高考英語讀后續寫語篇練習友情故事——欺凌者的改變之路1題目分析讀后續寫題目再現范文呈現努力方向2Part1題目呈現3續寫原文“Don’tlethimgetaway,”shoutedHassantoMoizastheywerechasingtheirneighborUsman.MoizandHassanwerethehatefulbullies(欺凌者)intheirneighborhood.Usmanwasasweetguywholovedreading.Hedidn’thavemanyfriends,buthehadhisbookswithhimallthetime.Thatdayhewascomingbackfromthebookshoparoundthecomerwithafewnewinterestingbooksandanoldnotebookinhand.Thetwobullieswereimpatientlywaitingtoteasesomeoneinthestreet.AsUsmancrossedthemwithoutpayingmuchattention,theymadehimtheirtarget.Theystartedtochasehim,pullinghisshirtandcallinghimnames.Usmankeptwalkingwithoutlookingbackatthem.Hejustwantedtogethome.WhileUsmanwasfocusedonjustgettinghome,hedidn’trealizehowclosetheyhadcometohim.Inhishurry,hedroppedhisnotebook.Hassanleanedtopickupthenotebookforthesakeofteasinghim.Usmancouldn’tlethisnotebookbeinsomeoneelse’spossession.So,hepushedHassanback,pickedupthenotebookandranasfastashecould,butHassanwasnotgoingtoletthisgo.HeranafterhimandMoizfollowedhim.4續寫原文Theycaughthimnearhishouse.Hassangrabbedthenotebookfromhim.Whenheopenedthenotebook,hesawthatUsmanhadwrittensomethinginit.ThinkingthatitwasUsman’sdiaryandhewouldlearnafewsecrets,Hassanstartedreadingwithinterest.Afterafewminutes,Hassanhadtearsinhiseyes.HefeltterriblysorryandhuggedUsmanapologetically,andthenhewalkedawaywithMoiz.“Hassan,whatdidyoudo?Wechasedhimfornothing.”Moizwasangry.Hassan’ssoftnessconfusedhim.“Saysomething,whatwasinthatnotebook?”“WhatIreadjustnowisbeyondyourunderstanding.”Hassansighedwithaheavyheart.5段首句Para1:Infact,therewasastoryaboutabullyinUsman’snotebook.Para2:Afterthatday,theoncetroublesomeandupsettingHassanandMoizdisappeared.6Part2題目分析7點1：位于續寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語；點2：位于續寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點3：位于續寫第二段段首，續寫銜接第二段段首語；點4：文章結尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強調主題。情節構建的重點8續寫思路分析文章以事件發展為線索，講述了發生在兩個欺凌者——莫伊茲和哈桑，與鄰居小孩烏斯曼——一個愛讀書的小孩，之間的故事。故事發生時，兩個惡霸少年正在街道上戲弄某個人，當烏斯曼經過他們時，他們就把烏斯曼當成了目標。他們便從后面追趕烏斯曼。而一心只想回家的烏斯曼，并沒注意到兩個惡霸正在接近他。匆忙之間，烏斯曼的隨身攜帶的筆記本掉落在地上。哈桑俯身撿起了筆記本，為了拿回筆記本，烏斯曼把哈桑推回去，拿起筆記本后便拼命跑。但兩個惡霸少年不罷休，趕上烏斯曼后，從他手里搶走筆記本。在哈桑讀了筆記本中的內容后，他熱淚盈眶并對他的行為感到非常抱歉，擁抱烏斯曼，和莫伊茲離開了。他告訴莫伊慈筆記本中寫著一些內容。9續寫思路分析Para1：Infact,therewasastoryaboutabullyinUsman’snotebook.由第一段首句內容“聽到這些，我覺得我的臉變紅了。”可知，第一段可描寫作者為收到這樣的禮物而感到尷尬，因此，和周圍同學一起嘲笑這個“洋娃娃”。這時候，送禮物的羅謝爾難過的跑出去，作者才知道，自己的秘密朋友是她。10續寫思路分析Para2:Afterthatday,theoncetroublesomeandupsettingHassanandMoizdisappeared.由第二段首句內容“那天之后，曾經麻煩不斷的哈桑和莫伊茲消失了。”可知，第二段可描寫兩人成為了公眾眼里的好人，他們幫助人并志愿提供服務，對自己的改變感到驕傲。11續寫思路分析續寫線索一個欺凌的故事——兩個少年截停了一個頭發卷曲的女孩——女孩帶著給無家可歸奶奶的披薩——三人一起送披薩——兩個小伙的改變——他們主動幫忙并提供服務，成為朋友——贏得公眾的贊譽——兩人感到驕傲12續寫素材可用詞匯：行為類①注意：payattentionto/catchsightof/observe②致力于：concentrateon/buryoneselfinsth.③義務做：offersth.withoutexpectingreward/onone'sowninitiative情緒類①感動：moved/bringsb.totears②渴望：beeagerfor/aspire/thirstyfor13續寫素材可用句型：[高分句型1].Themaincharactersofthestorywereaboutthetwohatefulguys,wholearnedfromotherstobullyagirlforthefirsttime.（由who引導的非限制性定語從句）[高分句型2].Hearingthatitwasahamburgerforahomelessgrannywholongedtohaveonetomakeherstomachfullonherbirthday,thetwoguysweretouchedandcarriedthepackagetothehomelessgrannywiththekindgirl.（運用了現在分詞作狀語和關系代詞who引導的定語從句。）14Part3范文呈現15范文呈現Infact,therewasastoryaboutabullyinUsman’snotebook.Themaincharactersofthestorywereaboutthetwohatefulguys,wholearnedfromotherstobullyagirlforthefirsttime.Astheunluckygirlwithadarkandcurlyhairswasstopped,theynoticedapackageunderherarms.Itwasbeautifullydecoratedandwrappedwithasilkribbon.Hearingthatitwasapizzaforahomelessgrannywholongedforonetomakeherstomachfullonherbirthday,thetwoguysweretouchedandcarriedthepackagetothehomelessgrannywiththekindgirl.16范文呈現Afterthatday,theoncetroublesomeandupsettingHassanandMoizdisappeared.Instead,theyearnedthemselvesatitleof“GoodGuy”fromthepublic.Theydevotedthemselvestogivingothersahelpinghandandvolunteeredtoofferservicewhenevertheywereavailable.Notonlytheteachersbutalsothestudents,whooncewerebulliedbythetwoguys,praisedandthoughthighlyoftheirbehaviors.Theycompletelyturnedandwereproudofbeingthecharacterslikedbythepublic.17范文譯文事實上，烏斯曼的筆記本上有一個關于惡霸的故事。故事的主角是兩個可惡的家伙，他們第一次向別人學習欺負一個女孩。當那個頭發烏黑卷曲的倒霉女孩被攔住時，他們注意到她腋下有一個包裹。它裝飾精美，用絲帶包裹著。聽說這是給一位無家可歸的老奶奶的披薩，她渴望在生日那天吃一個能讓她飽腹的披薩，兩個人很感動，和好心的女孩一起把包裹遞給了無家可歸的老爺爺。18范文譯文