1、書面表達指導書面表達指導特別注意：特別注意：1）認真審題認真審題，確定體裁；，確定體裁；2）把握要點，注意自然連貫；）把握要點，注意自然連貫；3）表達有效，）表達有效，適度適度發(fā)揮；要抓住文章的靈魂，即文章發(fā)揮；要抓住文章的靈魂，即文章的內(nèi)容要點，的內(nèi)容要點，合情合理地合情合理地發(fā)揮。發(fā)揮。4）特別要注意良好書寫習慣的養(yǎng)成。）特別要注意良好書寫習慣的養(yǎng)成。書面表達書面表達 隨著高考的臨近，越來越多的學生開始焦慮，他們的健康問題引起隨著高考的臨近，越來越多的學生開始焦慮，他們的健康問題引起越來越多人的關(guān)注。請你根據(jù)以下內(nèi)容，以越來越多人的關(guān)注。請你根據(jù)以下內(nèi)容，以 “ “青少年心理健康問題大青少

2、年心理健康問題大家談家談”為話題為話題 , , 給給 21 21 世紀英文報投稿世紀英文報投稿. .注意注意 :1. 短文必須包括所有要點短文必須包括所有要點 , 可以適當發(fā)揮，可以適當發(fā)揮，行文連貫行文連貫 ; 2. 短文開頭已為你寫好短文開頭已為你寫好 , 不計入總詞數(shù)不計入總詞數(shù) ;3. 詞數(shù)詞數(shù) 120 左右。左右。參考詞匯參考詞匯 :psychological 心理心理 ( 上上 ) 的的 consultant 提供咨詢的專家提供咨詢的專家（另注另注：少于：少于100詞，扣詞，扣2分。）分。）【參考范文】 with the national entrance examination

3、coming on, more and more graduating students suffer from various kinds of anxieties. some cannot eat or sleep well and fail to concentrate on their studies. some are afraid of taking exams and others even lose hope for their future life. 列舉焦慮的現(xiàn)象，用列舉焦慮的現(xiàn)象，用some. someand others平行結(jié)構(gòu)平行結(jié)構(gòu)，表達比較清晰，語氣貫通。，表達

4、比較清晰，語氣貫通。 最后一點用最后一點用even一詞一詞，說明焦慮的嚴重性需要引起說明焦慮的嚴重性需要引起大家的重視。大家的重視。 the causes of the mental problems above may include too much school work, high expectations from the teachers and the parents and lack of physical exercise and communication. 說明焦慮的起因，用三個并列的說明焦慮的起因，用三個并列的名詞短語，名詞短語，表達簡練。表達簡練。 簡單的一個簡單的一

5、個above起到了承上的作用。起到了承上的作用。 句中用了句中用了may一詞，可以避免給人主觀臆斷的感覺。一詞，可以避免給人主觀臆斷的感覺。 同時范文對同時范文對pressure具體化的拓展，使內(nèi)容相對飽滿。具體化的拓展，使內(nèi)容相對飽滿。 what should we do to solve these problems? in my opinion, firstly we should take more exercise and learn to relax ourselves. secondly, we are supposed to talk to our friends about

6、our problems and seek advice from psychological consultants. meanwhile, schools should set up special offices to help students solve their mental problems. parents should also care more about the mental health of their children. only by doing so can we solve these problems. ( 148 words ) 如何解決焦慮的問題應(yīng)是

7、闡述的重點。范文根據(jù)所給的提示，如何解決焦慮的問題應(yīng)是闡述的重點。范文根據(jù)所給的提示，針對第二段的針對第二段的causes，從，從students，schools，parents三三方面提出了問題的解決之道。方面提出了問題的解決之道。 句首的句首的設(shè)問句設(shè)問句，給人留下思考的空間，也使短文更富有活力。，給人留下思考的空間，也使短文更富有活力。 firstly，secondly等等表示順序、時間（表示順序、時間（meanwhile）、遞進）、遞進（also）的連接詞的使用使結(jié)構(gòu)連貫、層次分明、脈絡(luò)清晰。）的連接詞的使用使結(jié)構(gòu)連貫、層次分明、脈絡(luò)清晰。 最后用倒裝句結(jié)束短文，比較最后用倒裝句結(jié)束短

8、文，比較“給力給力”。問題與錯誤問題與錯誤1. 審題問題：審題問題： 此點重點在于寫此點重點在于寫 phenomena，即，即焦慮現(xiàn)象（焦慮現(xiàn)象（焦慮焦慮的表現(xiàn)形式），的表現(xiàn)形式），不能只寫不能只寫焦慮什么焦慮什么。some feel worried that they will perform badly in the exam. some worry about the results of the examination , which are vital for them since this determines their future admission to a high qu

9、ality university. 范文：范文： some cannot eat or sleep well and fail to concentrate on their studies. some are afraid of taking exams and others even lose hope for their future life.2. 沒有沒有適當適當、合情合理地合情合理地發(fā)揮展開發(fā)揮展開 what causes the problems? pressure is the root. as a grade-three student, the pressure comes

10、 from many parts of your life, such as yourself, your parents, and the teachers (what pressure?) parents should take care about (of) the food the graduating students eat.3. 詞法、句法、語法等錯誤不勝枚舉，僅列舉些許：詞法、句法、語法等錯誤不勝枚舉，僅列舉些許：1) 用詞不當用詞不當 first, pressure from their parents is the most important reason (cause)

11、. 2) 搭配搭配/用法錯誤用法錯誤 why do they worry so many things? worry worry about / over worry (that) -clause be worried about / by /(that) -clause many students lack of communication. lack communication. (a) lack of communication with others is blamed for their anxiety. there are too many things being worried

12、. there are too many things to worry about. 3)詞類不分詞類不分 and that beyond our reach. and that is beyond our reach. (超出我們的承受能力超出我們的承受能力) 4) 缺乏一致缺乏一致 and a lack of communication is another cause, which contribute to more nerves /nervousness / anxiety. contributes toas a student, we should arrange our tim

13、e well. students5) 中式英語中式英語 so how should we do to deal with the problem? what6) 成分殘缺成分殘缺 ; 殘缺句殘缺句so what is the cause make them feel so down? so what is the cause that makes them feel so down (anxious)?there are three main causes lead to the problem. first the pressure from endless homework which m

14、ay exhaust them out there are three main causes leading to the problem. the first is the pressure from endless homework, which may exhaust them / wear (tire) them out.7) 懸垂修飾語懸垂修飾語: 錯用非謂語等形式，和主語不能構(gòu)成邏錯用非謂語等形式，和主語不能構(gòu)成邏輯關(guān)系輯關(guān)系 in order to reduce the anxieties, here are some solutions. in order to reduce

15、 the anxieties, i propose/ put forward/ suggest some solutions.8) 接排句接排句(句子之間沒有標點符號和句間連接詞或用逗句子之間沒有標點符號和句間連接詞或用逗號連接）：號連接）： some of them are worried about their study, they are afraid of failing in the examination. some of them are worried about their study and (they are) afraid of failing in the exam

16、ination. some of them are worried about their study. they are afraid of failing in the examination.內(nèi)容要點內(nèi)容要點de不同方式表達不同方式表達1. 焦慮焦慮現(xiàn)象現(xiàn)象 范文：范文： some cannot eat or sleep well and fail to concentrate on their studies. some are afraid of taking exams and others even lose hope for their future life. 其它：其它：

17、some worry about the failure of a test (their failure to pass the exam/ examination failure /failure in the examination). if they dont perform well in a test, they may lose their appetite or cant sleep well in (the) night (或或at night) . some seem to forget everything when they are taking an exam. 其它

18、：其它： some are troubled by the gaps between their parents and themselves, leading to the arguments in their daily life. some are troubled by a bad mood, leading to the arguments in their daily life. l some students are so worried that they couldnt sleep well at night. some students are afraid of exam

19、inations because they get poor grades always. some students even want to commit suicide when they fail in the exam. some students are so worried that they cant sleep well at night. some students are afraid of examinations because they always get poor grades. and some others even want to commit suici

20、de when they fail in the exam.2. 焦慮的焦慮的起因起因 范文：范文： the causes of the mental problems above may include too much school work, high expectations from the teachers and the parents and lack of physical exercise and communication. 其它：其它： the cause of anxiety is pushy parents high expectations and pressur

21、e for academic achievement. is that parents expect too much from their children. is that parents expect high standards from their children. anxiety is directly related to academic difficulties among some students.其它：其它： what causes us to be anxious? the pressure from the whole family may play the ma

22、in role. their expectation is sometimes too high for us to live up to (達到達到 ) whats more, lack of communication increases our anxieties. whats more, lack of communication is another big problem. we can imagine how awful(人）不舒服的；不安的人）不舒服的；不安的 ) we are if we keep all the sadness to ourselves.() 其它：其它：

23、what are the causes of the problem (problems mentioned above)?.secondly lack of communication with others can cause teenagers anxieties. (nowadays) students are too busy with their homework to talk with their parents, friends and teachers.(劉爍潔劉爍潔)3.解決辦法解決辦法 學生方面：學生方面： 范文：范文： in my opinion, firstly w

24、e should take more exercise and learn to relax ourselves. secondly, we are supposed to talk to our friends about our problems and seek advice from psychological consultants. 其它：其它： we students should learn to laugh in the face of anxieties (笑對焦慮笑對焦慮) and smile at ourselves. well feel better if we ha

25、ve confidence in ourselves. if necessary, we can turn to psychological consultants. () facing the above problems, we ought to find some effective measures to cope with them. first of all, we students must learn to relax ourselves through doing some sports, listening to music and so on. “all work and

26、 no play makes jack a dull boy, (只工作，不玩耍，聰明小只工作，不玩耍，聰明小伙也變傻。伙也變傻。) ” as old saying goes. ()學生方面：學生方面： we students should learn to be confident when facing any challenges. we can also turn to psychological consultants for help. () we students can communicate with psychological consultants to seek for

27、 some solutions to our problems. we shouldnt always think exams are what life is all about（人生不只（人生不只是考試）是考試）. （）（） we students should adjust our attitude towards the examination. it is only of the many challenges in our life and we dont need to be nervous. ()學校方面：學校方面： 范文：范文： meanwhile, schools shou

28、ld set up special offices to help students solve their mental problems. 其它：其它： some preventive activities aimed at students mental health can be selectively introduced to schools to help reduce their anxiety. at school students can be taught how to manage stress and anxiety. in addition, schools can invite some consultants to give the students some advice on/about how to solve their psychological problems. () schools can or