讀后續寫經典續寫案例紅樓夢曹雪芹高鶚爭論點：契合度高低文學家：情節發展是否和原八十回一致語言學家：用詞用句是否和原八十回一致融洽度原敘事文本續寫高效度結尾讀猜兩個要弄明白的問題：原文有什么用？續寫要寫什么？原文理解續寫文模仿素材素材情節基調核心矛盾故事框架語言設定潛伏信息樣題情節和語言特點分析情節基調的鋪設：“向心性”核心矛盾的預設：“發散性”故事框架的搭建：“順延性”隱含語言的定位：“一致性”情節基調“AfunnythinghappenedtoArthurwhenhewasonthewaytoworkoneday”。funny:“趣”Afunnythingcauseamusement,laughter,etc.

(有趣的，可笑的)向心性MoneyorOtherthings核心矛盾“情節核”theyoungmanoranothermanThiefNotthief矛盾身份

矛盾中心

關鍵人物發散性

箱子里所屬人Youngman身份可能情節發展1Moneytheyoungmanthief碰巧抓住搶劫犯（即結尾1）2notthief碰巧把剛從銀行取錢趕路的人當劫犯，最后到警局傳來抓到劫犯消息3anothermanthief碰巧碰到一個剛偷了其他人錢的小偷，最后到警局傳來抓到劫犯并找回銀行失錢的消息，最后在Arthur幫助下抓到另一個小偷4notthief路遇一個路人幫人搬運裝滿錢的行李箱，而Arthur錯把路人當劫犯，最后澄清消除誤會5Otherthingstheyoungmanthief錯把普通小偷當劫犯，最后幫助抓到該小偷6notthief錯把路人當劫犯（即結尾2）7anothermanthief碰巧碰到一個剛偷了其他人東西的小偷，最后到警局傳來抓到劫犯并找回銀行失錢的消息，最后在Arthur幫助下抓到另一個小偷8notthief路遇一個路人幫人搬運普通行李箱，而Arthur錯把路人當劫犯，最后澄清消除誤會故事發展時間：onArthur’swayhome地點：alongtheParkAvenueneartheFirstnationalBank背景：alongloudnoiseofanalarmfromthebankayoungmanArthurRunafterStop,stop!…?TothePS順延性故事框架Paragraph1:Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”_______________________________________________Paragraph2:ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthur..._______________________________________________順延故事發展創意故事結尾順延

逆轉語言定位記敘類故事文文體敘事文本敘事人稱敘事時態敘事方式第一、二、三人稱旁白/對白口語/書面語選詞用詞句式選擇一致性…語言定位記敘類故事文敘事人稱：比如，he,she,it,Afunnything,theyoungman,ParkAvenue,Arthur等敘事時態：

用過去式或者與過去式相關的時態（直接引語除外）比如wasontheway,walked,wassurprised,startedtorun等敘事方式：Notroubleatall,whathappenedGotothepolicestation,Stopstop,Helphelp。“第三人”的身份講述（第三人稱作為主語）（直接引語除外）轉述過去某個時刻所發生的事旁白+對白（間接引語+直接引語）[主次分明]語言定位記敘類故事文敘事文本定位：一組數據：結尾1（153）

advorprep(behind,suddenly,until,obviously,already,later),verb(might,realize,continue,jump,racelikethewind,learn,open,expected,describe,caught),nounornounphrase(alargesumofmoney,information)結尾2（158）behind,directlyoutsidebehave,realize,drive,follow,describe,voice,innocent,embarrassed,faster語言平實易懂的小故事小詞、常用詞以及常見短語12個新詞(組)18個新詞(組)funnyamusing，intriguing，divertingVS.語言定位記敘類故事文句式選用：行為動作：“主語+謂語動詞+賓語”

材料Everyonehadadifferentanswer

結尾Thepolicecaughttherobber事物狀態：“主語+系動詞+表語”

材料Arthurwassurprised,ParkAvenuehadbeenquietamomentbefore

結尾Themanshoutingbehindisthebankthief,Themanwasinnocent“清楚明晰地講故事”強調故事人物的行為和思想變化語言定位記敘類故事文句式選用：一組數據：材料：12個含and的并列句式，結尾1(153字):6個并列句式；結尾2(158字):7個并列句式主從復合句(以時間狀語從句為主)材料：whenhewasonthewayto…,Ashewalkedalong…,Afterplacingitonthe…,JustasArthurpickedup…結尾：Ashewasrunning…,Themomenthegoto…,JustasArthurwasdescribing…時間提示詞如atthemoment,then,later等。主從復合句少，并列復合句多故事一環承接一環的時間發展和動作的延續讀后續寫策略情節基調核心矛盾框架完整順延逆轉語言文體遣詞用句情節走向合情合理的創意不著痕跡情節內容框架結構語篇段落1、挖掘情節基調，廓清核心矛盾，創造合情合理的創意故事外延。2、理清敘事角度，把握順延逆轉，構建張弛有度的完整情節框架。3、定位語言文體，模仿遣詞用句，續寫不著痕跡的語用敘事文本。讀后續寫策略“讀后續寫”與閱讀課的契合單元課文內容M1U3TravelJournal–JourneydowntheMekongM2U4WildlifeProtection–HowDaisyLearnedtoHelpWildlifeM3U2HealthyEating–ComeandEatHereM3U5Canada“TheTrueNorth”–ATriponthe“TrueNorth”M4U4BodyLanguage–Communication,NoProblem?M5U3LifeintheFuture–FirstImpressionsM5U4MakingtheNews–MyFirstWorkAssignment

“Unforgettable”,SaysNewJournalistM7U2Robot–SatisfactionGuaranteed虛擬故事“讀后續寫”與閱讀課的契合1. M3U2Comeandeathere2. M7U2SatisfactionGuaranteed思維+語言虛構+趣味“讀后續寫”與閱讀課的契合ComeandeathereWP+hisemptyrestaurantVisittoYH’s+gottheproblemDoresearchNewsignanddiscountCompetitionwasonWhatifwithnoresearchornofindings?WhatifWPjustcopyYH’sidea?一個可能需要增加的閱讀環節信息梳理FriendlycooperationHostilecompetitionPeacefulcoexistence+思辨發散alarmed,disturbing,trust“讀后續寫”與閱讀課的契合SatisfactionGuaranteed信息整理+思辨發散ClaireTonyGladysaccompanied,protected,helpenvyAsenseoffailureWhencomparedwithCurtainsopened+ApartyChangeheropinionAsweetvictoryAsenseoflossWhatif…?CurtainsclosedStillvictory?Loss?Tony’sReport?兩篇文本（節選）WangPengsatinhisemptyrestaurantfeelingveryfrustrated.Ithadbeenaverystrangemorning.Usuallyhegotupearlyandpreparedhismenuofbarbecuedmuttonkebabs,roastpork,stir-fliedvegetablesandfriedrice.Thenbylunchtimetheywouldallbesold.Bynowhisrestaurantoughttobefullofpeople.Butnottoday!Whywasthat?Whatcouldhavehappened?Clairedidn’twanttherobotinherhouse,especiallyasherhusbandwouldbeabsentforthreeweeks,butLarrypersuadeherorallowhertobeharmed.Itwouldbeabonus.However,whenshefirstsawtherobot,shefeltalarmed.HisnamewasTonyandheseemedmorelikeahumanthanamachine.Hewastallandhandsomewithsmoothhairandadeepvoicealthoughhisfacialexpressionneverchanged.兩個語篇的文本比較：SatisfactionGuaranteedComeandeathere旁白+對白（旁白為主）書面語+口語簡單句式，小詞常規詞行為變化全旁白的形式全書面語形式復合句式，較高級詞匯情緒（心理）表達敘事人稱：第三人稱；

敘事時態：過去式敘事順序：以時間發展

結尾方式：出人意料SatisfactionGuaranteedComeandeathereAweeklater,WangPeng’srestaurantwasagainquitefullandhefelthappier.HesmiledashewelcomethecustomerswarmlyatthedoorbutthesmilelefthisfacewhenhesawYongHuiwalkingin.Shedidn’tlookhappybutglareathim.“MayIaskwhatyouweredoinginmyrestauranttheotherday?IthoughtyouwerejustanewcustomerandnowIknowthatyouonlycame