1、書面表達(dá)講評(píng)課教學(xué)設(shè)計(jì)長(zhǎng)興技師學(xué)院【課時(shí)】1課時(shí)（45分鐘）【設(shè)計(jì)理念】任務(wù)設(shè)計(jì)有明確的目標(biāo)，層層深入，循環(huán)遞進(jìn)。針對(duì)學(xué)生寫作中的真實(shí)困難，設(shè)計(jì)了具體的、語(yǔ)言真實(shí)、語(yǔ)境真實(shí)、語(yǔ)義真實(shí)的運(yùn)用性任務(wù)，任務(wù)設(shè)計(jì)貼近學(xué)生生活，引起學(xué)生共鳴，激發(fā)學(xué)生積極參與的欲望。【學(xué)情分析】授課班級(jí)：高三會(huì)計(jì)（3）班班級(jí)特點(diǎn)：班級(jí)大部分是女生，班級(jí)氣氛不是很活躍。學(xué)生英語(yǔ)基礎(chǔ)比較薄弱，很多學(xué)生在寫作中有畏難情緒，高一到高二這兩年里幾乎沒(méi)有寫作文。他們不注重醞釀寫作思路，提筆就寫，沒(méi)有養(yǎng)成良好的寫作習(xí)慣，寫作中具體的問(wèn)題是：詞匯貧乏、搭配不當(dāng)、句型誤用、語(yǔ)法不通、信息不全、條理紊亂已經(jīng)謀篇布局不合理等問(wèn)題。為了解決這些

2、問(wèn)題，筆者下定決心要通過(guò)作為講評(píng)課來(lái)提高學(xué)生的書面表達(dá)能力，幫助他們掌握寫作的基本步驟，消除他們的畏難情緒。【教學(xué)目標(biāo)】1. 知識(shí)目標(biāo)（1）學(xué)生能通過(guò)鑒別共性錯(cuò)誤反思自己習(xí)作中的錯(cuò)誤，如單詞拼寫錯(cuò)誤，主謂一致錯(cuò)誤，時(shí)態(tài)語(yǔ)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤，逐字翻譯及句子結(jié)構(gòu)不完整等問(wèn)題；（2）學(xué)生能欣賞班里一些同學(xué)所運(yùn)用的優(yōu)美的表達(dá)，如sothat, not onlybut also,so, and, cute, be delighted, would you like to do, look forward to, etc.（3）學(xué)會(huì)能學(xué)會(huì)使用一些表達(dá)句與句之間不同關(guān)系的詞，如表并列的and, not onlybut

3、also, eitheror, neithernor,whats more, in addition, besides等; 表示順序的：firstly, secondly, thirdly, lastly, finally, last but not the least等；表轉(zhuǎn)折的but, however, yet, while等；表因果的so, so that, thus, therefore, as a result等；表達(dá)自己觀點(diǎn)的in my opinion, as far as I am concerned, I think, from my point of view等，使語(yǔ)篇具有的

4、整體性、關(guān)聯(lián)性和邏輯性，更通順、流暢；（4）學(xué)生能記住信的基本格式；2. 能力目標(biāo)（1）學(xué)生能掌握寫作的基本步驟，并能運(yùn)用這些步驟提升自己的文章；（2）學(xué)生能靈活使用關(guān)聯(lián)詞使文章流暢，具有邏輯性；（3）學(xué)生能做到要點(diǎn)俱全并合理拓展；（4）學(xué)生能進(jìn)行謀篇布局，使文章具有整體性；3.情感目標(biāo)（1）學(xué)生能養(yǎng)成良好的寫作習(xí)慣并能養(yǎng)成用英語(yǔ)寫日記或?qū)懳⒉┑牧?xí)慣；（2）學(xué)生能鑒賞他人的作品并有意識(shí)有選擇的去學(xué)習(xí)別人的寫作長(zhǎng)處來(lái)彌補(bǔ)自己的不足；【教學(xué)重點(diǎn)和難點(diǎn)】幫助學(xué)生掌握寫作的步驟；教會(huì)學(xué)生如何使得文章更加通順、流暢；引導(dǎo)學(xué)生在寫作前做必要的準(zhǔn)備，特別是要做到提煉要點(diǎn)，并進(jìn)行有效拓展；【教學(xué)方法及策略】任

5、務(wù)教學(xué)法、分層教學(xué)法；【課前準(zhǔn)備】課前準(zhǔn)備：多媒體PPT【教學(xué)過(guò)程】Step1: Lead-in1. Ask students the following two question.What do you think about your last writing? Why couldnt you get a high score?【設(shè)計(jì)意圖】：引導(dǎo)學(xué)生分析自己作文分?jǐn)?shù)低的原因，發(fā)現(xiàn)自己寫作中的錯(cuò)誤并進(jìn)行有意識(shí)的歸類自己所犯的錯(cuò)誤。Step2: Presention1. Show students several kinds of mistakes in their writing.(1)Mi

6、sspelling (2) tense and voice (3) subject-verb concord(4) Qinglish(5) not being able to tell the part of speech(6) writing incomplete sentences2. Show students some wrong sentences written by their classmates and ask them to correct them.(1)MisspellingThank you for coming to my birthday party on las

7、t sunny. (2) tense and voiceI wanted to invited you to watch a new movie with me. (3) subject-verb concordI likes it very much.(4) Qinglish The birthday party I am very happy you can come.You see after remember to contact me on.(5) not being able to tell the part of speechAre you free time this Satu

8、rday?We can went to watch a new movie.I am looking forward to be with you again.(6) writing incomplete sentences Im very like.I very like.【設(shè)計(jì)意圖】：讓學(xué)生看看一些典型錯(cuò)誤句子，發(fā)現(xiàn)問(wèn)題并改正句子，使學(xué)生對(duì)錯(cuò)誤有認(rèn)識(shí)，做到以后在自己的寫作中有意識(shí)避免。3. Appreciate some good sentences and find out why they are worth learning.(1)Thank you for coming to my

9、 birthday party and giving me a lovely toy bear. (丁佳瑤)(2) It is very lovely and I like it very much.(陶?qǐng)A)(3) Your bear is so comfortable that I can sleep with it.(高蓓)(4) Its very cute. I love it very much. So I want to invite you to watch a new movie this Saturday. (岳悅)(5) If you can go with me, I wi

10、ll be very happy.(丁佳瑤)(6) I was delighted that I received your lovely toy bear.(王晨)(7) Do you have any plan for this Saturday? I am going to watch a new movie.(王晨)(8) I would like to invite you to watch a movie this Saturday.(曹鑫)【設(shè)計(jì)意圖】：讓學(xué)生欣賞自己班里部分同學(xué)寫得比較好的一些句子，要求學(xué)生讀了這些句子后能說(shuō)出感受：句子寫得好，好在哪里，使學(xué)生在寫作時(shí)有意識(shí)去模

11、仿，最后成為一種自己的能力。另外，好句子被展示的同學(xué)也會(huì)有一種榮譽(yù)感，促使他們?cè)俳釉賲枴?. Show students the four aspects when a teacher assess a passage.（1）內(nèi)容作文內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)全，拓展有度，有效。（2）語(yǔ)法語(yǔ)法使用要準(zhǔn)確，使用較高級(jí)語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)、較高級(jí)詞匯及多種句型。（3）框架有意識(shí)的使用連接詞使作文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊、流暢。（4）思想思想要開(kāi)放能，引起讀者的共鳴,靈魂。【設(shè)計(jì)意圖】：讓學(xué)生知道老師是如何評(píng)價(jià)一篇作文的，使學(xué)生知道自己如何能寫出一篇讓老師評(píng)價(jià)高的作文。5. Show students the six steps before

12、writing a passage.（1）審題包括：體裁、人稱、時(shí)態(tài)、結(jié)構(gòu)、要求（包括：字?jǐn)?shù)、內(nèi)容）（2）列提綱/要點(diǎn)/關(guān)鍵詞（3）連詞成句（4）連句成篇（5）潤(rùn)色修正（6）定稿6. Take the last writing as an example and show students how to write a passage.上周日是學(xué)校外教Kathy的生日，李梅參加了她的聚會(huì)并送給她一個(gè)可愛(ài)的玩具熊。對(duì)此，Kathy要表達(dá)謝意并發(fā)出邀請(qǐng)，請(qǐng)她本周六一起去看一部新電影。請(qǐng)你幫Kathy完成感謝卡。注意：感謝卡必須包括所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)發(fā)揮 感謝卡的開(kāi)頭與結(jié)尾已為你寫好，不計(jì)入總詞數(shù)

13、 詞數(shù)：5060左右 Key words: toy, lovely, go with（1）審題（要求學(xué)生根據(jù)作文話題找到以下的相應(yīng)信息）體裁: 感謝卡（書信格式）人稱: 第三、一人稱時(shí)態(tài): 一般過(guò)去時(shí)，一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)結(jié)構(gòu): 兩段要求:字?jǐn)?shù)：60詞左右內(nèi)容：列出要點(diǎn)（2）列提綱/要點(diǎn)/關(guān)鍵詞（要求學(xué)生試著來(lái)歸納要點(diǎn)并劃出關(guān)鍵詞）Paragraph1: 非常感謝上周日你來(lái)參加我的生日晚會(huì)。（thank sb for sth; take part in） 我很高興在我生日的時(shí)候有你的陪伴。（be happy to do, be accompanied by sb）你送給我的玩具熊真的很可愛(ài)，我很喜歡。(

14、the toy bear, very lovely) 我想邀請(qǐng)你本周六晚上六點(diǎn)和我一起去看部新電影。(invite sb to do sth, go with sb,see a new movie) 據(jù)說(shuō)那部電影非常的振奮人心。(it is said that, exciting)我想那部電影是值得一看的。(be worth doing)你愿意和我一起去看嗎？（would you like to do, go with sb）Paragraph2: 我盼望著你的答復(fù)。（look forward to doing）（3）連詞成句（要求學(xué)生根據(jù)關(guān)鍵詞寫出完整的句子）Paragraph1: Than

15、k you very much for taking part in my birthday party last Sunday. I was very happy to be accompanied by you at my birthday party. The toy bear which you gave me is very lovely. I like it very much. I want to invite you to see a new movie with me at 6:00 pm this Saturday. It is said that the movie is

16、 very exciting. I think the movie is worth watching. Would you like to go with me?Paragraph2:I am looking forward to your reply.(4)連句成篇（讓學(xué)生讀一讀下面這篇文章，說(shuō)說(shuō)讀后的感受）Thank you very much for taking part in my birthday party last Sunday. I was very happy to be accompanied by you at my birthday party. The toy b

17、ear which you gave me is very lovely. I like it very much. I want to invite you to see a new movie with me at 6:00 pm this Saturday. It is said that the movie is very exciting. I think the movie is worth watching. Would you like to go with me?I am looking forward to your reply.【設(shè)計(jì)意圖】：教學(xué)生如何做寫作前的準(zhǔn)備，重點(diǎn)

18、展示如何抓住要點(diǎn)并進(jìn)行適度有效的拓展，然后根據(jù)列出的要點(diǎn)劃出關(guān)鍵詞，接下來(lái)連詞成句，連句成篇。然后讓學(xué)生談?wù)勛x完這篇后的感覺(jué)，說(shuō)說(shuō)可做什么樣的改動(dòng)來(lái)提升。（5）潤(rùn)色修正（引導(dǎo)學(xué)生找出一些句子之間的關(guān)系，然后讓學(xué)生說(shuō)出一些表示句與句之間關(guān)系的詞匯并使用它們是原文有所改變） I was very happy to be accompanied by you at my birthday party. The toy bear which you gave me is very lovely. I like it very much. I was happy because you accompan

19、ied me at my birthday party. Whats more, you gave me a toy bear which is so lovely that I like it very much.(I was happy because you not only accompanied me at my birthday party but also sent me a toy bear which is so lovely that I like it very much.)表示并列關(guān)系的詞匯： and, not onlybut also,eitheror, neithe

20、rnor,whats more, in addition, besides等。表示順序的：firstly, secondly, thirdly, lastly, finally, last but not the least等。 Thank you very much for taking part in my birthday party last Sunday. I was happy because you accompanied me at my birthday party. Whats more, you gave me a toy bear which is so lovely

21、that I like it very much. So I want to invite you to see a new movie with me at 6:00 pm this Saturday. It is said that the movie is very exciting.表示因果關(guān)系的詞匯：so, so that, thus, therefore, as a result等表示轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系的詞匯：but, however, yet, while等 I think the movie is worth watching. As far as I am concerned, the movie is worth watching.表示自己觀點(diǎn)的詞匯：in my opinion, as far as I am concerned, I think, from my point of view等（6）定稿Dear Li Mei, Thank you for coming to my birthday party last Sunday. I was happy because you accompanied me at my birthday party. Whats more, you gave me a