2023.12金十二校讀后續(xù)寫解析Forcourage,myfingersclungtotheharness(背帶、保護(hù)帶)onCho'sbroadbackaswepassedthefenceofmyneighborMr.Groll'syard.WalkingbyMr.Groll'syardisthebestpartofourmorningwalk,andalsotheworst.Itisthebestpartbecausetherosestalktous.“Goodmorning,Cho,”whispertherosescentstomyguidedog'snose.Otherrosesshouttome,“Hello,Mai!”Nowcomestheworstpart:Mr.Groll.Asusual,friendlyChthumpshertail.ButCh6isjustadog;howcansheknowthatthisneighbordoesnotlikemeatall?“Hello,Mr.Groll.”IgreetedhimasIdideverymorning.Andlikeeveryothermorning,hedidnotanswerme.ButIknewhewasthere,watching,behindhisfence.Healwayssoundsoutofbreath.andthecreakygateswingsnervouslyinhishand.Maybehe'safraidofmebecauseI'mblind.Disabilitiesdoscaregrown-upssometimes.ThenIremembered:theotherdayIheardhimplayingcheckers(西洋跳棋)withmyfriendJimmy,who'sinawheelchair.Ch6andImarchedon,andmythoughtskeptstep.WhydidMr.Grollignoreme?It'samysterytome.Papahastoldmethatsomefolksdonotlikepeoplefromfarawayplaces.Doesthissolvethemystery?MaybeMr.Grolldoesnotlikeneighborsfromfarawayplaces.No,thatcan'tbeit.EverySaturdayMr.Grollandmybigbrother,Lien,helpeachotherwithyardwork.Theyarefriends.Well,then,Iwondered,whywouldn’thetalktome?Thetoeofmyshoescuffedthesidewalk.andIthink,maybehedidn'tlikemebecauseI'magirl.Thesidewalkhummedbeneathmyfeet.Askateboardzoomedby.“Hello,MaiandCho!”myfriendJanayelled.“Hi,Mr.Groll”Iwaited.IfMr.GrollignoredJana,thenthemysterywassolved.Buthisvoicecalledout,“Hello,Jana!”Paragraph1:Thesoundofittwistedmyheart.Paragraph2:“ItisCh6thatscaresmywordsaway.”hereplied.【重難點講解】劃線第一句話表達(dá)了主人公Mai和她的導(dǎo)盲犬Chó在鄰居Mr.Groll的花園旁邊經(jīng)過時，花朵仿佛與他們對話的意象。花的香氣對Chó的鼻子輕聲細(xì)語地說：“早上好，Chó”，而其他的花則向Mai大聲喊：“你好，Mai！”Mai作為盲人，眼睛雖然看不見，但是聽覺是很好的，這種描寫通過賦予花朵生命和語言的特性，傳達(dá)了一種溫馨和友好的氛圍，也表現(xiàn)了Mai的樂觀，與其在鄰里中感到的其他情感形成鮮明對比。劃線第二句話描繪了主人公Mai行走在人行道上時的感覺。通過使用動詞“hummed”，賦予了人行道一種生動的感覺，好像它在和

Mai

的腳步一同發(fā)出某種低沉而持續(xù)的聲音。這樣的描寫可以傳達(dá)出一種親近自然、融入環(huán)境的感覺，同時強(qiáng)調(diào)了Mai與周圍環(huán)境的聯(lián)系。【情節(jié)梳理】人物：這篇文章主要出現(xiàn)了七個人物分別是Mai,Chó(theguidedog),Mr.Groll(theneighbor),Jimmy(Mai’sfriendinawheelchair),Jana(Mai’sfriend),Lien(Mai’sbigbrother),Papa(Mai’sfather)

主要還是圍繞前三個來展開。Mai：一個盲人女孩，有一只導(dǎo)盲犬Chó，很友好，每天早上都和格羅爾先生打招呼，盡管他顯然很冷漠。Chó：Mai的導(dǎo)盲犬，是她的忠實伙伴。Mr.Groll：Mai的鄰居，看上去不太友好和冷漠，但實際上有原因。視角：Mai的第一人稱視角敘述主題：誤解和化解。Mai

試圖理解為什么鄰居Mr.Groll對她不友好，最后通過他們交流打破了障礙，結(jié)交了朋友，彌合兩人之間的鴻溝。【段首句解讀以及解題思路】段首句一：Thesoundofittwistedmyheart.

它的聲音揪著我的心。段首句二：“ItisChóthatscaresmywordsaway.”hereplied.“是Chó嚇得我說不出話來。”他回答說。上文講到，Mai猜測鄰居Mr.Groll對她不友好的原因，有殘疾、遠(yuǎn)道而來抑或是女孩，但分別通過Jimmy(Mai’sfriendinawheelchair),Lien(Mai’sbigbrother),Jana(Mai’sfriend)三個人物分別排除。因此當(dāng)最后Mr.Groll與Jana打招呼的時候，那個聲音揪著Mai的心，百思不得其解。從段首句二我們可以得知原因在于Chó，Mr.Groll害怕這只導(dǎo)盲犬。這里其實從上文第四段“Andlikeeveryothermorning,hedidnotanswerme.ButIknewhewasthere,watching,behindhisfence.Healwayssoundsoutofbreath,andthecreakygateswingsnervouslyinhishand.”這句話也可以感知。并由這句話反推，第一段結(jié)尾Mai是去詢問對其冷漠的原因。前面部分可以寫Mai鼓起勇氣去和鄰居進(jìn)行面對面交流，最后引入詢問。第二段在得知真正的原因后，可以寫Mai的反應(yīng)，可以是安慰Mr.Groll也可以是部分歉疚，并表示Chó的友善并不會傷人。可以適當(dāng)加入Chó的描寫，可以從尾巴、舌頭、腦袋等入手，表現(xiàn)人畜無害。最后可以寫Mai和Mr.Groll化解了之前的誤會，成為了朋友。【優(yōu)秀習(xí)作】Thesoundofittwistedmyheart.

Iindeeddidn’tunderstandwhyMr.Grolltreatedmeinsuchaway.Standinginfrontofhishouse,Iwaslostinthoughtforalongtime.Finally,Istillscrewedupthecouragetoconfronttheenigma.HeadingtoMr.Groll’sgate,Iventured,“Mr.Groll,whydoyouneverrespondtomygreetings?IsitbecauseI’mblindormaybebecauseI’magirl…”Theunansweredquerieslingered,andmyfingersclungtightertoChó’sharnessaswestoodattheedgeoftheyard.“ItisChóthatscaresmywordsaway.”hereplied.

Upondiscoveringthetruth,shockcoursedthroughme.Butsoonhepressedon,“Ihaveafearofdogs,yousee.It’snotaboutyoubeingblindoragirl;it’smyowndiscomfort.”Atthis,withempathyinmyheart,Ireassuredhim,“Chóisgentleandwell-trained.Shewon’tharmanyone.”Then,IdirectedChótocomeforwardandgetdown.ChówaslickingMr.Groll’sshoesmildly.ThetensionintheairseemedtosubsidewithMr.GrollaffectionatelyrufflingChó’sfur.Finally,themisunderstandingunraveled,andaseedoffriendshipbetweenuswouldgraduallyblossominthatverygarden.【參考范文】Thesoundofittwistedmyheart.NowIunderstoodsomethingIdidn’tknowbefore:unfriendlyMr.GrolllikesJimmy.AndLien.AndJana.ButnotmeandChó...NotMeandChó!Anideabrightenedmymystery.ButIshouldknowwhyMr.Grolldidn’ttalktome!Repulsedbyconfusion,aswellasirritation,Ifeltmywayalongthefencetoapproachmyneighbour.Thegatesqueakedopen.“Mai!Becareful!”Mr.Groll’sstartledvoicesteadiedmycouragewhilehishandsteadiedmyelbow.“Youcanpleasesolvemymystery,”Istammered.“IsitbecauseI’mblindthatyoudon’tlikeme?OrbecauseIamagirlfromafarawayland?”“ItisChothatscaresmywordsaway.”hereplied.

“Ilikeyou,justasIlikeLien,andJana,”hesoundedbreathless,maybebecauseofanxietyoreagerness.“Butyouknow,Iamjustafraidofyourdog.”hecontinued.Hisearnestexplanationmadeeverythingcometolight.“Comewithme.”Itoldhim,“Makeacqu