolookdirectlyintoher

eyes.Shelookedatthebonyboyandthoughthemightneedsomethingtogivehimenergysoshebroughthima

glassofmilk.Hisheadrisingandsmallhandstakingthecup,hedrankitupslowly,andthenasked,“Howmuchdo

Ioweyou?”"Youdon'towemeanything,“sherepliedwithawarmsmileonherface.tuMymotherhastaughtme

nevertoacceptpayforakindness."Deeplymoved,hesaidsincerely,"ThenIshallthankyoufromthebottomof

myheart.^^AsHowardKellyleftthathouse,henotonlyfeltstrongerphysically,butitalsoincreasedhisfaithin

Godandthewholehumanrace.Asamatteroffact,hewasabouttogiveupandquitbeforethatpoint.

Yearslatertheyoungwomanbecamecriticallyill.However,thelocaldoctorswereunabletogivethe

effectivemedicaltreatment.Finally,theysenthertoahospitalinthebigcity,wherespecialistscanbecalledinto

cureherraredisease.Amongthosefamousspecialists,Dr.HowardKellywascalledinfortheconsultation.When

heheardthenameofthetownshecamefrom,astrangelightfilledhiseyes.Immediately,heroseandwentdown

throughthehospitalhallintoherroom.

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Dressedinhisdoctor'sgown,hewentintoseeher.

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Thebillwassenttoherroom.

參考范文：

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Dressedinhisdoctor'sgown,hewentintoseeher.Hesawherlieonthebedandrecognizedheratonce.Her

lovelyfacelookedpale.Hewentbacktotheconsultationroomanddeterminedtodohisbesttosaveherlife.Form

thatdayon,hegavespecialattentiontohercase.Luckily,afteralongstruggle,thebattlewaswon.Dr.Kelly

requestedthebusinessofficetopassthefinalbilltohimforapproval.Helookedatitandthenwrotesomethingon

theside.

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Thebillwassenttoherroom.Hesitantlyshetookit.Shewasafraidtoopenitbecauseshewassurethatit

wouldtaketherestofherlifetopayitoff.Finally,sheopenedit,onthesideofwhichanotecaughiherattention.

Shereadthesewords,“Paidinfullwithaglassofmilk."signedDr.HowardKelly.Tearsofjoyfloodedhereyes

assheprayedsilently,"Thankyou,God.^^

例題2

Onefall,mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal:tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcamp

outside“thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld"-thetownofChurchillinManitoba,Canada.

Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears,likeallwildanimals-shouldbe

photographedfromasafedistance.WhenI'mfacetofacewithapolarbear,Ilikeittobethroughacamerawitha

telephotolens.Butsometimesthatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.

AsElliandIcookeddinner,ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed,andsmelled

ourgarlicbread.

Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp,whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbit

thewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.

Terrified,ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear,hitpotshard,andfired

blankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbear

though-hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws（爪子）.

Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway,butitwouldbe30minutes

beforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter（相遇）,1tooksomepicturesofthebear.

Elliand1fearedthefencewouldn'tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear'spunishment.Thecampmanager

suggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears1eyes,butdoesn'thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvited

guestslowlyand,throughthefence,sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar（吼叫）,thebearrantothelaketo

washhiseyes.

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Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.

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Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.

思路點撥：

思路一：

本文主要講述了人與熊對抗，之后成功脫險的故事.主人公的感情線變化為:興奮渴望一驚恐T放松.劇情

線以主人公如何與北極熊周旋并成功擺脫它展開.

由第一段的段首提示句可知:幾分鐘后,熊又回到營地.接下來可通過場景渲染，描寫當時令人顫栗驚恐的

畫面，例如"Roarsandscreamspiercedthesilencewithneedle-likeshrillness.“這不僅合理地描寫了熊的反應，也

描繪出讓人戰栗的場景.

由第二段的段首提示句可知:此時，直升機到了.如果想要進行續寫兩段的合理銜接,第一段的結尾可描寫

成“Afterthoroughlyscrutinizingthearea,thebeartrottedforwardafewsteps.”這樣可以營造出危急的場景."我

們“看到直升機的到來，感到絕處逢生的喜悅，可以以人物心理描寫作為第二段的開頭，重點描寫喜極而泣的狀

態，例如“MyheartleapedwithjoyasIknewwewerelikelytobesaved.”

最后，結尾部分需要迅速收束，并說明成功逃脫的結局.

關于畫線詞:EHi作為女主人公，是續寫內容中應該出現的畫線詞,noises,pictures,fence,spray與熊有關，也

在兩段續寫內容中出現.最終，兩人回歸安全狀態，因此畫線詞safe也可自然而然地出現在續寫內容中.由此劃

分畫線詞，可迅速鎖定需使用的畫線詞范圍，輔助構思.

參考范文：

Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Roarsandscreamspiercedthesilencewithneedle-like

shrillness.ThenoisesturnedElliandIpalewithhorror.Ifearedthatthegiantwoulddestroyourwholefence.He

roaredrepeatedly,shatteringwhatwasleftofthesilence.Elliseizedthisopportunitytotakesomepictuiresofthe

bear.Theanimal'snoisesechoedallaroundus.Webetrayedourfeelingsbyhuddlingtogether,shiveringwithfear.

Afterthoroughlyscrutinizingthearea,hetrottedforwardafewsteps.

Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.MyheartleapedwithjoyasIknewwewerelikelytobesaved.

Elliusedpeppersprayagaintobuyusenoughtime.Butthistimethebearbecamemorealert.Heregardeduswith

themercilessnecessityofhunger,sowethrowallthefoodwehave.Hethenturnedawayandstarteddevouring.As

wewereclimbingtheropeladder,Elliprayedlikethousandtimestoshowthankfulnessofbeingsafeandsound.

思路二：

由第一段的段首句可知，熱愛攝影的“我”和妻子Ellie處于危險之中一北極熊再次向他們靠近了，表明情

況不容樂觀.而第二段的首句明確了救援的直升機終于趕來，一切就此出現了轉機.所以在構思時，越是將第一

段寫得危急，就越能與后面的轉折形成鮮明對比,增加故事性.

因此,聯系前文背景，續寫第一段可以先描寫熊的動向和作者的心理，之后描寫作者的應對舉措.由前文和

段首句分析可知，胡椒噴霧并未阻擋熊繼續靠近,反而激怒了它.而“我”作為攝影師，看到拍攝對象不斷進入自

己的取景范圍不禁想要立刻實現夢想去拍攝，然而求生的本能讓"我'’無暇他顧.后面采取的措施可以是作者急

中生智，決定和妻子把面包給熊來拖延時間等待救援.而眼看著可怕的熊在不斷靠近，面包也即將耗盡.至此，作

者夫婦二人幾乎陷入絕境.這一部分可以進行生動的描寫讓作者的心理刻畫更為生動，例如“Whileitwas

lookinglikeadarkcloud...”.

第二段首,直升飛機抵達，至此，可以進一步渲染危急的場景，繼續描寫熊的動作，例如猛擊柵欄.在描寫完

二人獲救后,結尾呼應前文，作者一路有驚無險，成功用相機拍到夢寐以求的照片，不虛此行.關于畫線詞:Elli作

為女主人公，是續寫內容中應該出現的畫線詞，除此以外,spray的提及可呼應前文，交代故事發展,photograph,

camera可以直接呼應“我”采取的一些行動,bread是我們想到的解決方案，fence與熊相關.由此展開畫線詞，保

證了故事的合理性.

參考范文：

Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Hecouldnotresistthetemptationofthebread.The

peppersprayhadslowedthebearbutwasn'tenoughtostopthebeast.Onthecontrary,itprovokedthebearand

madehimevenmorefurious.MuchasIwantedtophotographtheapproachingbear,mysurvivalinstinctovertook

mydesiretocapturetheperfectphoto.Inamomentofpanic,EllieandIdecidedtogivehimwhathewanted-the

garlicbread.Whileitwaslookinglikeadarkcloud,wethrewthebreadatthebearalittlebitatatimeuntilithad

runout.

Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Buttheirritatedbearhasalreadystartedtowhackthefence.1

fearedthatthebearwouldteardownthefenceatanyminute.Luckily,therangerscametoourrescue.They

managedtocalmthebeardownanddistracthimwithsomesortofacoustics.Eventhoughmyheartwasstill

thumpingwildlyinsidemychest,Isnatchedmycameraandsnappedonelastshotofthebear,aphotothatIhad

alwayslongedtocapture.Thoughriskingmylife,Tvegotthebestpictureeverandit'sallworthit.

思路三：

續寫兩段中,故事的劇情在第一段結尾達到高潮，之后開始回落;可以推測主人公的情緒呈現出“緊張一驚

恐一松一口氣—徹底放松”的變化.

第一段北極熊返回后，可以通過熊的新一輪進攻引出劇情，隨著熊的攻擊愈發猛烈,主人公需要采取新方

法避險.例如，可以描寫熊再次攻擊柵欄，“我”如何使用隨身物品應對進攻，保護自己和妻子的安全.同時也可以

描寫妻子的動作和情緒，烘托場面的危急.通過“我”與熊的動作交替，在第一段最后一句將人與熊的矛盾推至

最大.

第二段直升機到來后，可以描寫“我'’避險的動作，例如立刻調轉方向跑回營地.之后利用直升機的優勢解

決問題，如利用螺旋槳發出的巨大聲響嚇退經驗不足的北極熊.結尾處呼應開頭,總結作者此行的目的是否達

關于畫線詞:Elli作為女主人公，是續寫內容中應該出現的畫線詞，除此以外,fence的描寫與熊相關，“我”用

camera進行攻擊防身，以達到safe的目的，動作描寫包含run,危急時刻直升飛機的noises保證了可以擊退熊,

最終提及pictures呼應此行目的.由此展開畫線詞,布局合理自然，符合故事邏輯.

參考范文：

Afewminuteslater,thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Thefurrygiantmusthavegatheredhiswits,forhe

suddenlyrearedupandattackedthefencewithferociousstrength,leavinganarrowopeningonit.Behindme,Elli

muffledacryofterror.Myeyeswerefixedontheintruder.Mymindracedlikeflashasmyhandsgropedfor

anythingthatmightkeepussafefromthebear*srampage.That'swhenIfeltthecamera.Withlittlehesitation,I

shovedtheequipmentthroughtheopeningasthepolarbearclosedhisjawsonthelensandthenpulledmywhole

cameraoutandsmashedit.

Atthatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Iranbacktothecamp,stumblingahundredtimesinmyhaste.

Ellicontactedthepilotovertheradio.Hearingthatwehadnotsufferedanyphysicalinjury,thepilottoldustostay

putandcoverourears.Theharshwhooshingnoiseoftheapproachinghelicopterspookedtheyoungbear.The

animaltookafewhesitantstepsbackandeventuallydisappearedbacktowardsthelake.Althoughmycamerahas

metitsgloriousend,andthoughallourpictureswerelost,ourmemoryofthisunexpectedencounterremainsfresh

tillthisday.

即學即練

“I’mgoingtomissyousomuch,Poppy,“saidthetall,thinteenager.Hebentdowntohughisoldfriend

goodbye.Hestoodup,huggedhisparents,andsmiled,tryingnottolethisemotions（情緒）getthebetterofhim.

Hisparentswerenotquiteabletokeeptheirsundercontrol.Theyhaddriventheirsonseveralhoursoutof

towntotheuniversitywherehewouldsoonbelivingandstudying.Itwastimetosaygoodbyefornowatleast.The

familyhuggedandsmiledthroughmistyeyesandthenlaughed.

Theboyliftedthelastbagontohisshoulder,andflashedabrightsmiledguessthisisit,“hesaid.’THsee

youbackhomeinamonth,okay?”Hisparentsnodded,andtheywatchedashewalkedoutofsightintothecrowds

ofhundredsofstudentsandparents.Theboy'smotherturnedtothedog,“Okay,Poppy,timetogobackhome.^^

Thehouseseemedquietasatombwithouttheboylivingthere.Allthatweek,Poppydidn'tseeminterestedin

herdinner,herfavoritetoy,oreveninherdailywalk.Herownersweresadtoo,buttheyknewtheirsonwouldbe

backtovisit.Poppydidn't.

Theyofferedthedogsomeofherfavoritepeanutbuttertreats.Theyevenlethersitonthesofa,buttheoldgirl

justwasn'therusualcheerfulself.Herownersstartedtogetworried.€UWhatshouldwedotocheerPoppyup?”

askedDad.utWe*vetriedeverything.^^

“Ihaveanidea,butitmightbealittlecrazy,“smiledMom."Withoutanybodyleftinthehousebutus,this

placecoulduseabitoffun.Let'sgetalittledogforPoppy.^^

Itdidn'ttakelongbeforetheywalkedthroughthefrontdoorcarryingabigbox.Poppywelcomedthemhome

asusualbutwhenshesawthebox,shestopped.Sheputhernoseonit.Hertailbeganwagging（擺動）eversoslowly,

thenfasterasshecaughtthesmell.

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Dadopenedtheboxandasweetlittledogappeared.

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Afewweekslater,theboyarrivedhomefromuniversity.

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Dadopenedtheboxandasweetlittledogappeared.Obviously,Poppywascheerfulonseeingtheadorable

littledog.Butthelittlepuppywasscaredanduneasyinthenewenvironment.Poppy'seyesglitteringwith

rapture（狂喜）,shetriedtotouchthepuppy'sface,butthepuppyhiditselfunderthetable.Afterseveralminutes,the

puppyfeltsafeandtheirfriendliness,gettingclosetoPoppy.Poppyseemedtobeoverwhelmedbypleasure,asshe

couldn'thelplickingthelittledog.Theworriedparentssighedwithrelief.TheynamedthelittledogDodo.Ever

sincethen,thehousewasfilledwithwarmthandlaughter,thecheerfulatmosphereenvelopedthewholefamily.

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Afewweekslater,theboyarrivedhomefromtheuniversity.

Hewasquiteastonishedtobewarmlygreetedbytwolovelydogs.Seeinghisconfusion,theparentsexplained

whathadhappenedtopoorPoppyandhowtheyfiguredoutsuchasplendidsolution.Agiantsmilebloomedonhis

face,theboyhugginghisparentstightly.Withtheireyesblurring,thefamilychattedjoyfullyaboutwhattheyhad

gonethroughduringthelastmonth.Ultimately,theboysighed,"It'ssonicetoseeyoubathedinloveandharmony.

I'vebeensupportedbyyourlong-lastinglovewhichalwaysexertedadramaticimpactonmealongthelearning

path.MJustatthatmoment,poppyandthelittledogbarked,asiftheyhadtakeninwhattheboysaid.

驗學

閱讀下面短文，根據所給情節進行續寫,使之構成一個完整的故事.

I

TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeopleinthetown

hadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachother

meetthechallenges.

Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.She

knewtheyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime,shewouldbringfoodandmedicine

tothem.

Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasamansickinbed,

hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboy-hisnamewas

Bernard-hadinterestedherverymuch.

“Iwishyoucouldseeshesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara,44Heissuchahelptohis

mother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,butIdon*tseewhathecando.”

Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.€€Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearn

money,“saidClara.44Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch."

“SodoIJsaidHarry."Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem."

Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,"Ihaveagreatidea!I

haveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish（完成）

Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobeagoodone."Itell

youwhatwecando,“saidJohn."YouknowthatbigboxofcomUncleJohnsentus?Well,wecanmake

popcorn（爆米花）,andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.?,

注意:1.所續寫短文的詞數應為150左右；

2.至少使用5個短文中標有下畫線的關鍵詞語；

3.續寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語己為你寫好；

4.續寫完成后，請用下畫線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語.

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WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.

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Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.

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WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.Shewasveryhappythatthekids

weremorethangladtohelptheneedypeople.Thentheywenttothesupermarkettobuyallthatwasneededto

makepopcorn.Mrs.Meredithtaughtthekidshowtomakepopcorn.Havingmadealargebagofpopcorn,theyput

thepopcornintosmallerbags.WhentheycametoBernard'shouseandtoldthemoftheirplan,Bernardwasso

movedthatheworeabroadsmileandacceptedtheirkindness.

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Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Everyafternoonafterschool,Bernardwentto

theMeredithfamilypickingthefreshly-madepopcornandwenttothetowntheatrewherethereweremany

film-goers.WiththehelpofMrs.Meredith,Bernarddevelopedpopcornofdifferentflavorstocaterfordiverse

tastes.Graduallyhemadeenoughmoneytobuyhisfathermedicine.Whenhegrewup,hestartedsomechain

storesandhewasalwayswillingtohelpthoseinneedofhelp.

II

OneweekendinJuly,Janeandherhusband,Tom,haddriventhreehourstocampovernightbyalakeinthe

forest.Unfortunately,onthewayanunpleasantsubjectcameupandtheystartedtoquarrel.Bythetimethey

reachedthelake,JanewassoangrythatshesaidtoTom."Pmgoingtofindabetterspotforustocamp"and

walkedaway.

Withnopathtofollow,Janejustwalkedonforquitealongtime.Aftershehadclimbedtoahighplace,she

turnedaround,hopingtoseethelake.Tohersurprise,shesawnothingbutforestand,farbeyond,asnow-capped

mountaintop.Shesuddenlyrealizedthatshewaslost.

“Tom!”shecried."Help!”

Noreply.IfonlyshehadnotlefthermobilephoneinthatbagwithTom.Janekeptmoving,butthefarthershe

walked,themoreconfusedshebecame.Asnightwasbeginningtofall,Janewassotiredthatshehadtostopfbrthe

night.Lyingawakeinthedark,JanewantedverymuchtobewithTomandherfamily.Shewantedtoholdhimand

tellhimhowmuchshelovedhim.

Janeroseatthebreakofday,hungryandthirsty.Shecouldhearwatertrickling（滴落）somewhereatadistance.

Quicklyshefollowedthesoundtoastream.Tohergreatjoy,shealsosawsomeberrybushes.Shedrankandatea

fewberries.Neverinherlifehadshetastedanythingbetter.Feelingstrongernow,Janebegantowalkalongthe

streamandhopeitwouldleadhertothelake.

Asshepickedherwaycarefullyalongthestream,Janeheardahelicopter.Isthatforme?Unfortunately,the

treesmadeitimpossibleforpeopletoseeherfromabove.Afewminuteslater,anotherhelicopterflewoverhead.

Janetookoffheryellowblouse,thinkingthatsheshouldgo.toanopenareaandflagthemiftheycamebackagain.

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Butnomore.helicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.

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ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.

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Butnomorehelicopterscameanditwasgettingdarkagain.Feelingcoldandhungry,shesaidtoherselfwith

greatregret:IfIhadn'tquarreledwithTom,Iwouldn'thavegotlostintheforest.NowJanehadnochoicebutto

walkalongastreamuntilshefoundasuitableplacetostayintheforestforthenight.Luckily,shefoundaboxof

matchinherpocket,shelitafireintheopenspacetokeepwarmandkeepawaywildanimals.Exhausted,Shefell

fastasleepanddreamedofseeingTom.

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ItwasdaybreakwhenJanewokeup.Sheatesomeberriesandthenwalkedalongthestream,hopingtofinda

suitableplacetoguidethehelicopterwhenshesawahugerockerectingatadistance.Sherushedtotherock,

climbedontoitandwaited.Tohergreatjoy,thehelicopterappearedagain,shewildlyflaggedtheyellowblouse.

Luckily,thehelicopterspottedJanethistimeanditlandednearthebigrockslowly.Tomjumpedoffthehelicopter

andrantowardsJane.ShehuggedTomtightlyandwhispered:Itisallmyfault,nothingwillseparateusfromnow

on.^^

III

Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaska

withhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,

andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled（騎行）alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwo

youngdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.

ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim."Man,that'sabigdog!”hethought.Butwhenhe

lookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasn'tadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithhim.

Mac'sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofhearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthe

wolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac*srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead,Butaminutelater,

itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac'sbike,tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfa

secondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase（追趕）.

Macwaspedalinghardno