熱考話題6關愛鄰里[2020新高考I]TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline，somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.Sheknewtheyhadproblems，andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime，shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasamansickinbed，hiswife，whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork，andtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboy—hisnamewasBernard—hadinterestedherverymuch."Iwishyoucouldseehim，"shesaidtoherownchildren，John，Harry，andClara."Heissuchahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney，butIdon’tseewhathecando."Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom，thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard."Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney，"saidClara."Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.""SodoI，"saidHarry."Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem."Forsomemoments，Johnsaidnothing，but，suddenly，hesprangtohisfeetandcried，"Ihaveagreatidea！Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish（完成）."Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea，itwassuretobeagoodone."Itellyouwhatwecando，"saidJohn."YouknowthatbigboxofcornUncleJohnsentus？Well，wecanmakepopcorn（爆米花），andputitintopaperbags，andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit."WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn’sidea，shethoughtitwasagoodone，too.Witheverythingready，Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.人物主要人物Mrs.Meredith，herthreechildren（John，Harry，Clara）：從文中的描述"amostkindandthoughtfulwoman""spentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor""bringfoodandmedicinetothem""Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem"可知，Mrs.Meredith一家人善良、樂于助人。續寫部分可通過動作、行為等描寫延續他們的這一特點。主要人物Bernard：文中對Bernard的描述"Heissuchahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney"體現了他勤勞、孝順、懂事，為續寫第二段他賣出爆米花，得到足夠貼補家用的錢奠定了基調。情節及情感線Mrs.Meredith經常幫助貧困者（她很有同情心）→她告訴孩子們關于一個貧困家庭的情況（孩子們很關心）→孩子們討論如何幫助Bernard（很想提供幫助）→John想到了一個好辦法（孩子們開心、興奮）主題本文主要講了Mrs.Meredith鼓勵孩子們去幫助Bernard一家的故事，文章最終的主題應該展現鄰里之間互助互愛。續寫第一段Mrs.Meredith認為John出了個好主意，接下來應講述孩子們得到Mrs.Meredith的肯定后采取的行動以及Bernard一家對John這個主意的反應。尾句銜接續寫第二段提示語：他們幫助Bernard制作好了爆米花。本段側重通過對人物間對話、動作、表情等的描寫推動故事情節的發展。續寫第二段Bernard開始了他的新營生，接著應講述Bernard賣爆米花的情況：如何售賣，在哪里賣，賣給誰，在這個過程中Bernard的感受如何。再根據續寫故事"結局圓滿"的原則可知，Bernard最終通過賣爆米花掙到了錢，因此本段可側重描寫Bernard的心理感受和變化。結尾部分適當升華主題：Bernard表達感恩，鄰里關系和諧。1.TheywenttotellBernardtheplan.①用can’twait代替句中的go，凸顯他們激動、急切的心情。Theycouldn’twaittotellBernardtheplan.②為句①補充地點狀語，將場景從Meredith家轉移到Bernard家。Theycouldn’twaittocallatBernard’shouseandtoldBernardtheplan.③將句②中告訴Bernard他們的計劃，改寫為現在分詞短語作狀語的形式，使語法結構更豐富。Theycouldn’twaittocallatBernard’shouse，tellingBernardtheplan.2.Theyweretouched.①將人物聚焦到情感更易外露的Bernard母親身上，并用burstintotears凸顯感動的程度，營造畫面感。Bernard’smotherwastouched，andburstintotears.②用so...that...引導結果狀語從句改寫句①，使句子內部關系更緊密。Bernard’smotherwassotouchedthatsheburstintotears.③用倒裝句式升級句②，使句子更高級。SotouchedwasBernard’smotherthatsheburstintotears.3.Hispopcornwaspopular.①補充原因狀語，說明為什么受歡迎，使文章邏輯更嚴密。Hispopcornwaspopularforitslowpriceaswellastheniceflavor.②為句①增加結果，凸顯受歡迎的程度。Hispopcornwaspopularforitslowpriceaswellastheniceflavor，sobagsofpopcornweresoldout.③利用句式（it’snotlongbefore）改寫句②爆米花賣完的情況，進一步說明爆米花受歡迎的程度。Hispopcornwaspopularforitslowpriceaswellastheniceflavor，soitwasnotlongbeforebagsofpopcornweresoldout.WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn’sidea，shethoughtitwasagoodone，too.Havinggottheapprovaloftheirmother，thechildrenbegantocarryouttheplanhappily.Earlyinthemorning，theycouldn’twaittocallat（迫不及待地去拜訪）Bernard’shouse，tellingBernardtheplan.SotouchedwasBernard’smotherthatsheburstintotears（Bernard的母親感動得熱淚盈眶）.Afterwards，theygotdowntomakingpreparations（著手做準備）togetherwithBernard.Soonafter，theysucceededinmakingpopcornandpackeditwithpaperbags.Witheverythingready，Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Hewentdoortodooraroundthecommunitywherehelived，nervousandanxiousalongtheway（一路上既緊張又不安）.Muchtohisastonishment（令他非常驚訝的是），hispopcornwasverypopularforitslowpriceaswellastheniceflavor.Itwasnotlongbeforebagsof