Word版本，下載可自由編輯美國留學(xué)申請(qǐng)書中英雙語版本Countlessdreamershavelookedtothesky,theirthoughtsfixedonTheWrightbrothers’poweredflightinitiatedmenintoarealizationofthatI,too,foundmyselfwithaverypersonalandenthusiasticdreamofflyingasaAsaparticipantinamodelplanetournamentinelementaryschool,IfoundthejoyofmakingamodelplaneandtinkeringwithittofindtheperfectThisboyhoodpastimefosteredmydecisiontomajorinaeronauticalandmechanicalengineeringinoneofthebestengineeringschoolsinKorea,HankukAviation

點(diǎn)評(píng)：第一段利用描述小時(shí)候制作飛機(jī)模型和參與競賽的經(jīng)受，體現(xiàn)了他小時(shí)候的幻想，和愛好的產(chǎn)生。并引用懷特兄弟說明了自己決心的堅(jiān)決。從而引出了自己今后的目標(biāo)，和追求目標(biāo)考上航空機(jī)械工程學(xué)院的經(jīng)受。這個(gè)開篇雖然比較大眾，但是表述出了自己的愛好和目標(biāo)，并起到了引出下文的作用。

ThereIembracednumerousopportunities,encounteringrealaircraftanddelvingintointroductoryflightFrombasicmechanicsofaircrafttosimpleairplanedesign,themoreIlearnedaboutmymajor,themoreIwantedtoAnaturalextensionofthisburningcuriosityremainstoenteryourrenownedgraduateprogramintheDepartmentofAerospace

點(diǎn)評(píng)：其次段是一個(gè)過渡段，簡潔介紹了在航空學(xué)院能夠接觸到的東西，這些專業(yè)的學(xué)問使自己的愛好更加濃烈，促使自己更加全身心投入到這個(gè)領(lǐng)域的學(xué)習(xí)。很好的起到承上啟下的作用。

MypreparationforyourprogramhasbeenexpansiveandFirst,IhaveasolidbackgroundinaeronauticalandmechanicalAdditionally,duringmyundergraduateyears,IjoinedaclubcalledInformationProcessResearch(IPR)focusedoncomputerOurprojectsdealtwithvisualC++,AutoCAD,andothersoftwareMyworkoutsidetheclassroom,injobplacementsthroughHankukAviationUniversity,grantedmeexcellentopportunitiesforreal-worldThisledtomyassociatemembershipoftheKoreaAeronauticalEngineers’

點(diǎn)評(píng)：這段簡潔描述了自己在本科期間參與的一個(gè)項(xiàng)目，介紹了自己專業(yè)的背景。利用這個(gè)項(xiàng)目的介紹，反映出了本科期間參與的活動(dòng)，證明了他由于愛好，開頭研發(fā)和探究的過程，和為了追求目標(biāo)所做的努力，同時(shí)也反映出了專業(yè)力量和背景。

Whileexploringthepossibilityofgraduate-levelwork,IdiscoveredthatmyinterestsareperfectlymatchedwithyourMyinterestinflightmechanicsandcontrol,especially,waspiquedduringmyflightcontrolandautomaticcontrolsystemsTheaspectsofthecontrolsystemfascinatedmeandmademelongtosupervisealargeprojectinthisfieldoneAlthoughIrealizemycurrentlimitations,mywhole-heartedenthusiasm,combinedwithguidancefromyourexceptionalfaculty,willcarrymethroughtherigorsofstudyingandforgemeintoanexpertcontrolsystemsengineerafterthetwoyearcourseworkandthesubsequent

點(diǎn)評(píng)：本段寫利用不斷學(xué)習(xí)，確立了自己今后的學(xué)習(xí)方向和目標(biāo)，并且把自己的愛好很好的與申請(qǐng)學(xué)校相結(jié)合，同時(shí)反映了自己本學(xué)校在這方面的劣勢。反映出自己迫切想要到對(duì)方學(xué)校學(xué)習(xí)的渴望。

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