1、my favorite bookwrite a cause-and-effect paragraph in at least 110 words. 要求：1. 必須是一個完整的段落（不是篇章）；2. 必須采用因果分析法；3. 必須有主題句；4. 原因分析是否充分。精修范文一：作者：馮杰張瑞i専陳雪艷 郭齊圖（管理加強班）my favorite book is a dream in the red mansions. the reasons why i like it are as follows: firstly , there are many vivid characters in thi

2、s book, and each has special features, which attnicts great attention of readers- secondly, it teaches me to run after my love bravely. after reading it, i am looking forward to finding a free and sweet love at right time. last but most importantly, the distinctive ideas of the writer breaks the tra

3、ditional views in that feudalist society, leading us to think about the world in a critical way. therefore, it is such an excellent book that i strongly advise you to read it、and i am sure youtl like it.comments :木文能按照耍求展開段落，條理淸晰，有明顯的開頭句和結(jié)尾句，二個原因的選 取也較為恰當。不足z處是第三條原因的描述不夠清晰具體，增加一些內(nèi)容會更 好。精修范文二：作者：張勝男薛

4、二妮（2011教育加二）essay score: 3.3 out of 5organization: 3.5development: 2.7sentence structure: 3.5word choice/grammar usage: 3.5mechanics: 3.5always make an in-depth analysis of anyethingmy favorite book is the adventures of sherlock holmes. it was written by an english famous writer sir arthur conan doy

5、le.（此處如果能夠簡要描述其故事梗 概就更完美了。）the reasons are as follows: first, the leading character in the novel personae sherlock holmes is a very careful, brave,_and resourceful person, he could though his own observation.whenever he encountered a complicated law case, he would make hay while the sun shines and f

6、ind a way out of all difficulty. second, he could think so early and understand so much! he could read other people's thoughts as easily as writing on a wall. sherlock holmes once said, with a laugh, that people had windows in their faces and that he could see through them. sometimes he read peo

7、ple's thought in ways that surprised people very much besidesthe profound friendship between dr.john h.watson and sherlock holmes is worth admiration、they are so concerned with each other. in a word, i think the adventures of sherlock is a book full of wisdom, if you have time, you can read it i

8、n your off-hour. indeed it can not only make reading more enjoyable but also help you extend your scope of knowledge, 擴展矢口識血和提高文 化水平是一對兒上卜義關(guān)系，故在此做了改動。）comments :木文內(nèi)容充實，論述清晰，用詞豐富，收尾部分如果再改進些就更好了。精修范文三：作者：王方利李亞麗劉丹丹（化學加強班）essay score: 2.5 out of 5orga nizati on: 1.8development: 1.8sente nee structure: 2

9、.7word choice/grammar usage: 2.7 mechanics: 3.5my favorite book is pride and prejudice written by jane austen.（此處如果能 夠簡要描述其故韋梗概就更完美了。）the reasons are as follows: in the first place, i am crazy about the main character elizabeth, whose intelligence left a deep impression on me. at the same time, i am

10、 also deeply touched by her generosity and enthusiasm. in the second place, the book severely criticized the dark society by describing a love story. its description is so vivid that i can not help reading the book again and again. besides. i am interested in the language of the book、and fi om this

11、book i come to appreciate the charm of english language, a world so wonderful that makes me forget the great burden of learning a foreign language. （既然要談及 h 己 喜歡具語言，那么接下來就應該提供細節(jié)說明其魅力的貝體表現(xiàn)）。in factnot only does the book teach me much knowledge of english, but it also make me understand that we should

12、 keep calm and handle any difficult situation wisely, just like elizabeth.（結(jié)合上文提及的三點喜歡的原i大i作總結(jié)收尾。）and pride and prejudice is really worth reading.comments :木文內(nèi)容充實，論述較為清晰，能夠使用連接詞合理安排素材。如果在上下 文的呼應方面改進些技巧的使用就更好了，例如收尾部分應該圍繞上文提及的 要點來總結(jié)。精修范文四：作者：陳磊劉騰飛孫國帥席詩瓊（2011物理加一）essay score: 3.3 out of 5organization:

13、2.7development: 3.5sentence structure: 2.7word choice/grammar usage: 4.3mechanics: 3.5my favorite book is the making of a hero, which tells us a story about a a soldier of the soviet union named baoe匚 i like this book because baoer is a strong person. we can learn many precious personalities，which w

14、e don't have, from him. when some important things were wrong, the other people always said,_hno!_no! we cant do it._it*s too difficult.n_but baoer saidjno problem,_we can do it_when baoer met some difficult things, the other people would said "it's too hard for us. i don't want to

15、do it any more.n but baoer always said._hlet me have a try, i think we can do it.this spirit of baoer moved me. i like baoer very much仝o i like this book. every night before i go to bed i usually read it.i hope i could become a person like baoer one day.comments：本文論述簡潔，表述淸晰，收尾簡單明了。如果能在個別語言表達上再改進參考范文

16、2：作者：張勝男薛二妮（2011教育加二）essay score: 3.3 out of 5organization: 3.5development: 2.7sentence structure: 3.5word choice/grammar usage: 3.5 mechanics: 3.5my favorite book is the adventures of sherlock holmes. it was written by an english famous writer sir arthur conan doyle. the reasons eare as follows: fi

17、rst, the leading character in the novel personae sherlock holmes is a very careful, brave, and resourceful person, he could always make an in-dedth analysis of anything though his own observation. whenever he encountered a complicated law case, he would make hay while the sun shines and find a way o

18、ut of all difficulty. second, he could think so early and understand so much! he could read other people's thoughts as easily as writing on a wall. sherlock holmes once said, with a laugh, that people had windows in their faces and that he could see through them sometimes he read people's th

19、ough in ways that surprised people very much besides, the profound friendship between dr.john h.watson and sherlock holmes is worth admiraiion, they are so concerned with each other. in a word, i think the adventures of sherlock is a book full of wisdom，if you have time, you can read it in your off-

20、hour. indeed it can not only make reading more enjoyable but also help you extend your scope of knowledze.（擴展知識而和捉高文化水平是一對兒上下義關(guān)系，故在此做了改 動。）參考范文3：作者：郭超崔少贊侯欣蕾（2011物理加一）as a student, we have a study for many years. during these years, we study chinese, english, science and so on. in this period, with t

21、he improvement of our knowledge, we not only read the book in class but also read extracurricular after school in my opinion dream of the red chamber is the best book i have read. in this book, the great author cao xenon his view about love. he had firmly faith in what is the true love and tries to

22、tell us that there are different kinds of love, only one kind which should be considered as true love.from the stories which are unfolding in the novel, the reader should know the characteristic of the different kind of love, and should be able to distinguish true love from the other kindtrue love i

23、s acceptance, committal, mutual and without any post conditions. the love between lin daily and jia baby is considered to be true love just saying or hearing i love you is not good enough because talk is cheap. action in a mutual commitment is essential, as we can see in the novel.we always have dre

24、ams. what's our dream? do you know what you exactlywant? and do you work hard at it. in this book, you can taste the feeling of the author of his strong will. in his words, you can find the charm of chinese. it is not a book, but a precious deposit. you can get a lot from it. but unfortunately,

25、the novel was never hcompletedn to such a state. on the other hand, maybe, it is another kind of beauty of the book if you have not read this book yet, just go and read it. you will love it.（木文結(jié)尾可以借鑒。）參考范文4：作者:范銳 嚴嬌嬌 王雪麗（2011物理加一）essay score: 3.3 out of 5organization: 3.2development: 3.2sentence str

26、ucture: 3.2word choice/grammar usage: 3.2mechanics: 4my favorite book is how the steel was tempered. i like this book. at the fist time, i have read it. i was attracted by bao. i was very like him, and he is a brave man .he was born in russia. in his youth, he had shown his courage and promise. then

27、 for peace of the russia. the brave man spends his youth on the battle he suffered for the battle, but he never gave up. he is my model whenever i am faced with a problem, the brave man can give me the courage .this is my favorite book, i think you will fall in love with it if you read it. the profe

28、ssional i study is electrical engineering and automation. that means, i can not be a teacher in the future. i am very sad before i read this book. later, my elder brother suggested me to read this book （要圍繞主題展開，此處不要再提及其它書目了）. i read it carefully and thought a lot. just then, i know that i am suppose

29、d to change myself. in this book let me have a high spirit to study my present professional. thanks to this book!參考范文5：作者:李強（2011物理加一）unusual to others, my favorite book is not the sort of artist or the science. actually, it is a magazine which logo is slum dunk.i like play basketball very much with

30、out thinking twice, nba matches is my keen to see, i watched nba games when i was a teen, but when i grow up i face the pressure of high college entrance examination, i have to focus on the text book. so i have little time to relax and seldom have the chance to contact the things which i am fond of.

31、 in order to not lose my interests i choose another way to focus the matches.in this magazine i can admire the nba superstars dribble the basketball with an elegant pose, they full of energy, and they rush all the time. they rise up my passion, this is why i love it so much. owing to this book, i ha

32、ve the chance to see the peak time and share the passion with my classmates, i learn a lot tactics include the foul strategy, i also learn a lot of skills which make a great contribution to me.when i feel bored i will read this book to kill the time thanks to this book, i found the interest i almost

33、 lost.參考范文6：作者：陳夢夢周倩倩 孫圓圓（2011物理加一）essay score: 2.5 out of 5organization: 2.2development: 2.2sentence structure: 3word choice/grammar usage: 2.2mechanics: 3my favorite book is jane eyre. before i read jane eyre, i didn't like reading novel. because i thought novel is so long and it will spend to

34、o much time to read it. but after i reading jane eyre, i was attracked by this book. there are three reasons for this. the first, this novel is a romantic novel. i was moved deeply by jane's love story. the second, a number to factors are lively and character. for example, when i saw jane say, &

35、quot;do you think fm poor not good-looking, without feelings? we are equal/11 was shocked at her words. facing rich and dignity, she put the dignity at the first. she is so brave. the third, from this book, i learned that everyone is equal, even through you are rich or poo匚 owing to the three reason

36、s, i was addicted to this book.參考范文6： 劉明莉小組（2011歷史加二）essay score: 2.5 out of 5organization: 2.5 development: 2.5 sentence structure: 2.5word choice/grammar usage: 2.5mechanics: 2.5my favourite book is green's fair tale. the reason why i like is that it contains many stories and every story shows

37、 a philosophy to people. it's influence me deeply. whenever i think about this book, fll remember my childhood at that time, i was a girl who was innocent and pure. the green's fair tale broaden my horizon the way of question. my brain was full of more strange and create minds. it teach me h

38、ow to grow up an excellent person. if i want to be an excellent person, fll have some good qualities such as smart brave kind-heart and so on. after that, i tried to seek success chance in my life. now, fm an adult.but sometimes i also scan this book, because it benefit much for me. so i like it ver

39、y much.參考范文6：任倩倩小組（2011歷史加二）a lot of people ask me which book is my most favorite one, and i always proudly answer them , which is all history about china this will be a long story for me to read this book. first time i touched this book is when i was 10 years old. my mother bought it to me as my 10

40、-years-old gift. this is a really wonderful present to me,which is opening a history gate to me , a totally innocent boy. i almost forgot the dinner after i read the first page from then on, i was the historist in my class and showed my knowledge from that book to my classmeates. when i became older

41、 and older, i knew more about it and feel more confident about my own china. i am proud that i am a chinese and i will make more effort to build a more powerful country and let chinese history more brilliant. as me, this is the most important book in my life and now i still read it and recite some p

42、art of it. i think everyone should read it and get this wonderful experence.范文五:my favorite book is journey to the west. it mainly tells about four monks* 1 journey to india for buddhist scriptures after having gone through all kinds of difficulties. i like it out of the following reasons. first, it tells a lot of interesting and rewarding stories, which attract me deeply. second, from this book i can learn a lot of knowledge. i hav